Thankful
"...And that's pretty much it," Adagio said, "We got a ride here, got you into bed and waited for you to wake up." She shrugged, "Like I said, there really wasn't much to tell."
Sitting quietly at the other side of the table, Sunset had been completely silent during Adagio's story, filling in the blanks for herself. "So Trixie was following you and was also looking for someone?" Sunset asked.
"That's right," Adagio replied, "She tailed us for about twenty minutes, and when she never tried anything, we got bored and struck first," Adagio laughed lightly, "You know, she was probably paying more attention to her surroundings than she was us."
"Yeah..." Sunset already knew who she was looking for. So now they're all out looking for me are they? Sunset thought. She glanced over at the wall, currently debating her situation. On one hand, she could tell Adagio what had happened, about this whole Anon-A-Miss mess and hope that that kindness she seemed to be showing was real. On the other hand, she could simply play dumb and keep it to herself. But, if they are looking for me, maybe they realized I wasn't doing it. Maybe they... Her thought stopped dead in it's tracks. Oh who am I kidding? That place wants me dead, who knows what Trixie would have done if she had-
"Sunset?"
"Huh, Wha?" Sunset was snapped out of her thoughts, and looked over at the now empty chair across the table. Adagio was now standing next to her, with a napkin in her hand, and a very confused look on her face, though, Sunset was just as confused right now. "What's that for?" Sunset asked, looking at the napkin Adagio held.
"Because you're crying," Adagio replied bluntly, "You can't tell?" Sunset wiped her eye with her finger, leaving it wet with her newly formed tears. She quickly took the napkin from Adagio and wiped her eyes clear. "You were staring at the wall and then, out of nowhere, you just started crying." Adagio gently put her hand on Sunset's shoulder, "You gonna be alright?"
I don't know, Sunset thought.
Adagio removed her hand from Sunset's shoulder and walked back over to her chair. "Remember, you don't have to stay here, you can leave whenever you want."
"Actually... I..."
"Whooooo's hungry?" Sonata and Aria walked back into the room, both carrying two plates of pancakes, which were then set down on the table. "Eat up you tw..." Sonata began, "Wow. Is she ok?" she asked.
Adagio ignored her, "So, you gonna tell us what's wrong now?" she asked Sunset.
"Well, I did say I'd tell you..." Sunset replied, "But... one more thing. can you just tell me one more thing?" she asked.
"Sure, go ahead. Ask away," Adagio replied.
"Why?" Sunset asked.
"Hm?" the three of them replied.
"Why did you save me out there? I mean, I was the one who defeated you, I was responsible for you all losing your magic, right? Why would you wanna save the one who took that away from you? You should want to kill me, not save me."
The three sirens looked at each other and smiled, "We were waiting for you to ask that," Aria said.
"We woulda told you earlier but, we didn't think you'd believe us if we brought it up," Sonata continued, "And, we knew you'd ask that eventually sooo..."
"The truth is, Sunset," Adagio went on, "We want to say thanks for what you did that day."
"You..." Sunset wasn't quite sure what to say, "You... you're thankful?"
Adagio simply nodded, "Yeah, it's hard to explain but, when we lost to you and your friends that day, you took away our dark magic, and with that, the three of us could feel something was missing..."
Aria sat down to Sunset's right, "Of course we knew that that something was our magic, but over time it grew into something more than that, it wasn't just our magic that we'd lost..."
Sonata took her seat opposite Aria, "Yeah, it drove us crazy just thinking about it, we just couldn't figure out what it was, and it didn't help that we were uh... kinda... really... mad at you the whole time."
Sunset gave Sonata a puzzled look, "I thought you just said you were glad I took away your magic?"
"Well, we weren't originally," Adagio replied, "We had just obtained Equestrian magic, we could feel it flowing through us, and we had just overwhelmed the only obstacles in our way that could possibly stop us, that Princess and her group of friends..."
"Yeah, friends..." Sunset muttered.
"...And then you picked up that microphone and, well you took us out without breaking a sweat, so naturally, we directed all of our blame for our defeat, all of our anger, all of our everything, really, at you."
