The Deepest cuts can make the best wounds so you don't make the same mistakes but, what cuts are worth getting.
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far away from the land of equestria where ponies rarely venture there is a small valley with a small village not far from that village is a cave, a cave where rumor of a mighty dragon sleeps. but many do not know of its other occupant, one that could bring untolled death to all yet this other doesn't even know how dangerous they are. come join the adventure of self discovery, sorrow and magic.
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Putting this to read-later, will come back in few hours! The summary looks so good
So far so good.
The only problem I could find is that you don't capitalize some letters when you start a sentence. Other than that, it seems like an interesting read so far.
6316681 Good to know ill fix that.
There are a number of incorrect words that spell check likely overlooked as they were technically spelled correctly. One example would be the word hole instead of whole. It also feels a bit fast paced so far as well if the entire story continues on at the same rate of speed it is currently. Overall it's a fairly decent beginning however.
Hello, Serebii!
I took the time to give you some feedback. It's here! Hopefully, other people will give you some feedback too. It's only the first seven paragraphs though. Better to take it in chunks, I think! Do you think it'll help you?
6317821 thanks for letting me know and the next chapter slows things down a bit.
6318143 that does help but, some of it was a bit confusing. I did understand most of it.
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Not my intention to confuse! What did you find confusing?
Is there anything that's unclear, but not confusing, that you would like to hear more about? Through examples and the like.
You can drag select in that document, and add comments using the comment button, which is near the middle of the toolbar. You should be able to reply to my comments as well, there is a button near the end of the comments for that. This way, you can highlight anything confusing in the edited version or ask questions. Or reply to one of the comments, telling me what's confusing with it. But it is up to you to make use of those two.