To be forgiven
To be forgiven.
For at least a week before the date of the Ponyville talent show, the town was already abuzz with talk. Ponyville was a quiet town, so even a small show or performance could get the residents excited. The occasional flier hung, taped to a window, but the real source of excitement was word of mouth.
Last year’s show had been interesting to say the least. The Cutie Mark Crusaders had stolen the show, for better or for worse. Their ‘rock opera’ had led to the destruction of an entire set, along with the stage’s curtains and multiple floorboards. Needless to say, the only pony happy with the outcome was the town carpenter.
Although the performance had left much to be desired, the stage had been completely rebuilt, which meant that this year’s performance would be on a newer, bigger stage, and that fact alone was enough to excite everypony.
Most of the foals had entered before winter, giving them an entire season to practice their acts, but Scootaloo had only submitted her entry slip days before the performance lineup had been made. Because of this, she got shuffled into the order as last act, and that was perfectly fine with her.
“Do you have your bag?”
“Yes Fluttershy.”
“And your lunch?”
“Yes.”
“Your record?”
“Yes I… no! Where is it?”
Scootaloo dashed over to the shelf where the musical disks were kept.
Her’s wasn’t there.
“Oh no oh no oh no! What if I lost it?!?”
The filly began dashing around the living room, searching high and low, low and high.
“Calm down,” Fluttershy giggled, “It’s right here.”
The yellow pegasus lifted it off of the record player and passed it to Scootaloo.
“Oh thank Celestia…” Scootaloo sighed as she placed it into her bag, “I thought I’d lost it….”
She gave Fluttershy a hug.
“Thanks~”
“Oh, no trouble.”
Fluttershy smiled. Seeing the filly happy was enough to warm her heart.
“So, you’ll be back before dark right?” Fluttershy asked with a hint of worry in her voice.
Scootaloo simply rolled her eyes.
“Yes, I promise.”
“And don’t do anything too dangerous.”
“I’m just going to practice.”
“I know but…”
“Don’t worry.” Scootaloo smiled up at her mother figure, “I’ll be careful.”
With another quick hug, Scootaloo was on her way. Her scooter rocketed down the path towards town as she headed towards the stage.
She had been getting in practice time on a real stage in preparation for the actual performance. Sweetie Belle and Apple Bloom had been on spotlight duty, keeping it trained on her friend as the filly became an orange blur of pirouettes and leaps.
Scootaloo felt a rush as she arrived and stepped onto the stage.
It felt completely natural.
In one motion she swung her saddlebag onto the wood paneling and opened the top. Inside lay three things.
First, there was her lunch, a sandwich and thermos of juice. Simple enough.
Second, there was her record. It was a mystery to her how so much sound could be stored on so small a disk. She set it to the side, revealing the third thing in her bag.
Her dress.
It was possibly her most cherished possession. It had been less than a week ago when Fluttershy had returned from her early morning trip to Carousel Boutique with a bag containing the wonderful garment.
It was bright red, with three layers of fabric for the skirt, each longer than the one on top, and bordered with about an inch of white fabric.
The sleeves were short, barely going past her shoulders. They were layered just like the skirt, but poofed out more.
The belt was black, with an intricate design of leaves and swirls running along its entire length.
It was perfect.
Scootaloo donned the dress, and became an entirely different filly.
She changed from Scootaloo, the orphan;
Into Scootaoo, the dancer.
She couldn’t wait a moment longer to begin her practice.
Atop a cloud, sat a cyan form.
Rainbow Dash lay back in a reclined position. If any of her friends has seen her there, they would have suspected her to be slacking off or napping, which, on any other occasion, she would have been. But not today.
Today, just like every day prior for almost a week now, she was waiting; waiting for the telltale sound of music to announce that a certain orange filly had arrived.
Rainbow Dash had been much more upbeat this past couple of days. Her time was spent working, practicing her tricks, and, in secret, watching Scootaloo practice her routine.
