Chapter 1: The Realization
The reception was going perfectly. The hired DJ was doing her job, almost too well. Pinkie Pie was regulating the party concessions and goings-on. Twilight was drinking her fifth glass of punch, her throat needed liquid after singing that song. She downed the glass and then wandered the crowd, having quenched her thirst. She spotted the newlywed wife and trotted over to give her congratulations.
"Hey there Twilee!" said her brother, Shining Armor.
"Why hello there Twilight. It's nice to see my new little sister." said Cadence
"Oh! That's right!" said Twilight. She'd forgotten about the whole "sister-in-law" thing. "I guess we're sisters now. Haha."
They both laughed at the forgetfulness of the unicorn mare.
"So, my new sis-in-law. I've been meaning to ask you this: what happened to the three unicorns that tried to stop us when we left the caverns?" asked Twilight
"You mean the bridesmaids?" asked Cadance.
"Yeah."
"Well as I recall, they jumped after the bouquet that I threw into..."
the realization dawned on the newlywed Princess
"The depths of the caverns." finished the lavender mare, who also had the sudden epiphany.
"Oh. Crap."
Cadence quickly told her husband about what happened and what the two mares were going to do. Then she and Twilight ran to the castle gardens. Behind the maze, obscured by some bushes was the entrance to the caverns. They crawled through the small hole and fee treed the place that had trapped them for a long time.
"It's not really a good feeling to be back." said Cadence with a shudder
"Yeah..." replied Twilight, "But it's best not to dwell on the past and focus on the task at hand."
"You're right." said Cadence with restored confidence
Then the two sisters went on their spelunking/rescue mission.
Colgate was feeling very guilty. She had failed to save the pony who was a friend of Cadence. She didn't even know her name...
"C'mon stop thinkin' about her." said Lyra who was sitting on a rock in that weird slouching way she always sat.
"She's right. I need to get my mind off of her and focus on waiting for help." thought Colgate
She walked over to a crystal wall and started observing her teeth. Smiling, snarling, anything to give a good angle of observation, tilting her head as well. After the 10/10 check up, she pulled out a packet of gum from a pocket she had in her bridesmaids outfit. She popped a price into her mouth and began chewing, the mintyness overloading her senses.
Then she sat and waited. The two unicorns had to have waited for over an hour now, and Colgate heard a rumble coming from Lyra's stomach, which caused her stomach to growl. Lyra got up and walked over to one of the walls that head some ledges on it and began climbing.
"What're you doing? We gotta wait for help." asked Colgate kind of rudely.
"Nopony has used or even mentioned these caves for years. If somepony didn't get lost or trapped themselves in here, they wouldn't even know where this place is."
"But the princess wouldn't forget about us."
"She probably thinks we're dead!" she replied, raising her voice, "Now I'm leaving this place! If you wanna join me that's fine! Just don't try and stop me."
Colgate thought about what the mint green unicorn had said. It was probably true. There most likely wasn't any rescue coming.
With this thought in her head she hurried after Lyra.
Fallen Angels - Dio
RIP Ronnie James Dio, 7/10/42 - 5/16/10
God damn you! I was planning on writing something like this!
This could really turn out to be interesting. :)
And as for the other unicorn: http://youtu.be/wZ9FhZDboRA
The premise is awesome, but your grammar needs a lot of work.
Looking forward to what's coming next.
Btw, I'm new here, so is there an option to track a story? New chapters or something?
it's about time. I don't have time to read it now. Fav'd and I'll read it later.
601571 If you click the star to 'fave' it, then hover over the star, it should bring up an 'email' checkbox.
601725 Thanks!
i wrote this same situation, but im sure you have done it better than me, I'll give it a read when i get a chance
Omfg!!!
I turn on my iPod and head to the website, and I'm shocked to see 44 notifications!
Usually I get from 1-7 notifications, but this is crazy! I appreciate all the people that have read and and commented on my stories. Read on, my friends. Read on!!! ( that sounded kinda corny)
Far too short, great vocabulary, grammar is a little awkward, but it's an excellent idea. Good job
I liek the green light saber.
601182 Actually, I think she is named in merchandise: Twinkle Shine. But I was calling her Cotton Candy before I gave a flying feather what her canon name was, so whatevs.
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you could also click the book with the clock in the top right hand corner (next to the story name) and that's your read later list
1.3k words total.
Lyra is best pony.
Just putting that out there.
Interesting, fun read; chapters are short but I might use that to my advantage when I need a quick read during busy times. Lets see what this becomes, tracking.
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True dat.
>>To Everypony Else
I do understand that my writing style uses short chapters. That just means that there will be many chapters.
On the note of the grammar, I just hope that it wasn't so bad as to be incomprehensible.
God I need an editor...
605001 Uh, if you're interested I can proofread these two chapters. I'm already doing this for one other person so I do have some kind of experience when it comes to proofreading and editing. But overall I find this story really interesting and the grammar problems aren't that major to be honest.
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Thankyou!