Tallon IV: Overgrown
"So," Twilight spoke up after everypony got their laughter under control, "after your scare with Spike falling into the magma, how'd things go in the caverns?"
"Pretty well," Samus admitted. "While many of the passages above the lava between chambers were too small for Spike, the magma connected between chambers through much larger tubes that Spike could traverse easily. We spent most of this trip through the caverns seeing what creatures in there Spike could eat."
Applejack chuckled. "Growing foals always have a huge appetite," she pointed out. "Guess dragons do, too."
"They do," Twilight groaned. "He was always trying to eat everything in sight back up in Canterlot. You have no idea how hard it was to teach him that books weren't food."
Several of the mares chuckled. Spike blushed as he remembered that, then smirked as more of the memory came back. "Didn't help when you still chewed on the book corners in your sleep if you fell asleep in bed reading."
Twilight's cheeks burned as nearly everyone else laughed. "I was young!" she whimpered defensively.
Celestia chuckled indulgently. "Twilight, you were 12."
Twilight grumbled as she hid her blushing face in her hooves. "So," she continued once she got her blushing - and everyone else got their laughter - under control, "what all did he try to eat?"
Samus smiled. "Well, he tried to eat a Grizby - a small armored scavenger - but its armored carapace was built to handle the superheated temperatures of the volcanic chambers it lived in. Spike simply wasn't strong enough to break through it."
"I hurt a tooth trying," Spike grumbled, leading to more titters.
"Then there were the Burrowers," Samus explained. "Small insects like Beetles that stayed underground, leaping up out of their tunnels to spit some of its digestive acid at potential prey."
"Or get eaten," Spike added. "A bit tangy. Felt the need to eat something sweet after a couple of those."
"Then there were the Magmoors the caverns had been named for," Samus continued. "Fire breathing lava serpents."
"A bit spicy for my tastes," Spike explained, "but tasty enough."
"Although you should have known better than to eat the Puffers," Samus scolded. "Seriously, a fleshy, gas filled balloon expelling green gas as it floats around in a volcanic chamber strikes you as something good to take a bite out of?"
"Well, it did until the first one exploded in my mouth," Spike complained. "Didn't taste very good, either. Left me with a very bad smelling breath, too."
"Until you breathed fire again," Samus corrected. "Which caught the gas trail of the other Puffers, causing them to explode internally."
"Sounds like some pretty awesome fireworks," Rainbow pointed out with a chuckle.
"But why did breathing fire clear his breath?" Rarity asked.
"Sterilization," Samus explained. "Dragon fire is hot enough to kill anything lingering in the mouth, including the plaque and germs that cause bad breath. From what I've been told, all that's left is a smokey aftertaste."
Everypony turned to stare at Samus and Spike. "Just...who told you that?" Rarity asked archly, her eyes straying towards Spike.
"Pretty sure that falls under spoilers," Samus pointed out. "We'll get there after the next planet." She chuckled internally as she watched Spike sweat under Rarity's jealous gaze.
"So what next then?" Pinkie Pie asked happily.
Samus shrugged. "Nothing else of real interest in Magmoor Caverns, except when Spike climbed a wall to get to the Warrior Shrine to pick up another Chozo Artifact; Strength this time. After that, we headed to the Phendrana Drifts."
"What's that?" Fluttershy asked eagerly.
"A snow filled region," Spike replied. "It was...incredible..."
As Samus led the way out of the icy tunnel, she stared around at the white landscape as snow gently fell. She smiled under her mask as the snow crunched beneath her armored boots. Of all the various environments she had been in, she was most fond of snow. It was so quiet and peaceful. Even after a vicious battle for survival, the snow quickly blanketed the world and covered the signs, restoring peace. It was quite calming.
After a time, she noticed she didn't hear Spike's footsteps following hers. Confused, she turned behind her to check on him, and found him frozen at the edge of the ice tunnel, staring out at the snow like he'd never seen it before. With a laugh, she realized he hadn't. "It's just snow," Samus called out to him. "Like ice, only soft and gentle." Scooping up a handful, she lobbed it his way.
