Button's Love:The Start

by PhoenixBlaz3

Prologue - Goodbye Might Not Be The End

Prologue

The sun was blazing in Manehatten, the noise of the hubbub heard around every corner. Everypony was getting ready to do their daily routine. Ponies were calling for taxis, others crossing roads. Many others were just getting out of bed, unaware of what other ponies were doing. Everything seemed fine and everypony was adjusting to the morning - apart from a small, brown colt who was standing outside his old flat, next to the oak door which had been closed not too long before. Tears were swelling up in his eyes and he was walking alongside a grey colt, about the same age as him, who had a black mane and hoof wrapped around the brown colt's shoulder.

"I-I'll see y-you again someday, won't I?" muttered the brown colt, frowning and sobbing. He started walking along the hallway, passing the doors reminiscent of a past he would long remember, before down the concrete stairs, along with his friend.

"Of course you will, Button. You'll remember your best pal, Rumble, won't you?" replied the grey colt, smiling optimistically. However, he knew that deep down he was sad as well. It wouldn't be long before he was reduced to tears.

"Sure!" said Button enthusiastically, jumping past a few steps. He had been friends with Rumble ever since he had first moved to Manehatten. He wouldn't normally make friends since his dad moved because of his job, and Button thought it was pointless as he'd just have to say goodbye, which made Button feel lonely.

"But... are you sure I'll see you again?" continued Button, nervously. "I mean, what if you end up... well , I don't really know, but what if-"

He was stopped when Rumble put a hoof to his mouth. Button immediately stopped to listen to what Rumble had to say.

"I wouldn't lie to you, right Button? I'll convince my family to move to Ponyville, one way or another." said Rumble, cheerfully, as he skipped with Button to the door of the flat building.

"O-ok, I'll see you soon. So you promise me that you'll move to Ponyville?" mumbled Button more confidently. He opened the door and walked outside, Rumble soon following.

"Of course I do, Button. I may not be the Element of Honesty, but I'm sure I'll be able to keep a promise like that." replied Rumble, jokingly. He smiled at Button, before wrapping his hooves around Button for one last time, enveloping Button in a hug.

"Th-then I'll see you around..." whispered Button. He started to walk away while waving goodbye to his friend, and began walking to the vehicle that would take him to the train station.

"Just remember... goodbye might not be the end!" yelled Rumble.

"Will do!" shouted Button. He jumped onto the taxi cart, and sat down.

"Have you said goodbye to Rumble yet sweetie?" asked a cheerful voice next to him. The cart was quite spacious, disregarding the amount of luggage piled onto the front. It also had an open front, which allowed the two ponies to feel the heat bouncing off their hide.

"Yes mom!" replied Button, smiling.

"Then let's go!" responded Button's mom. "Taxi, take us to Manehatten train station please."

"Hang on, we'll be there in a jiffy." said the low voice.

"Mom, where's Dad and Gibson?" asked Button.

"We'll meet them at Ponyville!" said the once-again cheerful voice.

"Okie Dokie! Ponyville, here we come!" shouted Button.

Author's Note:

This is my first fanfic ever so please enjoy! Criticism is appreciated as long as it is constructive! Comment and favourite... I mean if you want to. I'll try to upload a chapter every month, maybe more! Peace!

Comments

[The Derpy Doctor]

Your work is liked. Don't be discouraged with the ratings. Good luck with this.

[Masked_Frenchman]

Alright, here we go! 1: Why would Button Mash be sad leaving his friend but then he is all pumped for going to Ponyville so quickly? 2: The chapter is incredibly short, it shows laziness and lack of dedication. The more words you have in a chapter, the better it looks. SOme people like the quick read, but most people like to see words over 6k or even 8k in a chapter, it looks good and more professional. 3: Sentence structure is poor, your spelling and grammar is dead on, but it is not constructed properly. This can be fixed merely with practice and work. Writing is like working out, the more you do, the better you get! My first bit of work was terrible, but now I write good stories! 4: Stories on here don't need a 'prolong' on this site. It's more for professional story books. I mean keep it if you want, it's not really a problem, but it's not needed. It kinda gives a false image of professionalism. Lastly, 5: Try to add more description to the story. Right now the only thing I can see are Rumble and Button Mash in this chapter, I know they are on the train station but what does it look like? What about the weather? Is the station crowded or is not many ponies on it? Can they hear the city sounds from the train station? When you write you must paint a picture with words for what is happening. Here is a way you can practice this: Look at everything in your room,, now start naming off items and things in your room such as blue walls, black computer tower, white laptop, green floors, ect. Once you have listed everything there, make that into a proper paragraph! Turn the list into sentences. The trick is really great practice! Oh. . . one more thing, It's Button's Mom, upper case M because it's part of her name. Now onto the next chapter

[KeyboardClick]

Keep up the good work! I'll be following this once I determine if I like it a lot or just a little.

[Useless Object]

not bad looks good ima read now! S_B TO DA NEXT CHAPTA!

[ButtonMash]

This is the one BUTTONBELLE I have not read. How did it get by me?
Anyways, for a first fic your doing incredible. Keep it up.

[Lady Weenus]

Actually, don't worry about capitalizing the "m" in "mom" if you write "Button's mom" or "his mom". If he's addressing his mom, then you can capitalize the "m". For example, "Mom, where's Dad and Gibson?" Other than that, I agree with the French man in a mask GREAT STORY SO FAR BY THE WAY

[Thisisaname42]

"Just remember... goodbye might not be the end!" yelled Rumble.

roll the credits!!!