Rainbow Dash had never been one to enjoy dance, it was too slow for her, but in the hours spent watching the filly practice, she had to admit that it was rather impressive. There was something about the flow of the act that brought to mind her intricate aerial routines. Yet, when compared to the dance, Dash’s routines seemed… rough. They lacked the grace that gave the dance its appeal.
Either way, Dash now knew the routine down to a T. She had the music memorized, down to every last note.
Her plan couldn’t have been more perfect.
It was exactly what Scootaloo needed.
Her dance alone was good, but Dash knew that she could make it shine.
The music floated through the cottony cloud, into Dash’s ear. The pegasus smiled.
It was time to watch once more.
Scootaloo ran her routine three times before breaking for lunch. She had worked up quite a sweat, and with it an appetite.
She sat down, still wearing her dress, and dug into her lunch bag. The sandwich was downed quickly, as was the juicebox, but as she moved to throw the bag away she felt something else rattling inside.
With a quick glance, she discovered a hidden treat in the bag. A single, heart-shaped cookie, topped with colored sugar. Scootaloo grinned at Fluttershy’s secret gift, and quickly ate that too.
She rested for a time, letting her food digest.
She stared up at the clouds. She enjoyed watching them lazily drift overhead. There had been a time when she would watch the clouds, hoping for a glimpse of Rainbow Dash, but those times were long gone.
Rainbow Dash…
Her memories of that rainbow-maned Pegasus were varied. Some were good, but others were painful. It always seemed to be the painful ones that surfaced when Scootaloo’s thoughts turned to the pony that used to occupy her dreams.
With a sigh, Scootaloo got back on her hooves, intent on practicing at least once more before heading home, but as she did she caught a glimpse of something in the cloud directly above her.
It had looked like a pony’s face darting out of view.
A blue face.
Has Rainbow Dash been watching me?
The thought made her happy, no matter what her feelings to the pegasus might actually be.
She returned to her practice with a redoubled effort, intent on putting on a real show for her possible audience.
The two days left until the talent show blurred by. Scootaloo practiced and practiced until she felt confident that she could perform her routine in her sleep. Her days were nothing but sleep, practice, and meals with Fluttershy and Angel.
It had been one of the most tiring weeks of her life.
She loved it.
The night of the show was a flurry of activity at Fluttershy’s house. Scootaloo seemed to have misplaced everything. The record wasn’t on the player, her bag wasn’t at the door, and her dress wasn’t hanging up where it usually was.
“Have you seen my bag?”
“Um… no. Try checking under your bed.”
“But I already looked there.”
“Well… try again?”
“Found it!”
“And where was it?”
“Under my bed.”
“But you said you already looked there…”
“... uh... Fluttershy? Have you see the record?”
Fluttershy sighed. The stress of getting out the door was quite a lot more than she had imagined, but with time they were out the door and headed down the path towards the town, and the stage where ponies were already gathering.
The two of them made good time, and Scootaloo was ready to go backstage and get into her dress when Fluttershy stopped her with a hoof on her shoulder.
Fluttershy kneeled down to eyes level with the filly, and opened her mouth to speak.
“Are you um… nervous?”
Scootaloo nodded, “A little.”
“Don’t worry. You’ve worked hard for this. Whatever happens, I’ll be proud of you.”
Fluttershy gave the smaller pony a quick hug before shooing her backstage.
“I’ll be cheering you on.”
Fluttershy made her way through the crowd out front of the stage. Almost all of Ponyville was in attendance.
Crowds like this usually intimidated poor Fluttershy, but not tonight. Tonight, the only thing that mattered, was seeing Scootaloo preform.
Amongst the crowd o pastel coats, one pony stood out. Fluttershy weaved her way through the crowd to Rainbow Dash’s side.
“Oh, you came. That’s so wonderful! Scootaloo will be so happy.”
Rainbow Dash smiled at her friend.
“I wouldn’t have missed it for the world.”
The lights around them dimmed, signaling that the show was about to begin. They sat, side by side as the first act prepared itself to go on stage and begin the show.
They were both excited.
