I'm sorry that I am terribly late with my updates.
Whinnypeg is probably the smartest horse that anyone had the pleasure of meeting, but Twilight Sparkle isn't impressed with her, and would rather go back to Equestria with Sunset Shimmer to go shopping. Too bad that Whinnypeg wants to go too. Even worse, is how the portal reacts to a horse going into Equestria.
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anyway i laugh my ass off so here a like and a follower
Yeah a horse in a human body would leave a mess everywhere wouldn't they. Poor Rarity and Lyra though.
That is a lot of poop
What did I just read?
5921325 a story that is clearly not a masterpiece.
5921575 I've seen worse
Wasn't that bad
Now I wonder what would happen if you brought a chimpanzee from Equestria through the portal, or a gorilla from Earth through the other way.
I'm apologizing in advance for all of the public corrections I'm making here.
"the horse in it's paddock" should be "the horse in its paddock".
First of all, how does "stupid" finish the sentence "It didn't take me too long to find out"? Secondly, it should be "friend's sentence", not "friends sentence".
"Applejacks pockets" should be "Applejack's pockets"
Regarding "right'chere", where does the "ch" sound come from? Why would she make a "ch" sound there?
Note to self: Look up what the horse statue at Canterlot High looks like.
"Twilight responded from her above." This sentence reads awkwardly. Perhaps you could remove the word "her".
"managed to find it's way" should be "managed to find its way".
"So, i hear you're going to be headed to Canterlot soon" should be "So, I hear..."
I think "Well that's nice to" should be "Well, that's nice too," or "Well that's nice, too."
"the humans head" should be "the human's head"
"would be" should be "would-be"
"your going to get poked" should be "you're going to get poked"
"Unlike somepony that had entered my shop!" should be "Unlike somepony that has [or that's, or who has, or who's] entered my shop!"
"litterially" is spelled "literally"
"cleaning the humans mess" should be "cleaning the human's mess"
The writing and story is fine, for a one-shot. The only thing that you need to work on is your spelling and grammar.
5925737 Well, since that will never be covered officially, it's open to the imagination of a fan writer like yourself.
Well I'll say this, it's a random story.
this is embarrassingly funny. makes me feel badly for being human
and it's outright insulting to human-world horses
"And with another flash, Twilight and Sunset Shimmer left Applejack to explain things to Rarity" this makes me wonder if they simultaneously teleported away or if Twilight just blinked them both away, I know it's a minor difference but the former does feel almost crueler.
Poor Lyra, I wonder if she hypothesized homo sapien as sentient... and now she has to clean after it. good stuff
I was just wondering what would happen if an equine from Earth went through the portal to Equestria, and then I found this. What I think of it is... It's not what I expected. Still kinda funny.
Anybody know of any other storys with an Equine going from Earth to Equestria?
Gotta admit, that's a pretty smart horse.
Wonder what Mister Ed would think of her.