"To the point where," Aria continued, "Well, let me put it this way, if we had found you out there, like you were last night, barely alive on your final breath, we would have finished the job of whatever it was that put you there in the firs-"
Sonata quickly reached over and covered Aria's mouth. "Uh, I uh, I think what Ari is trying to say is that, we wouldn't really be having this conversation right now... because, you know, you wouldn't really be here to have it..." she said nervously.
"I get it, you would have killed me right there, you don't have to sugarcoat your words," Sunset replied bluntly. "So what changed?"
"Well, over time, as our anger slowly started to fade, we eventually realized what it was that was missing," Adagio replied, "Our hunger."
"What hunger?" Sunset asked.
"We would feed off the negativity of those around us, you could say it was the cost that came with our magic," Adagio continued, "It was fine back in Equestria, the magical energy we got there was enough, but when we were banished here, I'm sure you know magic doesn't exactly work the same here as it does back home, and that was the same for us."
"It's something you'll never quite understand, Sunset," Aria continued, "The energy here just wasn't enough to settle it, it was always there. That lust, that desire, that need to feed... It was horrific... And it would drive us crazy sometimes." Aria looked down at the floor.
"And now it's gone," Sonata said, a huge smile beaming on her face, "We didn't realize it because we were so angry at you, but the one thing we wanted to get rid of, that we would give anything to get rid of, was finally gone." Sonata seemingly lunged out of her chair and hugged Sunset, "Thank you so much!!!"
"Don't choke her to death now, will you," Aria said.
"Sonata!" Adagio called out. Sonata looked back at her and Adagio pointed at Sonata's now empty seat. Slowly, Sonata let Sunset go and eventually sat back down. "Sunset, I'm gonna say this as simply as I can. The three of us are deeply sorry for what we did to you and your school, and we are forever thankful for what you've done for us. We owe you our lives, and if there's ever anything we can do for you, then just ask."
"Did you just say you, owe me your life? You really mean that?" Sunset asked. The three sirens simply nodded. Sunset thought about this to herself. If they really were telling the truth, and right now there was no evidence she could think that would point to them lying about this, then chances are she understood what they were probably going through. They wanted to reach out to someone, someone who they thought would forgive them for what they had done. Just like she had.
"So, whatdya say?" Sonata began, "Can we uhh, can we be friends?" she asked, "Pretty-please?"
"Friends?" Sunset asked. "Why would you want to be friends?" she asked harshly.
The three sirens stared at her in confusion, "Uh, Sunset?" Aria asked.
"Uh, well I didn't expect that kind of reply," Sonata replied nervously.
"Friends aren't worth it! In the end they'd only hurt you more than they help you!" She cried, as tears began to form in her eyes.
"Sunset, what are you on about?" Aria asked, "Didn't getting friends help you out?"
"I don't have any friends, and besides, they'd only turn on you when it's convenient!" Sunset burst out crying,
"Don't have any?" Adagio asked, "But what about those other girls and that Prin-" It all suddenly clicked into place in Adagio's head, "-cess..." Her eyes remained fixed on Sunset, who was now crying into her hands. "They didn't..." Adagio muttered under her breath.
"What is it Dagi?" Sonata asked.
"Sunset, please tell us what's wrong!" Aria said.
Adagio had pieced it all together, every time she had brought up Sunset's friends, she had seen the pain Sunset had been trying to conceal. "They really didn't..." Adagio said angrily. She was still looking at Sunset, she was looking for a sign that she might be wrong, but there just wasn't one.
"What is it Adagio!?" Aria asked.
"Yeah, if you've figured something out then tell us already!" Sonata replied.
Adagio didn't reply, instead she focused on the final few pieces that would unfortunately confirm her suspicion. She was the one Trixie was looking for last night, and she had just said that your friends would eventually turn on you, and earlier, when she was about to leave, she had said she had 'nowhere to go', and you don't just say something like that. It all seemed to point to that one conclusion. "Sunset," Adagio began. Sunset finally moved her hands away from her face, and looked at Adagio. "Please, tell us what happened." And I hope to Celestia that I'm wrong about this.