Scootaloo got backstage and changed into her dress as quickly as possible. Once changed, she dropped her record off with Vinyl Scratch, who had volunteered to take care of the music for the show this year.
“Please don’t scratch this one.” Scootaloo pleaded to the D.J. pony.
“Hey,” She laughed, “Just because that’s my name doesn’t mean that’s all I do. Your record will return to you in one piece. I promise.”
Scootaloo thanked the D.J. and headed to the waiting area, she had quite a long wait ahead of her. She was the last act after all.
A half hour passed, and only nine of the twenty acts had gone. Scootaloo was getting anxious. She hadn’t been expecting for it to take this long.
What if I mess up?
You’ll be fine.
But what if…
You’ll. Be. Fine.
It took her a moment to realize that she had been arguing with herself.
“I need to calm down. The stress is going to my head.”
She continued to sit, waiting, growing more anxious with every passing minute. As she waited, the few others who remained in the waiting room slowly disappeared until she was all alone.
Then it was time.
The second to last act finished up on stage, and the performers packed their things. The stage was clear, and a spotlight ready.
Fluttershy stared, excited. It was time finally; time for Scootaloo to shine.
“Are you ready Rainbow Dash?” She whispered to the pegasus next to her.
Only Rainbow Dash wasn’t there. Her spot was empty.
She had left.
She had sat every other act, but was going to skip out on Scootaloo's
Fluttershy felt a pang of sadness in her heart. Rainbow Dash wasn’t going to go through with it. She wasn’t here to cheer Scootaloo on.
She wasn’t going to keep her promise.
She was going to be disloyal.
Fluttershy’s saddened train of thought was interrupted when the music started. It began, soft and low as a small orange figure trotted to center stage.
Scootaloo’s dress shined under the spotlight, a ruby at center stage.
Then, the music jumped, and so did Scootaloo. Her routine began to bring across the stage, from end to end. She danced her heart out, banishing all of her nervousness with her first few moves.
She was a blur of motion and grace, flowing across the stage, leaving no floorboard untouched.
The music ebbed and flowed, like tides on a beach, and Scootaloo was the sea breeze, flowing along the sandy banks.
The routine progressed, and the music built.
Then, with the final pirouette and the crescendo of the music, something happened.
Just above the stage, a rainbow exploded, as if it had been summoned by the orange filly’s dancing.
She held her final pose, and stared in shock at the wave of color that seemed to exist only to highlight her existence.
Silence.
As the rainbow began to fade, and motes of light began to twinkle down onto the crowd, the awe-struck ponies that made up the audience exploded into applause.
Scootaloo nearly cried. Never in her life, had she felt so truly happy.
With a bow, she left the stage, heart soaring.
Being the last performance, the night had already fallen around Scootaloo’s routine. It was the perfect cover for Rainbow Dash’s plan.
She had told nopony about it. Nopony had any idea what she was planning. She watched the performance from the sky, waiting for the perfect moment in the routine she knew so well. Then she descended towards the stage below.
Never in her life had Rainbow Dash performed a trick to do anything but draw attention to herself. That’s what the tricks were meant for, to draw attention to their performer, but not tonight. Tonight’s Sonic Rainboom was for one pony only. It was for Scootaloo.
Of course, even though nopony in the audience had any idea where the mysterious rainbow had come from, Scootaloo knew the instant she saw the sky light up.
Rainbow Dash had done something for her.
For her alone.
As she stepped out of the changing room, two pegasai waited for her, one yellow, and one blue.
“Hey Squirt…” Rainbow Dash murmured, softly hugging the filly back.
“Rainbow Dash… thank you so much.”
The Rainbow pegasus took a step back and smiled at the filly.
“It was nothing. Nothing you didn’t deserve anyway.”
“Listen… Rainbow Dash… I…”
But she was cut off as a magenta pony interjected into their conversation.
“Scootaloo,” Cheerilee chimed, “It’s time for the award ceremony”
“Oh, um…”
Scootaloo looked from Cheerilee to Rainbow Dash until the cyan pegasus nodded.
