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While Jerry was annoyed and a bit peeve Shadow and Lovely told Lush of what he was planning, he did give in the advice of talking to Albert...but did promise a ‘suitable punishment’ for them both. Finding the infected man was tricky, thankfully he asked where the man was at...although they all pointed to his Labs. So after finding the complex itself and getting in the entrance, all he had to do was find him… but he did found a few large aquariums with...many creatures he wasn’t familiar or aware of in this ocean.

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Moving on and not thinking about what other things Albert planned to contain and ‘research’, he moved on down the hall, thankful for the simplicity of this place. It was there he have to open, and close, the next bulkhead before going further down the hall.

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Sighing some, he admit. “Yeah, although Gnarl been getting odd reports of something with the Heart-- nothing concrete yet.” then went on to explain. “I was having trouble figure out how to get them back, considering my Minions are plenty, but my armor can still be penetrated. At least until I noticed a few of the things on the list, which could help improve my armor, once I figure out how.” placing a hand under his chin as he went on to speak out.

Gnarals
"He" would work better

“I know that a siege is inevitable, and I accept the risks of losing many Minions while fighting, maybe the Dark Castle if we found that ‘something’.” then told. “But I’m hoping that I can stall Dainn somehow, at least enough time for the Blues to patch up the two and send them here along with everything of importance. Just in case Dainn does find the Dark Castle and I’ll have to hold back and act as distraction of a good while.” thinking over more… he added.

did he mean hed lose the castle or?

“The mind control effects can be reversal,” started Jerry. “If I use a ‘small dosage’ it’ll affect them temporary, a few days work. But to be honest...I’m think of getting the Equestrian princess’s first as in a sense they are high priority-- but I know when I do, the elemental wielders will be on a heavy guard in their areas, and make things difficult.” then said. “On the other hand I can get the element bearers first, but four of them are in ponyville, the other two are elsewhere. One in the wonderbolts and the other with Flim and Flam duo. From what I gather? The pegasus is in a cloud city and the other is in Manehattan if they didn’t left.”

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Giving a slight pause, Albert asked, “What is the significance of these Elementals?”

elements

Debating internally of telling him...Jerry sighed and said. “The mares usually think of the Crystal heart turn ‘crystal dong’-- something even I don’t know how happen, but Gnarl mention it had highly concentrated evil in it,” then went on to explain. “When I usually say Heart...I’m referring to the Tower Heart within the Dark Castle, it's, connected to me in more than one fashion. It helps enable the Gates I spread and acts as a anchor point for me . ”

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“Hmm...troublesome, but possible.” said Jerry as he said. “I have a Gate to the Empire, as its surrounded by a frozen tundra, the city itself is made out of crystal, the ‘Heart’ keeps the frozen and cold out of it. The Heart originally was use to remove darkness and impurity things within its Heart, power by the joy and happiness of its people. Before the caribous screwed it up, now its fully concentrated evil energy as while it does its former job, its just powered by the very thing it stood against-- as far as I can tell. Without it, the city will be frozen over and face a slow and cold death.”

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Nodding, the man stopped his pacing and told, “What I have in mind, is fast and needs to be executed correctly.” Giving the Overlord a look and told, “Time we have, since you still have armor to finish.” Hands together, index fingers pointing out, Albert told, “I’m going to visit this Empire, and I’m going to start a phase of plan that will set the state into a panic.”

we have time
of the plan

Thinking some, he said. “I think when my Heart absorbed everything of corruption from the Crystal Heart? It’ll be empty of it...but purifying it? That I don’t know how to do, I’m thinking of getting Gnarl to talk to of opinions, see what he could give me.” shrugging as he added. “Sure he may not like the idea...but he works for me.” then said. “But this does leave a question. What about the elements wielders?”

absorbes
that was really weirdly put

“That’s the more complicated part.” Told Albert, “They are spread out. And with each strike, more and more are going to be more closely guarded. Which presents a problem in itself.” But then asked, “But here’s another question. You said they were heros. And they held elements. But why do they have these ‘elements’, what are they and what is their whole relevance that they are a need to get?”

that would work better if you replaced "more and more" with they

“Yeah, its the Crystal Ponies homeland, from what I gather it was its own nation and government before its ruler, Cadence, took it from some tyrant. Became part of Equestria in a sense.”

and it became

A low groan came from Jerry, as he said. “Yeah...I might need to tell them to don’t waste time to argue-- and just do it.” rubbing his forehead as he can already feel the headache of their arguments.

that would make more sense if you got rid of the "to"

Jerry thought over that and nod his head. He did also thought on something and said. “I might need to tell the ponies here of about me getting Celestia and Luna. I usually wouldn’t-- but my mares suggested it would raise moral and get them mentally prepare for their arrivals.”

