Rainbow Dash. Element of Loyalty, savior of Equestria, and finally a Wonderbolt.
But, after she overhears something she wasn't supposed to, she begins having second thoughts about her childhood dream. Soon, a rather shady organization notices her, and they immediately express their interest...
But nothing is ever as it seems.
Dark emotions can corrupt, and leave you in a Nightmare of envy. Darkness is everlasting, and will always be here. But, sometimes the Darkness is shrouded in a coat of Light and good intentions. Could the Shadowbolts really be Rainbow's Saving Grace?
This story is the brainchild of Little_Draco, and I am making it a reality.
Chapters (2)
Ah! Spitfire, heady knave, prone to hot-tongue and backlash! Save thee and thy story, friend. 'Tis good.
the Wonderbolts really know how2 to screw up a good thing. morons!
This looks like it'll be good!
think you could have describe the arch wings later and more story progression. but not bad
6056137 Right, looking back, that would've been a better idea.
6056146 The best time would be when they are training her on it. Still good. But the one other thing is that the Shadowbolts that were in the pilot WAS Nightmare Moon I can see her forming a group after her return. But it's your story.
6056155 That will be addressed later on.
6056265 Stil;l can't wait to see the Wonderbolts popularity collapse. Especially if the reasons for Rainbow Quiting are known.
Now THIS I like.
A lot...................
I was enjoying this until the long expository used-wing-salesman's advertisement for Arch Wings.
Maybe only mention them in passing, mention that they are awesome and scary, without hyping them up with hyperbolic details, and dribble more info out later when they become relevant to the story. This was a bit like having a teenage Bruce Wayne have a nerdgasm about ninja gear. Before his parents died.
Shadows, hiding in the dark of our minds, feelings that should never be felt, of hate, betrayal and revenge.
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Also your picture is amazing!
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Okay, you had better make up for the Lightning Dust abuse!
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