“Go on. You deserve whatever you get.”
With a smile plastered onto her face, Scootaloo followed her teacher back to the stage, and once there, she waited.
The awards were handed out one by one. Best magic show, best comedy routine, all the usuals were there.
But one was given out that hadn’t been in last year’s set, a medal that the situation for its awarding hadn’t arisen in years.
“Our final award for the night,” Chimed Cheerilee, “Goes to… SCOOTALOO!”
Scootaloo gasped. She couldn’t think of any award she would have won.
“W-what did I get?” she asked, dashing towards her teacher.
With a grin, Cheerilee produced an award the little filly had never seen before.
“You’ve won, the Cutie Mark Award!”
She was dumbfounded.
“W-what?!?!”
With a sly grin Cheerilee pointed to Scootaloo’s flank, and sure enough, there it was.
Her Cutie Mark.
Depicted on her flank were two ballet shoes, each pale yellow with pastel pink straps, Fluttershy’s colors. But these weren’t normal ballet shoes, they were winged, and the wings were cyan.
Fluttershy’s colors were there to keep her hooves on the ground, and Rainbow Dash’s wings for when she wished to soar.
As the medal was placed around her neck, the crowd exploded into applause once more, but two voices stood out louder than any of the others.
“Way to go Squirt!”
“WooHoo! She did it!”
Those two pegasai cheered loudest, and it brought a tear of joy to her eye.
Scootaloo returned home that night; home to Fluttershy’s cottage, or in Scootaloo’s mind, her mom’s cottage, although those words never were said aloud. Even so, Scootaloo sensed that Fluttershy thought something similar.
The filly fell asleep with a smile on her face. This had most definitely been the best night ever, and tomorrow could only be better.
Rainbow Dash had promised her some flying lessons, seeing as her wings were finally big enough.
Scootaloo had asked for only flying lessons though, no tricks or stunts. She was a dancer after all, not an acrobat.
The filly ran over her schedule for the next day.
Wake up,
Get breakfast,
Feed the animals,
Maybe go crusading with her friends,
And finally, Fly.
And thus began Scootaloo’s new life.
The end.
Author’s note: Here it is. The shiny new rewritten ending. I hope you enjoyed it.
-Juy
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I liked this ending, very good story too. I will be watching you for new stories
Hell yeah! Much better, that was the ending I was looking for! A great story and a great ending!
yea this was wayyy better
This is a much better ending than the last one, it seems that everything has resolved as it should be and the most important questions have been answered. I admit that Scoot's cutie mark blindsided me in its form but I don't think you could have chosen a better one for her, the added "Cutie Mark Award" fits with the narrative and the set up for a foal's talent show.
There are some thoughts for the future but those are all things that I'll have to wonder, such as how Scootaloo's relationship with the other crusaders will progress, but that's just idle thoughts as the story has been nicely wrapped up, Scoot and Dash have made up, Scoot has a home and a mother and her cutie mark, leaving peopel satisfied.
Excellent work and probably the best done Scootalove I've ever seen, definately the most in-character and the most heartwarming I've ever read, too bad this won't go on EQD but that's their loss. I'm definately recommending this story to any brony I meet.
Now I must sleep, I work in 10 hours.
very very nice it was great it was 20%COOLER WOOHOO
and way to go scootaloo I thought she would get her cutie mark from dancing now all thats left it for it to be put on TV you have quickly become one of my favorite writers on here.
IMPROVED ENDING IS AWESOMELY IMPROVED!
This ending si at least 120% better than the previously one, the original ending gave a feeling that it was somewhat half-done, just done for the sake of it
GREAT JOB!
Ah, much better. This ending has some real closure and gives some time for the story to properly end, unlike that last sudden ending.
YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY
Yay for Scoots
Plus watch. No other words need be spoken, for there are none to say.
