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Tomas Lutwig


avid reader, occasional writer.

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The con seemed like a good idea at the time, so did cosplay, a hobby people take up for fun and to show off their talents as well as what they're passionate about.
I was always a gamer, good family, little trouble at home, not counting school which I hated, but hey you win some you lose some. Dark Souls was not only popular, but one of my favorite games so naturally I was attracted to my preferred class.
The Wanderer.

Chapters (64)
Comments ( 89 )

Hmmmmmmm, will read once it gets a couple more chapters.

haha, enjoyable, write some more man.

I would do a crossover but I have no story yet well it's not published to public.

Comment posted by Tomas Lutwig deleted May 13th, 2015
Comment posted by giz deleted Nov 8th, 2017

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A similar thought was going through my head since he seemed like he truly believed that the magic belonged to him and the whole idea that he deserved to rule the land. So since centaurs are similar enough to human, half human though in MLP universe I think he was half minotaur or something strange, I used him for my own devices! Muhahaha! I didn't like Tirek much anyways, devolved too quickly into the stereotype of villains. First be smart, work your way in, then when you have power, be stupid and get *blank* (destroyed, imprisoned, etc.) Too easy of a character to write.

Comment posted by giz deleted Nov 8th, 2017

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An interesting idea, and he, or someone else who has a very prominent role, may very well do just that. For now though I have found that Guilt can cause some people to believe they are in the wrong and after stewing over things for long enough no doubt that can make things worse. Perhaps I may not be taking the best route, but in the stories I have written, I'm fairly known to go off the normal road.
We'll all have to see what happens! Though at this point I'm kind of curious myself!

Comment posted by giz deleted Nov 8th, 2017

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More good ideas. It surprises me that you have no stories uploaded here with the number of ideas you have, but that's beside the point.
I've always found that world to be strangely trusting, as for instance imprisonment and basically torture instead of death as you said, while a harsh fate they stupidly trust that the threat won't escape and seemingly forget about said threat. True it's a little kid's show, but so was the original, and while we don't know EXACTLY happened to that variation of Tirek, due to the giant explosion and his howls of pain we can assume that he was destroyed.
Kids these days play video games about death and destruction all the time so what does it matter if after the rainbow hits him he's just gone. maybe a few butterflies or some bull like that, but seriously, 'lets imprison him again in this place he already escaped' Yeaa, no.
My route that I've taken, while seemingly insane, I believe emphasizes their tendencies to be too motherly and trusting.

Comment posted by giz deleted Nov 8th, 2017
giz

the princesses are becoming most cruel see what broke, and no trace of guilt
He should take his things and autoexiliar of Equestria
deceir but not before a couple of truths about his false justice and moral
anyway good chapter

Due to technical issues, this story will be on hiatus until my computer manages to get it's crap together.
I apologize for any annoyances.

Tomas Lutwig

Comment posted by giz deleted Nov 8th, 2017

interesting Dark Souls something that I have not seen any of in the displaced fic area or i missed if it is there. keep at it and Hell maybe a crossover sometime (#self promotion)

couldn't he just collect souls to prevent from going completely hollow and also from my knowledge when someone loses hope they go hollow thus why the state after death is called hollowing (As you die over and over the chances of shelving the game can increase), the player goes "Hollow" once they quit the game altogether out of frustration.

“So our options are take him apart, and put him back in my head piece by piece, put him in whole, though it has a likely chance to kill me, or let him become his own being?” I asked inciting a nod from the lunar princess. A chuckle escaped me 'Perhaps these two are not as perfect as people make them out to be' I thought.

So what if he dies he would simply be back at the Everfree with his equipment.

“That may be true, but The Royal Guard of The Pony Princesses do NOT resort to such underhanded tactics” The minotuar said. “I want ten laps around the castle saying 'The Royal Guard fight fairly and fight well'. Am I understood?”

wow how will Equestria ever defend itself if it still believes in the "Right way to kill a person crap that is outdated. Well our human friend will survive while the rest die.

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Well from my understanding to collect souls you need to kill things or find souls of dead people (at least in the game) to pop for more souls. And of course you know how ponies are about killing things. I mean they'd probably freak over a dead rabbit or some crap. Least in my head they would. Peace loving pansies, nah I kid.(And 'by my understanding' I'm just saying how the game works, I've seen other places where they have to have souls true, but they also need a drive to keep them from losing their mind. Like Ol' Crestfallen.)
Yes he would of just popped right back to the bonefire with his equitment, but when I was writing this I was thinking he would've had an even more damaged mind after that happened, might be smart to edit that in at some point.
There's no right way to kill things, it's just more of an honest fight type of ideal, which I completely understand, but the few fighting instructors I've known don't want you kicking your opponents in the testicles or bite them to win, which personally I don't believe in because PISS ON YOU WE'RE IN THE MIDDLE OF A LIFE OR DEATH FIGHT. I suppose it just depends on who you talk to, and or if they've ever seen a real battle.

I'm not sure what to make of this story. It doesn't seem to have a central plot with a meandering story that seems a bit schizophrenic. Also, no reaction from the main 6 upon confirmation by Celestia that she lied to them about Tirek in Tartarus? That alone should make some of them realize that he talks at least a little sense. It should also make Twilight wonder if she's really being put on the same level as the other princesses, since she seems to have been kept in the dark about the truth, even though she's supposed to be their equal.