He leapt out of the way of the shower of powder. "What the?" he demanded in confusion, turning to poke at the snow. Slipping, he landed on his back in the snow. He wriggled around for a while before getting to his claws, scooting away.
"Never saw a snow angel with a tail before," Samus pointed out, staring at the imprint left in the snow.
"Snow angel?" Spike asked in confusion.
"Something people make when they go to play in the snow," Samus explained. "They lay on their back and wave their arms and legs around. Apparently, the resulting imprint is supposed to resemble an angel."
Spike stared at the imprint for a while. "Can...you teach me?" he asked finally.
"Teach you what?" Samus asked, confused.
"How to play in the snow?" Spike begged.
Samus turned to face him. He was looking up at her hopefully, his ear frills hanging downward, his eyes wide and pleading. She sighed. "Spike, we can't just stop here and play in the snow. We need to work on collecting the rest of the artifacts, driving off the pirates, and attacking the source of the Phazon. We can't just stop and...play in the...snow..." Her voice was trailing off because Spike's eyes had begun to water, and his lip was quivering. After a time, she finally sighed. "Alright, fine!" she relented. "There aren't any hostiles right here, anyway." She disengaged her arm cannon.
As frustrated as she was with the delay, the joy in his eyes when she relented quickly washed away her pique. The look of consternation on his face when she beaned him with a snowball helped, too.
The two of them spent a great deal of time playing. First, Samus taught Spike how to make a snowman, rolling the large balls of snow and using rocks blackened with Spike's flame for buttons, eyes, and a smile. She couldn't take him sledding without a sled or a hill, but she taught him to make a proper snow angel and a snow ball.
They spent at least another hour snow ball fighting. Samus' snowballs flew firm and true, catching Spike off guard with every impact. However, with the bulkiness of her power suit, she could only make one at a time. While Spike's snowballs were less well shaped, he was able to use all four sets of claws to shape and throw them.
Just wait until I get my ice beam back, Samus growled, imagining longingly the shock on Spike's face when a slight reconfiguration of the Ice Beam would allow her to pelt him with snow balls from her arm cannon. At that point, however, her eyes widened as Spike sent a large amount of snow straight at her from his spade tail.
"Nice one, Spike!" Rainbow said eagerly. "Next winter-"
"Dibs on having Spike on my team for the snowball war!" Pinkie interrupted.
"Dammit, Pinkie!" Rainbow snapped.
Spike and Samus both laughed at their antics, fondly remembering that innocent pleasure.
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KAWAII DESU!
6037316 Without any weight to carry, your bones weaken. Most of the day spent in space is dedicated to excessive exercise.
An enjoyable chapter. Well done.
I need not another moment to accurately judge this story. Samus and Spike have absolutely no relation, no connection, nothing that could even begin to link them together. Forcing them together in any story would be completely pummeled in, unless performed by a entire brigade of highly-skilled and devoted authors, fully exploiting their similar childhoods.
Taking a notable look into their design, a dragon is almost 100% immune to any illness that would kill a normal being. Their blood would be so incredibly hot, no disease could even hope to survive. Their stomach is likely covered in a ultra-powerful antibiotic, allowing them to eat nearly anything, even diamonds. Anything alive would pass, poisonous or not, without issue. The ponies should know this, even only with a glance.
Overall, I rate you a slightly below average 4/10. This judgement is done without reading much, so I am hoping I was presenting prejudice with such a stale rating.
Mmmm, why do I have the feeling they're going to find a Chozo artifact in Equestria?
6058067 Read the story before making judgement. The thing is, any given combination of characters can work, given a believable backstory.
One could argue that Fluttershy had no relation to the RED team, or that Rainbow Dash had nothing in common with Tony Stark. Tatsurou took both instances, and made them WORK. While the re-raised ponies are true to their core characters, they have differences that reflect their new lifestyle. This story is no different.
