Scootaloo and Sweetie Belle are in massive trouble, what started as a kind favour for a friend has taken a horrific and catastrophic turn when they accidentally end the life of a fellow pony, an unimaginable and detested crime in Equestria. Scootaloo and Sweetie Belle must hide the evidence of their sin and get rid of the body of the pony that they killed before the truth is revealed, will they get away with their accidental and completely involuntary crime or will their horrendous luck and crushing guilt reveal everything? "Rated T for light descriptions of a dead body, slight language, and mature subject matter."
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Wow, that's awfully long for a one-shot story. Looks interesting though. I'll give it a try.
I loved this! The humor's very dark and very funny! (though that might be a matter of opinion) For 2 hours of research you did an excellent job portraying the characters involved. I certainly would like to see more stories from you. (And I'm curious why you decided to write an MLP story so spontaneously? Just for the challenge of it?)
Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon had it coming. I like your interpretation of Silver Spoon's cutie mark, it's a great fit for this story and certainly fits the character. And the image of Diamond Tiara being smacked upside the head with a shovel is glorious in its own right. I also can't help but notice that there's no mention of any fallout from their treatment of the bullies, which is a nicely dark note to end the story on.
Edit: Aha! I forgot there was an epilogue. So I guess there may be fallout after all.
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Never mind. I stand by what I said.
This was a great thing to have to entertain me at work today. Thanks!
5955889 I did it to test my writing skills because I have a dream to write for television, not MLP but just television in general and I chose MLP because it increases the chances of exposure and people seeing it, thank you so much for your input! I have an idea for another story and if this one gets enough popularity, then maybe I'll give it a shot!
You're going to need an editor. And a very good one. Mind if I have a go at it?
6235883 Yeah, the editing could be a lot better, this was the first time I ever wrote a story and because of that I was mostly unfamiliar with how the punctuation is supposed to go, yes you can take a crack at it if you want.
Hey man! Its that kid u met on omegle i loved this story im reccomending it to all my friends
6337545 Thanks a million!
I liked the twist ending.
6911870 I'm glad you did!
This story Needs more likes
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To paraphrase a similar ending from Spongebob, "Yes, they all are idiots aren't they?"
interesting