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Tau22


A writer by hobby, a pony fan by heart.

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  • TMisadventures of Trixie
    What is a reformed and apologetic mare to do? Continue being the best travelling showpony around, of course! These are the adventures of Trixie Lulamoon. Foes are faced, crowds entertained and the best kind of friendships are forged. Unusual ones.
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As a small filly manages to get herself lost deep within the Everfree forest, she has a close call with some of the local denizens. Luckily, an old acquaintance shows up with some new tricks up her sleeve.


A sort-of prequel to the Misadventures of Trixie

Just a little oneshot story, partly because I felt like it, partly because I feel Trixie deserves all the love she can get. Written as a self-contained little tale which will hopefully put a smile on your face by the end.

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I love Trixie and will definitely read this.

You probably don't need to put spoiler warnings for seasons 3 and 4 now. (Season 5, sure.)

Also, consider including a cover image. Even if it's just a random Trixie/Applebloom image you found on the Internet. Stories with a cover picture tend to get more views. Here are some random ones I found...

https://derpibooru.org/303796 (cute)
https://derpibooru.org/696133 (random)
https://derpibooru.org/677294 (you could even edit the text in the speech bubbles to make relevant to story)

It's a nice enough story. You should pay a bit more attention to formatting. Leave a blank line between paragraphs; it's like a wall of text.

Also, this thing you do with the colons is quite unorthodox:

Finally, the princess spoke:
"Trixie?"
The light dissipated as the trickster almost jumped and looked her right in the eyes. She seemed to sigh with relief:
"Oh, it's you, Twilight. You startled me."

A more traditional way of formatting/punctuating that would be:

Finally, the princess spoke. "Trixie?"

The light dissipated as the trickster almost jumped and looked her right in the eyes. She seemed to sigh with relief. "Oh, it's you, Twilight. You startled me."

That all having been said, it's a nice story, and a nice interpretation of Trixie's character, so it has my thumbs up.

5889324 Thank for the review, mate.

Yeah, I'm used to Fanfiction.net, where it just inserts spaces automatically, so that'll teach me.

And as for how I use the colons, I am afraid that is a quirk you'll have to put up with when it comes to me. For one, in my native language, you introduce a character's speech through a colon. Twenty years of having that drilled into me are hard to shake, heh.

As for the actual speech being on a new line, I find I personally prefer it that way, so unless it interferes with the readability of the text, I am unlikely to change it.

As for cover image, I'd personally rather have none than have one that wouldn't quite fit.

Thank you again for the review and glad you liked it.

5889344 All the punctuation aside it was still a nice little story. You set up the plot well, and the simplicity was nice too. If you ever need cover art or want an idea for one I can help you if you'd like.

Good luck and keep writing! :scootangel:

It was a wonderful story, I love Twilight and Trixie pairings, if it be romantic, sisterly or just as friends :twilightsmile:

A very sweet story. I have a bit of a soft spot for stories where the characters make their peace and bury the hatchet. Trixie as the reviled outcast has been played out far too long, in my opinion. It's good to see the Mane Six actually show the harmony and friendship they're supposed to represent, don't you think?

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The Reformed and Apologetic Trixie wholeheartedly agrees!

That was nice, light-hearted tale of redemption for Trixie. I noticed several small errors in spelling and grammar, but I don't count those things to be important in an amateur fanfic. It earned a "Thumbs-Up." :trixieshiftleft:

Such a warm story. Storytelling seems like a natural fit for Trixie and with her talent for iillusions, oh yeah.

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We would very much tend to agree, friend! And we are glad you liked it!

Woo for getting off my flank and enjoying a story I really should have gotten to sooner!
My compliments, and now I really wish I could see one of those new shows.

6327327 The Reformed and Apologetic Trixie is most thankful for your patronage, good sir/madame!

And we are glad you enjoyed it!

I'm interested in reading more of your stories, especially because of Trixie. I find it refreshing the way the mane six just accept her, without any dwelling on past events. There's not of a conflict to drive this story (as in a character wants something, but can't get it for some reason) other than right at the beginning, but it is kind of short enough to get away with it. My main problem (and it's not a big one) is when characters are frequently referred to as "the farmpony" or "the travelling showpony" instead of their name, especially when irrelevant details are included like "Equestria's most graceful pony, and one-time reluctantly-ultra-popular photo model".

6379243 We are quite grateful for your patronage!

I wrote this as just a short little story, which gradually evolves into its more ambitious 'kind-of-sort-of-sequel-but-more-just-a-continuation' (TM), Misadventures of Trixie. Shameless self-promotion, ho! In any case, I really just wanted the central themes to be close to the show itself. No matter what happens, everyone deserves a second (or third) chance, as the case may be. Friendship saves the day, yada yada, you know how it goes.

And I'm sorry if the way I refer to ponies is a bit of a peeve of yours. I acknowledge that I sometimes may overuse a particular word to refer to a certain character, and often just can't help but get a little needlessly wordy (like your Fluttershy example you plucked out)

I do hope you continue enjoy any of my writings you come across, nonetheless. And once more, glad you liked it.

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