SEQUEL DEMANDS NOW GO DO IT RARW!!!!
lol
Id love to see a sequal of this that depicts her life as the years go on maybe. You know, I think Scootaloos my favorite character in MLP, theres not much known about her. And everyone seems to love her. I hope we get to find out sometime what her background is.
this was great really nice ending read every Chapter hope when i stop being lazy i can make something have as good
WHAT THE FUCK
all my favourite stories are ending!
god dammit!
I love the story, very much. But something about this ending seems very lacking too. I really dislike the idea that Scootaloo's cutie mark is at all attached to Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash. I almost feel like Scootaloo's cutie mark should be her own, the way it is written it's almost like she's not responsible for discovering her own cutie mark and is carrying the credit to Rainbow and Shy on her person.
Think about it. It's not like the Mane 6 all have tributes to Rainbow Dash in their cutie marks.
Otherwise it's a wonderful story and your rewrite gave Scoot a Cutie Mark which is how I felt it should end.
improved is improved, this is beter than the last one for sure
good job
I love the new ending! And... thats about it really... Kinda a short comment eh'?
Everyone else has said what's needed to be said.
Great job. :)
Awesome! Way better, and the cutiemark you studied for this is just purrrfect! ^_^ Bravo!
I loved it
Now this is an ending that makes justice to the rest of the story, I liked it a lot more that the previous one.
This pleases the herd!
A much better new ending!
My eyes are leaking...
GREAT JOB!
very cool! what else can i say?
I really like this outlook on Scoot's life. In almost every other Fic I read, she either dies or becomes a Wonderbolt. She's even shown to be a good dancer in the show, and everypony writes about her following Rainbow's steps!
Ew.
This was great. There were a couple grammar/punctuation mistakes, and the story could have built a better bond between Fluttershy and Scootaloo, but otherwise it was absolutely fantastic. I liked it a lot.
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I lost track of this story a while back due to crappy internet problems. So glad I found it again and it was well worth the wait. This is an amazing piece of work.
Very well done. Heartwarming, well written, and everyone stayed in character
I've had a similar story in mind, cept with Rarity instead of Fluttershy. She interacts with the girls more.
awesome story bro.
Already one of my favorites. Very, very well done!!
Woot! A much better ending than before. Any chance of a sequel? I have no idea what the plot would involve, but the situation you have created here is so ripe with potential ideas, I'm sure you could come up with something!
That was heartwarming.
Thank you!
i44.tinypic.com/14b8d9c.png Hi everypony! Stalin and the crew here, bringing another installation on Stalinview! Today we shall look at story "Life in a slower lane"
Let's dig into "A warm home for winter!"
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i41.tinypic.com/spenhf.png Ahhhh, good ol' poetic entry! Misha likes poetry! And vodka! *hic*
"She loved the quiet of this time of year. The birds only sung occasionally, and the scampering of small creatures in the underbrush was muffled by the leaves into a pleasant rustling."
i44.tinypic.com/14b8d9c.png I thought Fluttershy loves bird's singing
i44.tinypic.com/1440085.png She do. Autumn is just so romantic to not like
i44.tinypic.com/14b8d9c.png Pheh, give romance to Misha. I don't like it
i44.tinypic.com/1440085.png Ooooooow, yeeeeaaaah, boss. Remember...
i44.tinypic.com/14b8d9c.png ENOUGH!
i44.tinypic.com/1440085.png ...That time when you cried on
i44.tinypic.com/14b8d9c.png SHUT UP!
i44.tinypic.com/1440085.png Okay, okay. Please don't kill me!
“I-I was just o-out here e-enjoying the uh…. The l-leaves.”
i41.tinypic.com/spenhf.png D'awwwwwwww
“R-Rainbow Dash l-left me h-here… s-she said I w-was too s-slow… that s-she didn’t have time to wait for s-slowpokes to catch up…”
i44.tinypic.com/14b8d9c.png A little outdated. Cuz last episode stated that Scotaloo can't fly, so she couldn't even possibly keep up with Rainbow, she can't even begin to keep up.
"At this Scootaloo’s lip quivered and she looked down again, “I….. I don’t…. I don’t exactly have a…. home…” She said slowly, “I…. I’ve been sleeping in the clubhouse…”
i43.tinypic.com/w2kmfo.png Sooo where does she slept before club house was built?
