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Haoryu Changer


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This takes place before "Twilight's Kingdom".


When one gets abused, neglected, and unnoticed too much it can affect them massively. This is what a small dragon living among ponies had to face, sadly. And sometimes, consequences can be brutal, and coincidences can be frightening.

Follow Spike, Twilight, and the rest as all of their lives change.


Cover Art is from yours truely.

Chapters (51)
Comments ( 299 )

A bit rushed, but I've seen a lot worst.

And Twilight you should never assume. When people assume it usually comes back to haunt them, especially in this kind of fanfics.

Comment posted by BetaHammer deleted May 11th, 2015

Good for Spike for letting Twilight have it! :flutterrage: She should be truly ashamed of herself for how she not only treated Spike in the past, but those pathetic, heartless, cruel responses she mad. looking forward to more.

Little tweak at the end of the story. Just something Spike said right after he ran away. :moustache:

OH MAH GAWSH DIS IS AMAZING MORE PLEASE IF U WONT IM GONNA DIIEE D:

Comment posted by BetaHammer deleted May 11th, 2015

5965482 Yep it's there, but I swear i didn't put it there and I removed it. Just ignore the story notification.

Comment posted by BetaHammer deleted May 11th, 2015

Nice chapter. I think you did a great job. Good luck with the next one. I can't wait to see what Spike does when he get the letter.

Another great chapter, but it did show the dense, thick-head that Twilight does have :facehoof: It took her that long to notice that Spike was not in the picture, and to realize the meaning of what Spike said before he ran out. Also, I am just upset at how the others, and in my honest opinion don't feel that worried about Spike being missing :twilightangry2:.

Rainbow Dash saying that they'll have a little talk really upsets me, because it sounds like to me that she believes that Spike has explaining to do. That is how it just sounded to me. And Applejack doesn't even sound concerned for Spike running out, but just a silly reason for Twilight to go overboard or overreact. And I love her to death, she is my favorite pony, but how can Fluttershy say that she didn't even notice that he was being left out :fluttershbad:

And I wonder what is going to happen with the letter and where Spike ran off too. :fluttershysad:

YOU CAN'T HIDE THE TRUTH!!





(jk just realized my comments were posted after finishing the latest chapter:derpytongue2: )

:raritystarry: Spike found me!
:twilightsheepish: You found Spike!
:fluttercry: He said he found Rarity. . .
:twilightsmile: You found Spike!
:applejackconfused: Spike found Rares. . .
:moustache: I found Rarity. . .
:twilightoops: Spike?
:rainbowlaugh: He's hangin with a marsh mellow!
:twilightangry2: Spike!
:raritywink: He always liked me anyway...
:facehoof:

Suck a great story there are not many stories where spike runs away so keep up the good work and hope you have a great day/night
Demur signing off

Another great, and entertaining chapter too :twilightsmile: Yet, Twilight doesn't seem too worried about Spike in my opinion, because I felt she was more worried about the ponies helping to search for Spike :facehoof: And Celestia, don't get me started on her, she's worse than Twilight, treating Spike as only a source of communicating to Twilight instead of considering him a friend, or in some cases maybe a son or something close like that. Looking forward to what happens next.

Rushed and sloppy, but it still works. I really can't say more than that because I've seen this premise so many times. I still like the premise, though, so I'm gonna keep reading.

5975111 Thanks for being honest, but what do you mean "premise"? Not getting mad, I just never heard that word before. Lol

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According to Lauren Faust, Celestia actually IS the closest thing to a mother-figure that Spike's ever had, by virtue of the fact that she took care of him until Twilight was old enough to handle the responsibility of doing it herself.

5975416 You just guessed what Spike's gonna say in the next chapter.

Well, at least Rarity and Rainbow Dash finally realized what they have done in contributing to upsetting Spike. Another great chapter, but now I am scared for Spike, and worried about what Armak is going to do to him. Also, Celestia... :facehoof: this is why Luna is my favorite princess, because I know Luna would notice right away that Spike is missing.

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A premise is basically the set-up for a story, in this case, Spike getting fed up with being mistreated and leaving.

Join the dark side spike,
We have fire rubies :pinkiecrazy:

I actually can sense true concern now from Twilight as she couldn't sleep during the night, and kept on thinking on what Spike said, so I am feeling for Twilight, and I hope the fences between her and Spike can be mended. However, still the dumb, thick-headed princess Celestia couldn't have figured it out that Spike was the only one missing from the group? :rainbowhuh: I mean come on Celestia, you're supposed to be like a mother to Spike, yet you completely forget about him until his name is mentioned :flutterrage:!

Also, good for spike for not joining Armak, but I have a bad feeling of what's going to happen next. I can see Twilight's reaction to the letter from Armak if it mentions Spike, but for Celestia, she might shrug it off.

So what's the Romance Tag for? Is Spike going to devlope stockholm syndrome!? (showing love to there captors.)

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Reverse captor love syndrome?
Spike gets let out because amrok whoops, amark starts getting flustery around spike and we get a nice rare sweet m/m ship story to counter the tintanics of f/f and oc/f shipfics

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Awwh
Aw well, i await the next chapter...

