This is very intriguing.

"I'm afraid I can't do that. We don't know what you are or why you we're so well armed."

It should be were not we're.

Why would they freak out about his dietary habits when they have griffins in their borders?
That earns your story a down-vote.

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Did you not read the full description?

6136550 Ah, my bad. I still have a few problems (much less severe than this one but still enough) with the story that will keep it the down-vote but I will keep reading to see if it redeems itself.

I feel really annoyed by this....I meant...they have fucking sentient, sapient carnivore and omnivore not to mention they keep pets that eat meat and they react like this?
THE FUCK?
Another point lost.
Wait....Those other species considered them food source?
Well, that explained a few things.

Ok, giving this a shot but have to point out: do they have the normal pets they do? Because cats and dogs have never been herbivores. Also, no omnivorous species? Wtf? Most species are at least partially omnivorous. Horses can survive on meat. Some have even been trained and bred to mainly survive on meat in some areas of our world. Dogs also eat some plants. I believe there are few purely herbivorous or carnivorous species as having the ability to at least partially digest the other gives you a chance at survival when food is very scarce. The animal may have stomach issues but stomach issues are worth survival over being dead due to lack of food.

6165857 More along the lines of ignorant and/or xenophobic in the extreme, but still.

It still irks me about the "meat-eating" problem here which shouldn't be a problem since they have a number of Griffons and Dragons that are widely known to eat meat (well dragons dine on gemstones). But I hope the next chapters at least give insight to the aversion of ponies to meat-eaters.

It's a carnivore!"

Seriously? Was she even listening when he told her about the things he can eat?

Imma keep plowing through this in hopes the writing improves. I like description but it is a bit much. And using I so much is a bit well... much I suppose.

6508050 I think her brain shut down the second he mentioned he eats meat

"Put your hands up and get on your knees." The left one says.
Immediately thought of Hellsing Abridged.

Did you know that ponies eat meat? In one of the official MLP comics, at a feast for ponies, there was a roast chicken.
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Seriously though, Ponies are friendly towards griffons, who are meat eaters, and Fluttershy once threw fish to her animals, so I don't think they have anything against meat-eaters. Also, the nurse heard him list non-meat things before saying meat.

7827211 Holy crap. You are right.. Wow

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I think that in this universe there are carnivores and herbivores exclusively and as such there is an instinctive animosity between the two types of races.

poderoso pero sin exagerar, equilibrio perfecto

Reading this for the fourth time. Still love it.

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Then good news, I'll be starting the next chapter soon.

"Y-You aren't going to eat us?" Twilight asks shakily.

"No," I reply flatly with a deadpan expression. "Eating another sentient race is considered murder where I come from and is an unforgivable crime," I tell her.

Personally, I'd replace the latter line with something less... awkward, and a litlot more indignant. Something within the lines of, "Why the hell would I do that?!"

I'd also add a few uncivil words at Twilight after she promised there wouldn't be any more fighting seconds after the time the guards used as an opportunity to rush the protag like a bunch of cowards.

Do you really need your weapons and armour right now? I promise you'll be fine from now on

She says that right after he listened to her about stopping his fight and his gesture of trust being betrayed.

I notice she only has three fingers instead of four

You mean four fingers instead of five. Only someone who has never seen a hand before could possibly think thumbs aren’t fingers.

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Thumbs aren't fingers and I will fight you on this. Fingers have to joints after the knuckle. Thumbs have one.