"curled up in to greet his best friend and mother figure"
i43.tinypic.com/w2kmfo.png I don't know about that, Angel is usually very, VERY mean to Fluttershy. He is kind only in rare ocassions.
"where many carrot greens lay strewn across "
i41.tinypic.com/spenhf.png A little clumsy description, don'cha think?
i44.tinypic.com/14b8d9c.png Ok, enough for this chapter. Let's dig into "Encouragement!"
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"and began her trek to the kitchen"
i44.tinypic.com/14b8d9c.png Word "trek" usually means long journey. It've worked if she headed out to a kitchen of Sugarcube corner, but defenetely not kitchen of same house she in
i44.tinypic.com/1440085.png Wow, look who's talking.
i44.tinypic.com/14b8d9c.png Shut up! Me have purfekt engrish!
i44.tinypic.com/1440085.png Yeah, figures.
"soft melody, slowly rocking her head"
i44.tinypic.com/1440085.png mutually exclusive clauses detected!
"All the creatures were calm, some of them even half asleep as they listened to the quiet tune."
i41.tinypic.com/spenhf.png Fluttershy used "Sing!" It's super effective!
"spill chicken feed"
i43.tinypic.com/w2kmfo.png Is chicken's food liquid?
i44.tinypic.com/14b8d9c.png I feel we shall make a BIG overview today. Let's proceed to "Guilt"
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“CUTIE MARK CRUSADERS, ANIMAL FEEDERS!”
i44.tinypic.com/14b8d9c.png Dear autor, they have already tried that.
i41.tinypic.com/spenhf.png Yeah, they have feeded the pigs!
"“It’s the middle of winter.” Apple Bloom said in a flat voice, “What animals are we gunna feed?”
i44.tinypic.com/14b8d9c.png Everypony! Make your guesses!
i41.tinypic.com/spenhf.png Oh me! Narwhals, narwhals, swimming in the ocean! Causin' a commotion cuz they are so awesome...
i44.tinypic.com/14b8d9c.png Nope. There's no ocean in equestria
Ok, me next! They gonna feed polar bears!
i44.tinypic.com/14b8d9c.png There is no polar bears in Equestria, PD
i44.tinypic.com/e8weuf.png Oh! I know! They gonna feed mammoths!
i40.tinypic.com/2h6y8eg.png Get. Out. Of. Here. Discord
i44.tinypic.com/e8weuf.png Heh heh heh
“I SMELL COOKIES!”
i41.tinypic.com/f1m5x3.jpg
"I thought that maybe I could use it to knock the leaves off of all the trees. Wouldn’t that be cool?"
i44.tinypic.com/14b8d9c.png No. No leaves = dying trees
i44.tinypic.com/14b8d9c.png Uh-huh. On to the next one!
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“So you TALKED that dragon into leaving?!?!?”
i44.tinypic.com/1440085.png Too!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Much!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Points?????????????!!!!!!!!!!!
"Apple Bloom was hlping her family"
i44.tinypic.com/1440085.png hlping indeed
"The hedgehogs"
i41.tinypic.com/spenhf.png These?
i43.tinypic.com/dvm1jo.jpg
"you need to just deal with it"
i42.tinypic.com/dxzpz.png
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i44.tinypic.com/14b8d9c.png Okay, time to speed up the process.
i41.tinypic.com/spenhf.png Yeah, i can't wait to do overview!
i44.tinypic.com/14b8d9c.png And honestly, i am tired of making jokes.
i44.tinypic.com/14b8d9c.png LET'S READ OTHER CHAPTERS IN SILENCE!