So cute
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Not to be mean and rude but why the heck are you rating a story that has not finished yet!!! The draw of these stories, by this author especially, has been how the character grows and changes due to the new environment while still remaining true to how they are in canon. This story is how Spike was raised since hatching by Samus. He is slowly regaining his memories of his time before the accident that started when he regressed back to an egg. As mentioned by another commentary read the Rainbow Dash/Tony Stark story or the Rarity/Batman story. Both really go into the whole issue at points and how both sides deal with it, then come to a conclusion. It is like judging a book by its cover, you shouldn't do it.
Aww! It's so nice seeing Samus being able to act normal every once in a while.
Samus making a snow angel and a snowball fight? I...T-TOO CUTE, GAH! Why must these two be such adorable badasses! X3
6058067 Man I don't hold back in things I say and not even I get that kind of hate, you really should continue to read it since the story, compared to the others, LITERALLY just started.
Way to make an ass of yourself dude.
Hey Tats, not that I'm not enjoying the back story, but when are we going to move past it and see, I don't know, Space Pirates attacking Ponyville?
Then Ridley next chapter..... following a moment of her trying to shoot him into kingdom come.... good old days.
sweet very sweet i like it keep it up
Still great. Keep it up!
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6059511 CAN IT PINKS.
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Congratulations. You have just proven that no matter what else was in your post, you have no bucking clue what you are talking about. While I disagree with some of the others that you can't judge an incomplete story, you should ALWAYS read everything that is post before making ANY kind of 'rating'.
Since I know several are going to give me shots about making judgments about incomplete stories, let me elaborate on that. I frequently do make judgments about incomplete works, or even works that I've not even read. The difference is the TYPE of judgment. In such case its a matter of "Well I don't like the concept, so I'm not going to read it/read any more of it." or "Man I just cant stand this writer's style. I'm done reading." In both cases you will note that these are PERSONAL JUDGMENTS. The "This isn't my cup of virgin blood so I don't want any more." kind. I'm not rating the story, merely deciding that I don't care for it personally. You SHOULD NOT, at least IMO, give a 'rating' on an incomplete story for anything, with the exception of things like grammar, spelling, and formatting.
Now, back to our wonderfully incompetent 'reviewer', your first paragraph continues to show your amazing LACK of intelligence. Had you actually read the work, you would have found that Samus and Spike did in fact have a connection that linked them together. And it was not the similarities in their childhoods. (Which is a valid point they had in common) What connection do they have you might ask? Use your brain and you might figure it out. Though if you read some of the other responses to your post, you will find they already told you. If you find reading to be too difficult, I recommend that you find another job you would be better suited for, rather than reviewer. I hear Burger King is hiring.
Second paragraph, and the trend continues. You posted something that had zero facts relevant to the story and is pointless drivel. Your 'knowledge' of dragon biology is completely conjecture and guesswork, none of which is remotely close or even required. The story itself actually told the reader EXACTLY what dragon biology is like, going into details about why Spike would be eating anything and everything, and even how he could survive eating something as normally dangerous as phazon. How you ask? Well once more, I recommend attempting to turn your brain on. The answer is very simple, however the task required could be difficult for you.
Finally, a message to Tatsurou... Keep up the good work and don't sweat the stupid people. The smarter ones will already know to ignore them anyway. As with "Batmare Beyond" you've got a character, Samus Aran, that is honestly rather difficult to write for, and have done exceptionally well in handling them.
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Thank you for your positive feedback and well reasoned defense. I hope I continue to live up to your expectations.
6059844 Being a reviewer isn't my purpose for being here. I just like to state what I feel and reply back to responses in my spare time, like any other normal human being. I already admitted it, I abnormally posted judgement without the full frame of the story. Now, maybe the story is better then I thought, but honestly, and no offense to the author, the description alone was putting a bad taste in my mouth. Seemed more and more like a typical crossover with every word, and little to counter my thoughts as I read. With a sour thought, I scribbled down a comment.
