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Firefly's empire - it's a work in progress.
NOOOOOO I READ IT ALL...
I am very sad now...
New chapter out soon?
Plz?
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I'm glad you enjoyed StSc!
Chapter 11 is coming along, slowly but surely.
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YAY
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Thank you for taking the time to not only try FoE: StSc, but to write a review of it!
First of all - descriptions. Yes. The original draft (this is not the first posted version of ch01 - what an abomination *that* was) had basic, "mane, coat, etc" descriptions, which somehow managed to escape the complete rewrite.
I've considered rewriting chapters - 2 and 3 aren't that impressive, I hate to admit it but it's true - but time spent rewriting chapters is time spent not advancing the story, and I have a lot of stuff to get to. That, and classes start up in a couple of weeks, so time becomes much tighter.
Chapters 11 and 12 should be done by next week or so.
Huzzah, at least someone's relationship isn't getting all screwed up! Though, knowing how addicts work, I can't say I'm hopeful that her mother will stay off the cider. That, or something terrible is going to happen to her unexpectedly...
And that solo meeting with the shrink went quite well. Though, there wasn't all too much to be concerned about given the circumstances of her last jaunt outside. It's good to see that they somewhat expected that and will keep her on duty! Though again, that's kind of a no-brainer, considering I don't think she'd break out of the stable if they said no, and the story still has to go on!
And now, Firefly takes the first step in her plan to perform a coup that installs her as the head of her own military dictatorship! I mean, it's pretty comprehensively planned and all. I'm kidding of course, but it's good to see that the council doesn't have to be overly cautious all the time about everything.
Also, you said the thing!
Overall it was a good second half to the return chapters. Lots of retrospective and insight to the problems that come from being thrust into vicious combat before returning to what was once 'normal life'. I'm interested in seeing how the cast feels once they get back out there again, but in the case of Firefly, I think she'll be feeling like she's back in her element. Even though it's caused her nothing but problems so far.
Firefly seems to have frequent mood wings, is her blood sugar level low? She should fix that. Low blood sugar can be fatal.