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The Gambler

Lucky Streak, a pegasus raised on the streets of New Poneleans, runs a travelling riverboat casino alongside his friends and associates. Follow his story as he learns about friends, values, loss, and doing the right thing with the help of his friends along the way.

My first fic. Criticism is appreciated, hopefully constructive. Thanks for reading!

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TheRealShadowFoot

TheRealShadowFoot #1 · May 15th, 2012 · · · Chapter 1 ·

heh this isn't bad. I like to gamble myself, mostly on texas hold em. thumbed and faved. i want more soon.

Lucky Streak

Lucky Streak #2 · May 15th, 2012 · · · Chapter 1 ·

Thank you kindly. I'll try to have another chapter cranked out soonish.

TheRealShadowFoot

TheRealShadowFoot #3 · May 15th, 2012 · · · Chapter 1 ·

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I should mention that you may want to try spacing out your paragraphs a bit more. I also noticed a couple confusing sentences, but im sure someone else could better tell you how to fix them. or it may just be me, either way, a great fic for a starter. I'd like to see streak versus applejack since AJ seems to be a bit sharper on the uptake than carrot top.

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