Trixie has always envied Twilight Sparkle's magical ability, wishing she could match her talent one day. With the incident involving the Alicorn Amulet still fresh in her mind as though it was yesterday, Trixie sets out into the woods and practices a wide array of spells, accumulating magical knowledge along the way. Despite hours upon hours of practice, Trixie feels as though it's all hopeless.
However, one of her training sessions is interrupted by a lone traveler who calls herself Starlight Glimmer. Trixie tries to find out who Starlight is, but the latter pulls her along until she reaches a path with two options, both of which have their pros and cons. Such a difficult decision was the last thing she needed.
Thanks to Soaring for pre-reading this story.
I loved it!
Ended a little quickly though.
5939799 Thanks for the comment. I'm glad you enjoyed it, and I'll try to do a better job with my next story.
5939805 No worries, it was good. I just think the ending was sudden was all.
This is a very interesting, and rather creative one-shot. The contrast between Trixie and Starlight is handled very well. They may share a common adversary, but one has been decidely more radical in her contrast of opinions.
It was pretty good. As said before, the pacing could use some work, but it was a pretty enjoyable fic. 4/5
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Thanks for the feedback. I'll try to improve in regards to pacing for future stories of mine.
Just do what comes natural. It's good to get feedback, but write what you want to write about.
A really good story. I thought, the pacing was very good.
But I do have one question. Why did Starlight knock out Trixie? It's not like she was held captive - Starlight could have just walked away at any time.
5940155 Starlight didn't want Trixie to chase her, so she knocked her out. As a result, Trixie wouldn't know where she ran off to. It also ties in with her more aggressive nature, given how she was more than willing to blast Twilight in the S5 premiere.
Anyway, I'll add a tiny part to Starlight's dialogue to make it a little clearer, and I'm glad that you enjoyed reading the story.
A pity Trixie didn't skullfuck that bitch.
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Well, that makes sense. I blame my headache for not noticing.
5940234 That's okay. Anyway, I hope you feel better soon.
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Thanks!
5940246 You're welcome!
Great job Mana!
Love it!
5947038 Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed the story.
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Anytime. Though you might want to edit my info in your Gilda story though.
'twas a good read
5948416 Thank you for the compliment. I'm glad you enjoyed the story.
make a sequel please
Who is that other mare? If twilight is first and Trixie is third third.
6479154 Sunset Shimmer. I see her as being incredibly gifted in magic, being a former student of Celestia and all. And with some of her actions, both good and bad, I'd imagine some are aware of who she is, even if she's technically in another dimension now. Come to think of it, I can't help but wonder how different ponies react to the exploits of Twilight and her friends.
Anyway, thanks for reading the story.
It's hard to find stories where Starlight is still a villain. I appreciate bumping into one when I can.