OVERVIEW:
i44.tinypic.com/14b8d9c.png Okay, guys. Let me begin.
i44.tinypic.com/1440085.png Do we have a choice?
i44.tinypic.com/14b8d9c.png Nnnnope
i44.tinypic.com/1440085.png Then why do you ask?
i44.tinypic.com/14b8d9c.png Ahem, let's begin with that:
This is a well-written, deep psychological story. It is good, but it have some minor flaws. They are:
i43.tinypic.com/w2kmfo.png - Thing that Rainbow hasnt seen Scotaloo in few months is not believable at all. That mean she hasnt meet Fluttershy nor came into her house which she do ocassionly.
i44.tinypic.com/1440085.png Also, seems like she havent asked Fluttershy about Scoot's location, OR that Fluttershy never told any of her friends that Schoot lives in her place. Which raises even more question.
i44.tinypic.com/1440085.png For example, Is NO ONE ever visited Fluttershy in her residence for few months. Why? Is reads like Fluttershy conservated herself in her house for months!
i43.tinypic.com/w2kmfo.png - You can throw it on Rainbow's personality, but still her incindent with Scotaloo "second overall" is not believable.
i44.tinypic.com/1440085.png Cuz if she was hurting herself THAT much from first time, why she hasn't at second time, when she CLEARLY understood that such a behavior can make Scoot's mental scars even deeper?
i44.tinypic.com/14b8d9c.png Ok, now about the good things. Misha, go on.
Okay!
i41.tinypic.com/spenhf.png Each character's personality is shown outstandingly! There are some minor questions about Scoo's personality, but we won't mention these cuz they are nitpicks.
Story itself is very atmospherical and interesting! Writing style is good, descriptions are good and overall feeling from reading it is good.
i44.tinypic.com/14b8d9c.png Ending is good too, althou Scoo's main talent is schooter, not dancing.
VERDICT: DEFENETELY WORTH READING!
This is a really, really nice fic, nothing too sad or dramatic, it's just a nice, enjoyable read seeing Scootaloo grow in life, and Dash too, her cutie mark was perfect, it's a wonderfully written story
this was such a nice story to read. I'll admit i got nervous near the end because i thought scootaloo was going to leave fluttershy and go with rainbow dash but that ending ended my suspicions and what an ending.
*Well, don't let me down, google translator*
Hi, I'm from Russia and I really bad in English, so excuse me for any mistakes. I can read at least
This is the most cute story I read. Seriously. Russian brony often write about another human in Equestriа, or much worse things. And fics like this are rare.
Actually, I would like to talk more about it (specifically, about Fluttershy), but I'm afraid I ca't properly formulate my thoughts.
Anyway, I really liked this story. Thank you for it!
tears have been shed... beautiful story. wonderfull ending. i bow down to you sir, for sharing this with us.
Well, this looked like it was going to be one of the better stories I've read. Your writing and pacing were pretty good, and the characters were true to form. You even looked like you were setting up for a really good ending. But then, it all fell apart. I won't critique all that hard, as this is just back-seat-writing, but I just don't see Scoot being all that happy that Rainbow would ''add'' something to her performance.
''Wow, you worked really hard on that, and it was pretty good, but you know how to make it perfect? If I do the spectacular finale.''
This fanfic is incredible and made me want to cry and d'aaaww at the same time. You truly have a talent. Keep up the good work.
I remember finding this story when I first came to this site (that was back when chapter 4 was new) and I enjoyed and I'm glad you finished it too. Keep up the good work.
Words cannot begin to describe the feelings elicited from this story.
Kudos to you, dear author. May you forever walk in the sunlight.
This story was one of the most heartfelt stories I have read in quite some time.
I really love how you wrapped everything up. This story deserves a five:
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"Either way, Dash now knew the routine down to a T. She had the music memorized, down to every last note.
Gah! That'll rui-
Her plan couldn’t have been more perfect."
You're not going to do a... sonic rainboom, are you?
"Tonight’s Sonic Rainboom was for one pony only. It was for Scootaloo."
Oh. That'll work
Welp, this was certainly worth the read. Well done with the characterization. I thought that was spot on. There were some aspects of the plot that were a little questionable (Dash not seeing 'Shy over the winter?), but overall, this was a very well-written story. Well done, sir
YYYYYAAAAAYYYYY!!!!!