Storm is a pegasus living a normal life in Canterlot. Kinda. She yearns for something interesting and exciting so she joins the Royal Guard. Almost immediately, she gets more then she ever bargained for. Dark secrets, betrayal, love, and tangled webs of lies lay in the path towards winning the unexpected war. Rivalries on the same side and hatred mixed in the toil. Disharmony running rampant through the land, uncontrolled, and with so many secrets behind it, secrets many are willing to kill for to keep. Can Storm and a group of unexpected friends save their world? Or is their land doomed forever?
DISCLAIMER: Midnight Blossom and Cloud Skipper were not created by me. They are simply present in my story. They were made by Equestria-Prevails(or at least that's her deviantart account)
Thanks to https://www.fimfiction.net/user/Midnight-Glimmer for being an awesome editor
Story by MoonBrush
I like the premise. ^.^ Though the memory conversation at the end leads me to wonder who was who? Also a miss-wording "that way, 'your' fears will never find you.."
5901191 I fixed the miss-wording. And for the memory conversation, I changed it so that I think it was a bit more clear who was who (storm being the grey filly). If you have any other ideas on how to make it clearer, please reply.
Thanks
Think I'mma have to track this one. There are still a few little spelling issues in the first two chapters, but overall the idea is nice to me. Storm seems sweet too. For a first fic it's a good start :) Wish mine had been so functional and well... readable a year down the line Without wanting to punch myself in the kidney. lol.
5902423 Great, thanks for the follow. And I'm sure your fic is fine. Guardians of the new moon right? Anyway, if you don't mind, could you point out where the spelling errors are^^
5902836 Oh sure, lemme reread a bit and I'll send them in a pm. Don't want to clutter your page too much lol. And no no Guardians is... well I'd call it Adequate I think. I'm more referring to an old Sonic fic I did. Man it was a mess.
Calling it... Changeling