With graduation close on the horizon, the Hu-Mane six are all looking to their own paths in life. But while some settle into the family business and others gaze forward with wonder, others, one former unicorn in particular, are not so certain of what the future holds. But just when their friendship seems lost, something begins that will alter all of their lives forever, and send them down a path there can be no return from.
After centuries of normality magic is returning to the human world, and with it countless enchanted races. But dragons and chimera's will be the least of their worries when they learn an ancient evil, Grogar the Conqueror, has woken from his slumber, and is Tartarus bent on reclaiming his throne and exacting his revenge on the world that defied him. Aided by villains old and new, Sunset Shimmer and her friends will need each other now more than ever if they are to protect their home from the Dark Lord of Tambelon.
Looks good so far. Love the Crystal-Chrysalis play. Also, can we get a bit more info on the girl? Like an appearance to work with, like skin, hair, and eye color?
Hmm, this looks interesting! There're a couple of things that stuck out; for example it's Pinkie Pie (two words) instead of 'Pinkiepie', and I think it's Tambelon and not Tambleon (but don't quote me on that; the 80s were a long time ago,
). Still, I'm always up for some epic EQG action, 
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6031429 Checks internet search. ...
Oh well, nothing some editing can't fix. Thanks for the watch, and rest assured, there will be action to spare in the next chapter.
Aaaaaand the Doctor is involved... that figures,
Rarity seems even more high-strung than usual (and that's saying something,
), but I really like the way you've got Grogar using Human Twilight's bond with Shining Armor to turn her to the dark side without her even realizing it; classic supervillain MO, 
6055566 Thanks. All the big MLP: FIM villains thus far, Discord, Nightmare Moon Tirek and the lot, have been masters of deception and manipulation. There's been so much antiticpation for a return to Grogar in the show, I refuse to do any less than my best when writing him.
SKYRIM REFERENCE!
6198652 I was wondering if someone would recognize the speech I used.
6199090 Yeah good Skyrim reference and Grogar is a major villain and I hope he will come into G4 and become a major threat.
I died,
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Okay, now that that's out of my system... you are doing a good job; there's some minor spelling mistakes here and there but nothing that a good editing pass couldn't fix, and in terms of characterization I think you're hitting pretty close to the mark.
I think the plot is moving at just the pace it needed to thus far; just don't spend too much time detailing the girls' training before getting to the good stuff. There was another story that was in a similar vein to this one (though it was more 'Men in Black' than 'You're a Wizard, Harry') that had a lot of really great stuff going for it, but then seemed to kind of fall dead before the real story began.
Also I think the author decided he wanted to make videos more than write horsewords, but whatever,
Keep going!
6246403 Thank you!
Aww. No mention of Megan.
I rather like MLP generation crossovers, so lets see where this one leads.
Love the story and pace. I hope you will continue the story soon.
Will this story have any Take Thats to The Ending of the End Part 1 and 2?