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I do tend to write a bit scrambled, kinda just going by chapter. Not the best writing style, but I have been trying to leave a few things behind, if I can remember them :pinkiehappy:
You make a valid point, Twilight being left out of the loop, even in the show not receiving much to show for being a princess. Though this would be quite a bit after where we are in the show. She might've taken up different tasks as Princess of Friendship, maybe trying to reform more villains? Or possibly being the foreign diplomat with her friends?
Of course I might be talking out of my arse here and had no plans for the fact that Twilight and her friends are smarter than bricks. Heck if I know. Though the foreign diplomat part sounds nice :derpytongue2:

Comment posted by giz deleted Nov 8th, 2017

curious is the necklace the pendent by any chance a item that you can get as a gift for DS 1

Comment posted by giz deleted Nov 8th, 2017

'Have to find me some water today, and some food would defiantly go a long way'

What are you defying?
plz change to definitely :twilightsmile:

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Son of a... I knew I missed something!
Heh guess I need to get me a proof reader or something.
Thanks for the heads up!

It's from artorias, right?

Comment posted by giz deleted Nov 8th, 2017

6919931 The stone pendant? No, it's from a certain other annoying boss. Though the boss is significantly easier if you have the silver pendant.
Of course I'm playing the pronoun game here and mean Manus because I'm a little sh*t.

Up to 50k. How does this only have twenty likes?

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Oh, it's only in one group.

Definitely glad I waited. A shitton of words for me to read, and so far the story's pretty darn good too!~

And immedietly I am filled with a deep sense of sorrow. I knew I should have waited longer before I started reading, this is just too damned good for it to be over already. I want moar.

I don't see why he's apologizing for defending himself. AJ made it clear she was going to capture him to be punished for something he doesn't believe he should be punished for.

Why would he feel bad about giving a whack to the head in exchange for his freedom? This guy's character and choices are so wishy-washy it's very frustrating to read. Either accept your punishment and stop whining about it or deny that you should be punished at all and accept what you have to do to avoid it.

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One of his favorite ponies is AJ, would you feel good if you smacked yours upside the head thinking it was that or be turned to stone/jailed for a long time? I'm not trying to be a jerk just giving at least my thought process behind his feelings on that.

On the topic of wishy washy morals/character; I blame it on the fact that I don't a clear character in my head, which is issues I've noticed with other fiction of mine. They tend to react to situations around them and in my attempts to make them feel emotions it tends to send them off into left field in the ways of actually being a character instead of someone who just reacts seemingly randomly to different situations. I tried to make him kind and fun loving, but with a serious side that takes charge when needed, but steps down if someone else believes they can do better. Sometimes though my own thoughts on the matter end up falling into the story instead when I cannot think of a good way for it to go.
If you're referring to the whole bit about him being kinda going all guilty on Celestia about the whole bringing the bloatheads to Equestira, I admit wholeheartedly that was kinda rushed and I had no idea what I was doing.
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I haven't done much in the ways of Fanfiction and am simply glad there are people enjoying this one ^^

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Don't take my comment as criticism. Just because I don't like a lot of what the MC does doesn't make it a flaw, it just means it doesn't appeal to me and I felt like saying so. It's not annoying enough to stop me from enjoying the story.

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To be honest I did take it as a criticism, but a good one. I mean it's hard to understand a story sometimes if the character is all over the place, and it's something that I'm not fond of when reading, unless it's situation where a character is used as comic relief, if used right. I wasn't trying to sound like a butthurt little kid or anything of the like, and I'm sorry if I did, I was just explaining how I see it, which unfortunately is something I have to work on :twilightblush: since I see it as really bad when a writer has to explain the characters actions due to them not being explained enough in the story.
So thank you for your comment, and I'm really glad you're enjoying the story. That is one of the ways I can make myself a better artist just like comments on how in a drawing shading is done better by drawing few heavy lines and blending instead of many light lines. By all means if you notice something else, please inform me of it, through PM or as a comment down here. I figure we're all trying to be better than we were yesterday! :pinkiehappy:

giz

6941895 I can understand that the protagonist is in a difficult situation, but is acting too much submissive and friendly with the princesses.
It is acting as a doormat
he hoped the deer King had a different opinion and posed a more balanced debate

I think it be cool to see the look on there faces when he figures out magic, I mean who said you need a horn for that stuff

But seriously he needs a power boost and magic would be awesome who knows maybe it could be blood magic or some forgotten light magic or even abyss

giz

'Hmm, I wonder if I can level up or increase my stats' I thought looking at the strangely shaped sword sticking out from the top of the bonfire. 'I suppose the better question is how it would work and how I would know I had enough souls' I turned to look at my companion who was resting against a tree at the edge of the clearing.

I was thinking, if the soul of Tirek equivalent to hundreds of human souls
and not be so crazy considering that stole the magic of a nation and a god of chaos or you could learn magic in a more traditional way

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Well you have to remember he killed Tirek after Twilight and her friends had already started returning the magic to Equestria, on the thought of magic though and how much Tirek's soul would be worth, it's an interesting question.
One I don't have an answer to, yet.

giz

6953891 even he drained his soul should be worth a lot more to a human or animal
in this kind of worlds, human souls are insignificant, but the soul of a demon / god / magical being, tend to be more valuable

or could change the game mechanics for this story to reach the bonfire
he could find experience points

if you go down the path of souls, the protagonist will have to kill every living thing in Equestria to reach a decent leve:pinkiecrazy:

I thought he was only supposed to serve two years:derpyderp2:...unless you changed something. I'll have to re-read the chapter I guess.

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He was, unless I really screwed something up, all I was doing was making time pass faster for the reason of I'm getting kinda bored of writing him stuck in a dungeon cell.

7007393 Discord said he hasn't seen him in 3 years. By the time of the last chapter ending, if I remember right, he just finished his first year.

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Ah, you must remember though, he'd been in stone for two, and Discord only saw him at the very beginning, when he was still 'hollowed' before he was put into stone for the first time.

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