The Various Promptings of gamexpert1990

by gamexpert1990

Prompt: Ruins

Twilight Sparkle and Spike were once again looking at the remains of where Ponyville's library once was. It was an almost daily event for them to pass by the recent ruins. Although they gained a new residence, they still grieved over the loss of their old home.

"...Hey Twi'?"

"Yes, Spike?"

"Do you think Owlowiscious will come back?"

"I hope so, Spike. I miss him already. Don't you?"

"Yeah. I wonder where he is now..."

"Who?"

"You know, Owlowiscious."

"Who?"

" Owlowiscious."

"Who?"

"I told you already! Owlow-"

" Owlowiscious! You're back! Spike, look up!"

"...Wise guy."

"Hoo!"

Author's Note:

Originally found here:

http://www.fimfiction.net/group/204577/weekly-contests/thread/154874/flash-fiction-contest-18#comment/4071033

Comments

[goaway]

Hehe. Adorable!

[sevenofeleven]

The dialog is fine.

It would be cool if you showed us this:

Twilight Sparkle and Spike were once again looking at the remains of where Ponyville's library once was. It was an almost daily event for them to pass by the recent ruins. Although they gained a new residence, they still grieved over the loss of their old home.

What did the wreckage look like, smell like?
You don't have to do too much just a little bit to sketch out the scene.

Other than that, its fine.

[gamexpert1990]

6779273
Thanks for the advice. The main reason I didn't sketch it out more is that it was originally written for a flash fiction prompt with a maximum limit of 100 words.

Also, while I wrote this before the episode aired, Castle Sweet Castle did a pretty good job of showing us what it looked like:

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