I have no idea how to fix this part I just know it's hard to read.

“Agreed.” said Jerry as he thought and said. “And after that, I need to quickly get to the Crystal heart fixed up as quick as possible. Maybe go to that big crystal tree thing? Granted I’m grasping at straws, I’m hoping to God that it’ll work and get out before the Caribous noticed.” thinking some and asked. “Anything else we need to go over? I do need to inform the mares after all.”

erase the quickly

“I think at the very least I can install a air tank.” Told Albert, “I know there is no way you’ll be swimming in heavy armor. Even more if it’s a inch-thick plates made of titanium.” Then waved off the thought to go on. “The thought I had, was for you to infiltrate Canterlot by using the waterways. With the air tanks, you can stay submerged and completely bypass most defenses.”

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Watching the man move over and press a button, they both heard, “Excuse me, Albert?” spoke a mare voice. “The little hellion of the Overlord wants to talk to him. Apparently he got big news.” Huh...that was fast. thought Jerry in slight surprise.

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“Blasted wench, I demand you let me speak to the Overlord at once!” Jerry sigh and said.

sighed

“Gnarl what is it?” gaining the minion attention as the elder minion spoke cheerfully.

minions

“Point.” said Jerry. “So send the Greens around and let them dump the vials in drinking sources.” thinking more as he said. “But I might move all the things in the Dark Castle somewhere-- just in case Dainn find me somehow. Can’t assumed he won’t with this plan.”

point taken would work better
finds

He seemed to call back, “By the end of today I should have enough to give a one vile to maybe thirty minions. As soon as you get back to your castel… send them through. Add incentive towards the Resistance they are on a time limit.”

erase the "a"

Jerry stood before the four ‘heads’ of Alpha base as he said. “I’m going to place this simple, quick and fast. We’re on a time limit, I talk it over with Albert, and in a week time, not only we’ll bring a disease to infect Crystal Empire temporary with Albert having a cure ready. But we are also going to drain the crystal dong dry, try to fix it-- and get Celestia and Luna out of Dainn hands and into this base to be patched up.”

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“Well more like it’ll be my Minions spreading the virus. Maybe a good week or two until the hysteria and lockdowns are in place, separate sick and healthy, higher ups will be sent out so they be ‘healthy’. And the Resistance, Albert-- maybe me just to do my usual work will come in, take everything we can and leave the caribous to freeze to death. More or less removing a problem for us. Now moving on I will do what I can to drain the dong energy's--,”

higher ups will be sent out so they'll stay ‘healthy’
get rid of that "and"
put an and before "maybe me"

Do this morally-- or logically? internally sighed Jerry as he rub his face and said. “Look, I know all of you will be against this morally, hell even I am too. But the alternative, is me trying to target mostly Caribou with suspicious on the why, and could lead to trouble. Or me just doing it the old fashion way of being the target as every one is focus on me and Albert does his job in taking the heart and we have limited time to evacuate every pony there.”

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and that could lead

“But you’re not the bad guy, are ya?” Grain bluntly told. “And you expect me to lie in everyone’s faces I wasn’t responsible in some way?” She went quite to think it over before scowling, “No I won’t tell people… they'd stop trusting me.” Getting slightly surprised looks.

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Gaining his breath as he continue the plan. “I got a short window, enough to drain the corrupted crystal dry, and before you question how or why, let just say that since I’m a Evil Overlord, I’m able to intake corruption without it bothering me. The energy will go to my power supply in the Castle, and once I dry it good enough, I’ll try to figure out how to purify it. But that's a low priority, as I’ll infiltrate Canterlot, steal the princesses out from Dainn sneaky or breaking through, get to a Gate to a beach to send them to a hidden undersea location, and head to my place in the safe.”

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“After that? I might see on how to purifying the Heart...but I’ll admit I’m a bit, worry how long it would take.” then explain quickly. “This is a first for me, as I’m not used to purifying stuff, usually corrupt it. So I’m going to talk to Gnarl on how to make it better.” Then mused a bit. “Although it might be best if someone else hold it, might accidentally corrupt it by myself”

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But we are also going to drain the crystal dong dry

Im not sure whether to hope thar was intentional or not.