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Crystal Night


Reading, writing, drawing and playing. That's my life. A normal teenager life. Also I'm Portuguese /)

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Sugar Dream is desperate to find a job to earn some bits.
Finally, she finds one, as a security guard for a old restaurant with some animatronics.
What can possibly go wrong?

A crossover between MLP and FNAF.

Chapters (7)
Comments ( 49 )

It's alright. The formatting is a bit of a slog, but it's okay. I do take issue with one thing:

100 bits per hour.

Ha, yeah, no. The paycheck for a full five nights at the pizzaria in the game was barely more than a hundred and twenty dollars, and that was thirty hours of work.

5925040 Yeah I know that, I played all of them, but thanks for your opinion. :twilightsmile:
How many bits should she get?

5925075 I'd say five per hour max. She's desperate for a job, so I guess it's plausible.

Uhm, this doesn't quite fit the romance. And what happens? I get that she started, nothing happens!

5928324 The night is still young, on other words chapter two things will be more different.

Oops, guess I missread the Incomplete sign.

awsome chapter dude

5993803 Thanks :twilightsmile: btw nice pic "markiplier"

i found this by mistake but please continue it's so great >////< i think if i could i would totally ship this.

6016780 Thank you so much :twilightsmile:
I found this image and I had to try.

One complaint, Chica is a Chicken not a duck.

6050648 Ops my bad.... :twilightoops:
I will fix that!

I really hate to do this to anyone, but your grammer is poor.

6121854 Like I said in my profile, I'm portuguese.

Would you like me to edit?

6123029 I would really appreciate that. I still need to improve my writing :ajsleepy:

P.m. me with any detail.

I love this story!!!!!!! Crystal Night, may I use the same idea, just with a different animatronic?:pinkiesmile:

6052272
And doesn't Freddy have blue eyes and is called Freddy Fazbear, not Freddy the Bear.

6330989 I know it's wrong, it's a fanfic, when you think about it, they are kinda "evil" not "happy".

I really like it so far!:twilightsmile:
(It's actually one of the only blank x night guard ships I'll even except)

6465871 Thanks, unfortunately I have to pause this story, I need to think how to continue.
By the way, thanks for the favourite!

Well, this sure is interesting! The only really big complaint I have is the grammar and the pacing, but as someone who had to learn a completely different language and still doesn't completely master it, I understand. I hope you get over your writers block and get this story up and running again, because you've caught my attention!

6506182 Thank you very much, really! Yeah, trying to write a story in a different language is hard, but it's worth it, I probably need a proofreader. Also writers blocks it's very annoying, but I already started the new chapter, it may take some time since I'm working on other stories and such. And again, thank you very much for the support :twilightsmile: (And I do posts just to inform how's the story going, if you interest of course)

Can you do more chapters please

To state my opinion of this story, I'm quoting Stan Lee.

"Amazing!"

I can't wait to read more.:pinkiehappy:

How are you doing can't wait for the next chapter

6901667 Hey, I'm great, thanks for asking. It may take a loooong while to write the next chapter.

Yes! Finally! I have been waiting for this forever! Also great work! Bit short, but great nonetheless!

7265441 Thank you so much, it took me longer than I though. I get a lot of writers-block for this story, but thanks for waiting :twilightsmile:

6050648 YOU ARE THE DOC-TORS 5TH INCARNTION YOU WILL BE EXTERMINATED!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Is this gonna receive a new update? I was looking for a different fanfic and saw this. Its pretty great so far!

Well, I just finished reading the fic, and I must say is really a product of its time, in the sense that you can clearly see that it was started when the lore of FNAT (that I don’t think will have a lot of influence in this story, beyond some references) was mostly unknown at the time, but you can also see that as think became more “clear” (FNAF lore became clear, or at least as clear as it can be).

Leaving that side, I think you should get an editor, or at least check the chapters using the text to speech function of the site, it will allowed you to catch mistakes and weird sounding sentences

Now leaving that aside, I can wait for the next chapter, or in other words, see you all next year XD :trollestia:

Shouldn't a one-shot only be one chapter long?

So, are we gonna get this year's chapter? XD

No but seriusly, it would be nice to get another chapter of this fic

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I know, but I've been very busy with work and such, also lack of motivation and creative ideas.
I'll try but no promises.

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Is ok, i understand. I myself have had problems with IRL stuff and creativity when it comes to my fics. I just wanted to know if you’ll still be willing to work on this fic

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