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The Sirens no longer hungering for magic, and being thankful for it? Works for me.
Solid explanation on why the Dazzlings care about her well-being. You really need someone to proofread your grammar, though. Congrats on hitting the feature box, by the way.
I can't explain why, as normally such an abrupt change in attitude feels out-of-place, but for some reason this openly friendly dynamic of the sirens feels really good and comfortable. They are surprisingly patient, I must say. You've almost got the answer, Adagio! Just a little more!
To give a small nitpick or two, this chapter may have worked better as the end of the previous chapter, as the intro of this chapter is a direct continuation from the last. Lumping them both together works well also because both chapters cover the same conversation, but no plot transitions happen until the end of this chapter (with Adagio figuring out what happened and pressing further in that direction). Of course, how you have it now is perfectly fine; what I'm describing is just an alternative way to go about it.
Also, while I don't have any suggestions as to how to fix it, maybe switch back to the other girls occasionally (perhaps show the girls at Fluttershy's house discussing what happened? Twilight having a serious talk with them?). I had actually forgotten they did indeed go looking for Sunset after she left, and was reminded when I incidentally re-read the first chapter (Of course, this may just a memory lapse on my part, or just due to the time between updates). Since you started the story going back and forth between the groups, it throws off the rhythm a bit by suddenly ceasing that parallelism between them.
Perhaps, in the first chapter, instead of beginning with Sunset wandering, cutting to the other girls, then cutting back to Sunset, maybe begin with the other girls banging on Sunset's door. That way, it will serve to set the context of the story (the timing, what led to this, the significance of the weather, etc), and won't feel as much like a random jump.
Don't get me wrong- I am still wholly enjoying this story! Just figured I might throw out a few small critiques/suggestions for consideration in future writing. As a non-writer, feel free to ignore me. ^-^
EDIT: Also:
bored
The truth is, Sunset,
last night, barely alive on your final breath, we...
I LOVE THIS!!!!!!!
6570773 I was actually planning for this to be about half as long as it was, and the other half of the chapter would be about one of the groups looking for her, but it just kinda kept going and going and going.
When it comes to the duel perspective thing, I'm hopefully going to have it a chapter or two at a time for each one. So one or two full chapters about one side, then switch for the chapter, OR having a half/half for each chapter in the future.
Though regardless, I will be returning to the search party next chapter.
And........Adagio has worry as an emotion!!
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I getcha. It's amazing how projects just seem to expand when you get into them. :)
Ah, okay, that makes sense. It will be pretty cool to get to see the two coinciding stories draw closer and collide in the end!
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WHOO! Great chapter! Please update this again soon!
You made a good reason for the sirens...make Sunset feel like everyone is out to get her...LOVE IT!
LOVE THIS CHAPTER!!!
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What about singing and stuff?
6572140 Well yeah, okay, no singing is probably bad for 'em.
I think I know what Adagio, Aria and Sonata are going to say to the Rainbooms once Sunset Shimmer tells the three what has happened and when those three see the Rainbooms and Twilight looking for Sunset
6572782 What?
6572940 well I think they might tell the rain booms that they ain't very happy that they didn't believe that Sunset wasn't the Anon-A-Mess (or whatever it is) and abandon her, and also tell them that they don't wanna see them near Sunset again cos she's still upset about what they did to her
there's quite a few capitalization issues
we lost to you and you're friends that day --> 'your'
barley alive --> 'barely'
"they'd only turn on you when it's convenient" I liked that the first time, but the second time came too verbatim and too quickly to really punch me like I thought it should
wait, so Trixie was looking for Sunset before the search party even began? I assume to apologize
nitpicking aside, I really like where this is going. I definitely enjoy the idea of the sirens coming to Sunset's aid and possibly being protective of her (against her own friends, no less!) the dialogue seems to flow nicely and everything makes sense in the world ^__^
6572140 A small price to pay for not living as immortal emotion vampires anymore, exiled from regular society by their "gifts". They only had themselves, because who else would have accepted them if they knew? They were forced by their very nature to sew disharmony and ruin lives everywhere they went, but now they don't have to anymore. They're free, they're normal. They can finally make friends and find love, for the first time in their immortal lives. For the first time, they can be adored without mind magic. It's all they wanted. Just look at these lyrics:
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Well, they wanted world domination. And they probably didn't want to have relationship with someone because humans are not worthy.