You'll notice, I never insulted the author using such vulgar terms, as you did to me. So, yeah, thanks for referring to me as "wonderfully incompetent" for delivering hopefully scientific and practically factual details about the Zmaj's biology. They had to have came up from thousands of feet below ground, proven by they ability to dine of diamonds and other underground minerals. They actually can bellow fire, meaning that their body temperature has to be extraordinarily hot. They are unaffected by lava, another thing only found thousands of feet below ground. However, the point of their wings is unknown, given the fact they have such large bodies making flight impossible. Armor would only weigh them down further, as their scales can protect them from many forms of attack. Their blood would likely melt flesh. I believe Darwin would approve of my theories.
At this point in this reply's making, I stopped and tried to read the first chapter. Then I read the short description and was unfortunately turned off again. I despise stories that use magic as an actual reason to get the character there in a Crossover. Completely amateur, which is surprising seeing how the author is such a seasoned maker.
So, I wish to retract my rating. Seeing how so many people rushed to defend this story, and I lack the drive to steel myself and read it, I will leave without giving it a proper rating,
P.S. I have reviewed some other stories, namely "Since When Were You So Playful?". You can read that and become a bit more familiar with how I actually review a story.
Alright, FINALLY got around to reading these last two parts. It appears Fimfiction has been screwing up on notifications for updates, as I manually checked and found like four chapters I hadn't read when it only displayed one!
It's interesting, and I'll be completely honest, before I knew exactly where you were going with this I was somewhat off-put by the extra layer of emotion, ease of trust, and overall sociability of Samus as a person but as this moved on, I have to say it fits her quite well, and that any off-putted-ness was merely my own biases filtering in, which can easily be ignored. I for one have come to like alternate interpretations of my favorite characters, MLP or some over universe. It's mind opening and even gives me ideas on how to approach my own works with the same characters.
You've made the Hunter and the Dragon work quite well as a team, and not just a team, a BELIEVABLE team. Though, Spike does have a certain sense of tactical prowess about him so quickly. I'd have expected Samus to lend more instruction during combat but still, the description of the Flaahgra incident was still great! Also, I have to say that the snow-playing brought a smile to my face. If it wasn't for purposes of plot and probably tribute to the game itself, I would've suggested Samus disengaging her suit entirely for that scene, but that's just me. Great work, Tats!
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My reasoning for Spike's tactical prowess is that dragons are apex predators. As a result, they would have highly developed combat instincts, because the greatest - and sometimes only - threat to a dragon is another dragon.
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Hey guys, I just now realized that putting down a hateful and stupid comment on a popular, supported story is BY FAR the easiest way to get responses. I've seen one or two of these comments before, usually they're relics, and they have 10+ angry responses to them. Le's not give this guy what he wants, although I felt the urge to respond too. Don't feed the troll
6058032 Dude, in my comment I specifically stated that I knew that. What I was confused about, was the reverse, although Tatsurou cleared it up for me. You have now double-proven how much of a moron you are to me.
6060303 Very true, but for predators, they learn based on how they're taught, though some instincts will certainly remain (such as his desire to consume everything lol). A tiger in the wild is king but a domesticated tiger in a zoo will likely not survive long in the wild. If I interpreted the beginning correctly, Spike was taken then hatched again with Samus, with the latter nurturing the little guy (aside from throwing him against the ship wall which I can TOTALLY see her doing, btw). As he became coherent, I forget, did he receive any basic training from her?
Either way, not pointing out a flaw or trying to nitpick. Spike is very intelligent anyway so I could see him figuring things out on his own. That, and you don't list EVERY conversation or interaction between he and Samus, so one could accept that she had given him at least basic-know how, though his real training will probably come on Aether where you alluded to things before.
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Keep in mind Spike hasn't been 'coherent' for very long. Chronologically, he's still very strongly in his instinctive phase of youth. Beyond that, even if Samus never actively taught combat to Spike, he would have watched her going through whatever training routines she had.
...besides, how much training do you need to know to set the giant plant on fire? Beyond that, "Keep the high ground" would be the automatic instinctive action of an apex predator that grows wings, no matter how tame they've become. Even hawks and eagels in captivity prefer the high perches over the low ones, especially when there's danger.