This is a great story on spike! I always felt bad for spike and that life wasn't fair for him. I can't believe twilight assumed he was just blowing off steam and will come back to his senses.

I'm enjoying this very much! I wish something like this happened in the animated series. I frown at when spike is not in the picture of the mane six altogether.

I always wonder why do they keep forgetting him and leaving him out most of the time.

Oh no a new threat is coming to equestria! And the worst part is wherever spike is princess celestias warning message will be late than ever.

Good spike rejected armak's offer to join him in conjuring equestria. I can't wait for the next chapter!

I'm glad twilight told everypony on why spike ran away and they all felt guilty for how they treated him.

Another great chapter :twilightsmile: I love Fluttershy, I do, but was a very dense head comment she mad about when they save Spike, they are going to have a talk with him and get this all sorted out. I feel that in a way, and it sounded to me that she was saying that Spike is the one to blame and he needs to answer for why he ran away :facehoof: And Twilight?! When you say everything goes back to normal, you really mean that Spike will be like your little slave and won't be treated any better, am I right? :flutterrage:

Everything that was building up inside of Spike is venting out remorselessly.

Can I get a giant screaming 'WHAT?!!?!?!!?!?'

They have no idea of Spike's fate.

It's threatening time!!!!

Remember that dark magic book Spike ate in order to save Rarity?

If Spike's surrogate mom is Celestia then Momlestia's wrath will twist Armak's head....literally.

Sweetie Belle's power of love will conquer anything.

Great chapter, but please excuse my language for some of this :twilightblush: . First off, WHAT THE HELL TWILIGHT?! :flutterrage: You want to accuse the little dragon who has been your best friend since day one he was hatched, underneath your care, the one who is supposed to be like a little brother or son to you, to be working for Armak?! :rainbowhuh: You have to wait til' Armak tells you that he is controlling Spike?!:ajbemused:

I mean c'mon Twilight, did you not see that dark magic surrounding poor little Spike in the cage and suddenly being absorbed into his body?! :facehoof: I mean I know you are a princess and all, but for you to do that to Spike, and accuse him in working for Armak right off the bat, makes you pitiful as a princess and completely brainless and apparently blind as a friend! :flutterrage:

And Rainbow Dash, I don't want to waste my breath on you, so I won't. However, I guess Spike isn't your friend, just an acquaintance, am I right?! Why not all of you just devise a plan in not only to bring Armak to justice, but to finish Spike off, and then you all can celebrate his death with a big ol' party! :flutterrage::fluttercry:

Ooh, I'm looking forward to you all talking to him if that still happens. You all will probably yell at him for what he done to Rarity and the others under Armak's control, and make him feel even more worse :flutterrage:

Armak's dark magic has unlocked the baby dragon's rage and fury and one by one taking it out on his friends and the irony of all was one look at King Sombra's dark magic door has made Spike's nightmare and Armak's dream came true.

And the time of the dark dragon begins, but just by looking at the tags I can tell that said time will end and Armak will be defeated, ending with a Disney-esque happy end.

Also, your choice of music is great and all. But me personally I prefer this song instead

6008951 I know right.

Armak reminds me of DIO from Jojo's Bizarre Adventures.

5975416 True, but Lauren Faust also isn't in charge anymore, and said it's very possible they will do something different with that and make the Celestia mom thing non canon. As it is nothin in the show or comic gives even a hit he see's Celestia as anything more then the Princess.

Though Lauren did also say that as far as she's concerned Spike is 8.

1: Didn't the crusaders already lean a lesson about not keeping secrets when it could put a friend in danger?
2: Your logic here seems flawed. Spike runs away because he feels Twilight doesn't appreciate him and neglects him. So his line of "If she knew where i was she'd come and get me." Implies he knows Twilight cares enough to look for him. I can understand not wanting to be seen in Ponyville because he thinks no one will understand how bad Twilight treats him and just return him. But the logic of 'Twilight doesn't care about me. But would come and get me if she knew where i was.' seems flawed.

6015425 Spike meant that Twilight would pretend to care for him, but then she would go back to treating him bad. My bad if it wasn't clear enough.

:pinkiegasp::rainbowderp: Spike has done some serious damage and caused great pain to lots of ponies. Spike, I understand that you hold such great anger toward Twilight and the others, but for you, and only for you, not the, because in my opinion, they don't deserve your time. However, for you Spike, try to fight back against Armak's darkness and let the true Spike shine through. :rainbowdetermined2:

And Twilight, Applejack, Rarity, Rainbow Dash, Pinkie Pie, Fluttershy, and Celestia, it's about damn (excuse my language) time that you all realize that is because of your negligence of Spike cause Armak to easily corrupt Spike's mind! :flutterrage: I look forward to the next chapter, but worried about what else Spike can do and will do under Armak's influence.

How will they burn clouds if the plan to attack Cloudsdale?

Hondo Flanks and Cookie Crumbles are the names of Rarity's dad and mom.
Why would Spike want to attack the one place where for once he's treated as a hero?

See, this is what I was talking about in an earlier chapter. I'm just gonna keep reading to know what happens.

6016700 Armak said he would attack there. Spike payed no attention to him because he was excited for cloudsdale.

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