Twilight teaches Trixie a lesson about the history of unicorn magic.
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MOAR!! I REQUEST MOAR!! Amazing penmanship! Amazing original idea! Love Twixie <333 Hope to see more come from this astounding writer :D
Wow that was really well written, i just hope this isn't one of those authors that writes a short fic and doesn't add new chapters to it, exspecially when the entire plot has so much to be developed and explored, an epic romance? slice of life? who knows!
best of luck!
Not bad. it was different and really new,. But I would have liked to see a bit more romance
Touch!
want more!
Great job! So... what exactly would have happened had Twilight not reach Trixie in time? Would Trixie have died? Huge magical fallout?
This was awesome I wonder if it will ever get updated :I
I refuse to accept that this is a complete story. It's far too deserving of a sequel to stop here.
The best as I ever read them back on EqD. And as I wanted this to continue, YOU SHOULD CONTINUE!
I think this actually works pretty decently as a one-shot, though like others have said, I'd love to see more, as well.
I really dig the sort of dreamy vibe this whole story has, its otherworldly location and tone. I also like the idea of Trixie having been raised by non-unicorn parents--that would explain a lot about her insecurities which she tries to mask with boasting and overconfidence.
Honestly, I'm not sure what happened here. The more I think about it, the less I'm sure of anything beyond the backstory. Twilight brought Trixie out to the Vale because... it's possible to see ancient burial rites enacted and they somehow take away your magic and then... Magical mindrape love? No, I just can't make any sense of what happened. I wonder if I missed something.
I agree with Donny's boy - would love more, but it also works well as a one shot. Well written with good pacing and tone.
This....is a bit creepy...Twilight Takes Trixie to a hallow and then forces her to give up her magic with no forewarning or indication resulting in Trixie getting hurt...and involves long dead spirits to aid in their hookup. Well written but too stalker creepy for me.
Well this is a wonderful set up with many story lines to develop and grow, it would be a shame to leave it as a one shot but it is a solid story in and of itself. It's up to you if you continue, and if you do it seems you will have an audience waiting.
Good job on the story, i really enjoyed the atmosphere and the story building. Please do let us know if you decide to continue it.
I have reviewed this HERE.