Not only that, while I didn't explicitly state it, other than the initial "set it on fire" action, everything else Spike did in the fight was on Samus' directive...or the "listen to the Alpha" instinct.
6060338 I figured as much, which was why I added that observation instead of asking that explicit question. The reader can use their imagination for that anyway.
And good points regardless. I'll concede my original words.
6060011 I would like to point out that what you're describing, a zmaj, is a Slavic dragon. Wiki powers activate!
In all the South Slavic folklore, a dragon is called zmaj, żmij, zmej (змей, змеј). It can also be called a zmajček/zmajić, which is an endearing diminutive form of the word zmaj. It is considered as "extremely intelligent, wise and knowledgeable" creature of "superhuman" strength and proficiency in magic, very rich (usually described as having castles of enormous riches hidden in distant lands) and often lustful for women, with whom it is capable of making offspring. It often breathes fire and is generally accepted as a highly respected being, and while not always being benevolent, never as an entirely evil creature. Legends were spread about many historical and mythical heroes that they were conceived by a dragon.
The difference here is this is a dragon from MLP, and specific details aren't known about it, except where pointed out by the author. You cannot say that a specific type of dragon should be a certain way. For example, I could say that Spike should be like a Christian dragon, and as such, his stomach is literally a portal to the fiery pits of hell. Besides what is Canon, there is only one type of dragon and that's the one the author uses and chooses to describe in whatever way he chooses.
6061513 First off, allow me to thank you for the calm and practical reply. Your excellent presentation only further gives off the impression of your intelligence.
Dragons are mere myths, so it's only proper for any author to twist or change their lore to better suit his story. This is purely factual and I cannot refute it. Even I have altered their image in my own stories. I am guilty of advancing our image of Spike into a much more capable being.
All the points you have spoke of are completely immune to my counterattack. You have bested me in this thread, this is true. I declare you the superior. Accept this reply as my Token of Defeat.
6060305 In your comment, you said nothing concerning the human skeleton. Now, in your later comments, you probably did, but I hadn't been tracking you by that point. As you can see, I have been undergoing a uphill battle. You might have known, but I have officially revoked my rating, electing to instead leave the story unrated. I have supplied the author with my thoughts, who has yet to defend himself, thus fulfilling my purpose of remaining here,
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My personal thoughts are if you don't plan on reading a story, you shouldn't comment on it except to ask for clarification regarding a certain point to decide whether or not to read it.
Once you made the decision to not read it, I feel you should have clicked off the page and left well enough alone without voicing your opinion, as any opinion voiced without attempting to read a story shouldn't be voiced in the first place.
Once you did attempt to read it, you chose to try and force your interpretation of things onto the story, and when that didn't fit, claimed the failing was in the story or in my writing, rather than in your trying to force a round peg into a square hole.
You know, this story has gone through the backstory for so long, it feels like when it's all explained, everybody's all just gonna go, "Hm... Okay." And then the story will end. You won't let it end that way will you? Pwease?
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I've been trying to interweave the backstory flashbacks with the present interaction as I go.
But don't worry. I do have events planned for when I do catch up with the present.
Do you want to build a snowman~
Heh, lots of fun with a dragon, he just needs to stop eating the furniture.
6060305 Under normal conditions you are correct good sir. However this individual wished to give a 'review' without actually reading a work, which basically falls under a very well know quote of common sense. "Do not judge a book by it's cover." And while common sense is actually NOT common at all, seeing that even I don't claim to have it, (I'm a supervillain after all.) I do find violations of such well known wisdom to be extraordinarily aggravating. Plus I was running on 4 hours of sleep in the last 48.
6060011 You are correct good sir. You did not DIRECTLY insult the author, while I made several shots at your intellect. I refer to my point above about your amazing violation of common sense and my lack of sleep. I still stand by my statement, my only defense is that had I been running on a few more hours I would have been more subtle in my barrage.