Not to mention signing is their special talent and stuff.
6578733 Who wouldn't want world domination in a world that's determined to be against them? If humans are so unworthy, why does it matter so much to them what we think? There's more to life than just what you're good at, and they've had a thousand years or more to practice their talent. Look at how much good it did them. (Barring any wibbly wobbly timey wimey stuff with the portal)
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Sirens are the creatures who wants to be adored, and by as much people as possible. Does it mean they don't care about humans? Yes. Does it mean that thye would like to have no hunger AND world domination? Tottaly, and they almost achieved this, if not ranbooms. They don't have hunger now, it's nice, but it doesn't mean they will suddenly stop hating rainbooms and not wanting world domination.
Unless you mean that broken gems also washed their evilness, then it's logical, it would be just a thing that I don't like personally.
Whoa...well done with the Siren's explanation of thankfulness. Granted, they needed to cool off first, but overall, not bad. Plus, I'm liking how Sunset's pain seems to be effecting them. Really looking forward to the eventual confrontation with the Hu-Main 5 and Twilight. This is gunna be good!!
Talk about coincidences. I just read a story comment talking about the gemstones being sentient parasites who brainwashed the sirens as much as they brainwashed their own victims, and you have the sirens free for the first time in centuries now that the gemstones are destroyed.
Corrections;
you don't have to sugarcoat your words,
The three sirens simply nodded.
"Friends?" Sunset asked.
Comment;
Oh yeah baby.
6597042 One day my spelling/grammar won't be terrible, but apparently that day is not today.
Oh and, thanks for the comments.
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Other than "board" and "suger coat," all the misspellings looked more like typos than lack of knowledge of spelling, so I wouldn't call your spelling terrible. I've corrected stories with far more mistakes than this one.
Thank you for bothering to acknowledge my comment; this happens far less than it should in this supposed "land of love and tolerance."
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Well I do ask for them at the end of every chapter.
6600257 That you do, but that doesn't make replying to comments any less rare.
6603225 While I may not reply to every comment I get, I appreciate each one.
Yes! Here are the sirens good. Such a wonderfull thing, the magic of friendship.
Oh wow.
OW! Suspense stop it!
Stop stabbing me!
OW!
SOMEONE HELP! THE SUSPENCE IS KILLING ME!
...
Not sorry at all.
In all seriousness, this is a really well-done chapter. I like how you've explained it. And dang. Much intense, such wow.
I don't know where this is going,
I'm not sure I know where I want this to go.
I've already finished one fantastic story about how this story could have gone horridly horridly wrong, and now I'm here...
And I've got to know more.
Bring me that light, be it comforting or bittersweet,
I need to see the light at the end of this...
6688949 Agreed, though I hope the light is a good one.
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Given how many sad fics with...sad, endings I've just binged on, I share your sentiments.
6689109 I try to avoid binging on sad or melancholy stories. Not good for the head.
My one criticism...
Is your lack of updates.
i find your lack of updates disturbing do more
this is the best story i have read more!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
sorry
i just want to see the end to this artwork you have done
While i love reading this story i have to ask.
Will someone please adress the fact someone ha9to strip sunset? Its comedy gold! XD
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Dude rlly? U act as if that’s a bad thing.
You know what, that's a pretty reasonable interpretation of what came of the sirens post-Rainbow Rocks. Neat.
Headcanon added.
Adagio really is the smart one figured it out after a few sentences put the pieces together and now she's pissed with all good reason might I add
Don't ever do that in real life. If a person is already that far gone they need to go to emergency. If they are still conscious get them to drink warm and then hot liquids to warm up their core. Checking for frostbite is a good idea as well. Just putting someone in a bed and hoping for the best might end badly. Never put the person in a hot bath without warming their core first.