Moving to your point about zmaj dragon... Well actually I think this guy 6061513 who has the best user name EVER, has already covered most of the points. I will merely interject that not only were you trying to apply Slavic mythology into MLP, but your first post did NOT reference the zmaj dragon or even mention that your facts were taken from such. You simply stated facts and then claimed "This is how Spike and all Equestrian dragons are like.". I believe the author already pointed out the peg metaphor, so I will simply reference back to my original statements about you intellect. Why? Because using the zmaj dragon as an example after the fact gives the entire thing a rather foul smell, like you got caught with a foot in your mouth and then suddenly tugged something from your anus to try and make your previous point have any validity at all.
Moving on to the complaint about using magic as a means to create a cossover. Well... This... Confuses the crap out of me so much... You even mention the authors other works in your comment about him being 'seasoned maker'. This is merely another in a series of fics using the same base concept. His entire front page is these fics. They ALL used magic in some form or another to create the crossover, at least as I recall. "The Sparkle in his Eye" and "Dante's Little Apple Surprise" may not end up having used magic, if only because they have not explained HOW the crossover happened, yet. But I'm pretty sure its going to involve magic anyway. There are two VERY good reasons for this.
1) Magic is a very real and VERY POWERFUL force that is literally EVERYWHERE in Equestria. Every sentient creature seen to date has some kind of magic. And magic in Equestria has been shown to do pretty much whatever it fucking wants to do. The laws of physics themselves seem to be at its mercy. To date the only thing that seems to have even more potential than magic is Pinkie Pie, if only because she seems to have access to Cartoon Physics which can do anything as long as it's fucking hilarious. Twilight has stated both in the comics and in the show that magic does have actual rules, while Pinkie simply needs to cause a laugh to pull off anything she wants.
2)Magic is the only force in Equestria that could not just send a being into another world/dimension/realm/ect, but DE-AGE them as well. While there are other shows/stories from other works that have different ways to do both of these things at once, you will find that most of them fall into the category of Science Fiction. They would use a nice bit of technobable to explain away how everything made perfect sense and was actually quite logical. And you know what? It would be just as much BS and have the same level of realisim as magic would. Because technobable is pretty much the 'magic' of a scifi setting. And should the author ever do one of these stories involving something like Star Trek, you could bet your anus that it would use technobable. And maybe even magic too. Now all that being said, magic IS a valid tactic even for the scifi setting of Metriod. Because magic DOES exist in the Metriod universe, as do psychic powers. The Chozo, the Luminoth, and the Bryyonians all were stated to have such powers. The last Lord of Science on Bryyo was specifically noted to have mastered the combination of both magic and science, making him truly a force to be reckoned with.
Given the above points, using magic seems not just the most logical method, but perhaps the only real method to set up the type of crossover the author was going for.
The final note, I will once more remind you that your complaints about the work, at least the ones with any real substance, all stem from a singular source. The concept. This series of works are all done on a concept that honestly has been done WAY TOO MUCH. In fact one of the most famous, or infamous depending on your point of view, MLP fics was the very first one to use this concept. That all being said, I never finished the 'original' fic. I just couldn't get into it. And many that use this concept I can't stand in the slightest. My biggest reason for giving the author respect is that Tatsurou has taken this overused cliche and made it enjoyable. Part of the core of this series is not only must the pony in question learn from/improve because of their new parent/setting, but the parent/setting in question must learn/improve as well. Not to mention some of the character's used are VERY difficult to use properly, yet the author has done so. Giving them believable character development while still remaining true to their inner self. With only 2 exceptions to that rule, in which the character's 'normal' personality and characterization have been completely replaced. However even in these 2 cases, the reason for the changes is not just plausible, but is a gradual process just like real person's would be.
Wow I went off on a tangent there. Anyway, my point is that your biggest gripes seem to stem from the concept. And not liking a story because of its concept... PERFECTLY REASONABLE. I've lost track of the number of stories that I took a single look at the concept and went "Ha ha, FUCK NO.". This does NOT make the stories bad. It merely means you don't like them. And a reviewer must ALWAYS try and remain objective. Pretty much the first rule of reviewing IMO. "Just because you don't like it, doesn't make it bad." Because when you lose your objectivity, you get people like me making long-winded posts about why you sound like you need special assistance.
6062024 Thank you, it is a good name. The best of its kind.
6061594 You don't get what I'm saying. I was asking why you'd need to adapt to a weaker gravity environment, like going from 1 G to 0.1 G, and all you did was give me reasoning for something I already knew and said that I did, which implies that I already knew what you said, and when I saw your comment, I first thought you just hadn't read all of my comment, or skimmed over it. Now you're just proving that you really are an imbecile, by trying futilely to defend your point, when obviously you're just being an idiot.
6062024 Ah yes, well in that light you are correct, but have you seen the comments he's been sending to me? They aggravate me to no end!
6061774 You're right, perfectly so. I am a round object attempting to fit into a square slot. It simply can't function. Either of us have universally-portioned differences when it involves on how a story should and shouldn't be. You normally use magic as a means, and I abolished using magic in such a way, believing that is amateur and the easiest (laziest) way of forming the Crossover.
I already also admitted, I was quite sore after the description catastrophe, and I did give you the bare-fist jab with that comment. I also, however, erased my former rating, as I am certain you've heard of, and will not be giving this story a formal rating.
You likely don't know, but I am a author who very much features Spike. I have written a few stories with him as the main protagonist, read many as well, and I will inform you that this Spike doesn't have much to separate himself from other variants. I have gotten a better sight of this story from some of the comments, some concerning Ridley, or "Cunning God of Death" as his wiki says. Having an ability to gorge himself in order to regenerate even lost limbs, The Cunning God of Death is prone to escape death on several occasions, fusing himself if necessary. Should he be involved, it is critical to preserve his own image, however, if Ridley were to be summoned, I believe you would employ Spike with his with destruction. I very much do believe that.
Nice chapter, especially Spike rating the tastes of enemies. I can't wait to see what some other things taste like to him. The fun in the snow is awesome, very well done.
6060303 Meaning he is possibly a bigger threat to Ridley than Samus????
I can just see Ridley looking around to see if Spike is with Samus, going to attack her, only for Spike to burst out of the Lava or something ala Jaws to grab Ridley and give him a beat down.
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And you have completely missed nearly all my points.
From the start, your only opinion on the story was that you didn't like the concept, and the descriptions were off putting. That would be like looking at a book and reading the front flap and back synopsis and saying "This book isn't worth anything" without even reading it. Now, if you were saying, "This book isn't worth anything to me," that would be perfectly fine, and your own opinion. But you stated in a comment while attempting to back it with logic that my story wasn't worth reading, presenting it as a universal but biased statement.
You say you are also a reviewer. Then act as a reviewer...and don't express an opinion on a story unless you've read it. You say you don't like the concept and can't get into the story? Fine, I can accept that. But leave it at that. Don't try to poke holes in the logic of the story without even reading it.
I have a feeling if next winter Samus and Spike are on the same team the other is just doomed
6062811 At this point, I have read all the chapters thought Home Again to Night Terrors. My thoughts on this story remain largely the same.
6062938 I never said I was a reviewer, but I just like to read some stories and often I give my feelings on it away. A little bit after my last comment, I did actually read some bits and nearly all my thoughts before remain the same. (Home Again-Night Terrors)
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And that is fine. The story isn't for you. If you'd limited your comments to stating that, with possibly stating that you didn't like the concept, then none of this controversy would have occurred.
But whether you intended it or not, your comment - along with the rating you removed - was perceived as an attack, both on the story and my overall writing style. And that created a problem.
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i agree to remove a troll you starve him of all attention
6063210 Attack? No, more like a move that faced resistance. Happens commonly enough, but more often than not my points are all strong, fair and are favored by the fans, Generally. Odd exceptions like this story can occur. Still, I continued to stand by what I initially led in with, however the rating was a tad harsh, maybe a five. Average, lacking in several senses, but average.
6063238 Fair enough, if you feel like that, I will limit my interaction here with anyone else who wishes of it.
6061853 This picture is happy.
And so am I.
Dark Samus tried to get frisky with Spike didn't she? That or a R63 Ridley? Or both?