As Rainbow Dash trotted deeper into the descending tunnel, all she saw was barren rock. The polished stone was painted in the red glare of her glowing pendant. As she tilted her head left and right, the swath of crimson light bobbed with her. She proceeded slowly, her gait slow and cautious, for what had to have been several minutes in the heart of the hillside.
The air was dank and moist, though it wasn't from the storm that was still roaring against the surface of the world far above her. The subterranean passage had a finely preserved quality; the walls and floors of the place felt as if they hadn't been disturbed in ages. The deeper Rainbow went, the more shocked she was to find herself breathing normally. She was still getting plenty of oxygen. If she didn't know better, she'd imagine that she had been breathing just as easily in the open air.
Rainbow had assumed that this was a natural cave. As she glanced left and right, she saw no etches or finely carved grooves or insignias or any other signs of intelligent design. However, the tunnel was so smooth and perfect in its descent that she couldn't help but assume that something had willfully dredged it. She imagined that perhaps this chamber she had stumbled upon was built in ages long gone by. Maybe weather and time had eroded the material to its present smoothness, but Rainbow Dash wasn't about to pretend that she was an expert in such area. She merely trotted forward and explored.
There was suddenly a cold dust of air, as if a mysterious wind was being funneled through the chamber. What was more surprising, she felt the sensation from above. Coming to a stop, she gazed up and tilted her neck pendant towards the ceiling. She saw a branching junction of holes—all large and connecting to the corridor she was in. Two of them led diagonally upwards to her left and right. One led directly up.
She gazed into the hole in the ceiling and immediately flinched. Two things had stabbed her eyes: a dot of bright light and a drop of icy cold water. Grunting, she shook her face dry, slid her goggles back onto her eyes, and gazed up again. With her face protected, she allowed a tiny trickle of water to splatter across her lenses just long enough to focus on the light source. She surmised that the vertical tunnel led to the very top of the hill. There, it broke through the surface, and rain water was trickling straight down and onto her.
She smirked at the discovery. Twisting her lips in thought, she looked down and watched for where the moisture went. Sure enough, there was a collective puddle of liquid, and from there it rivered down the corridor that she had been navigating until it hung a sharp right through another, far steeper tunnel.
Rainbow Dash swiftly followed the trickling, underground brook. The corridor echoed with the liquid and the splashing of her hooves. The ceiling danced from the kaleidoscopic bands of her glowing pendant's reflections against the stream. The current grew faster, joining with other corridors that bled in from seemingly nowhere. Rainbow Dash was spelunking deeper and deeper into an abysmal labyrinth, and she dared not stop for anything. She was carried forward by a smirk.
A few minutes later, the echoes of the trickling stream doubled, tripled, and then turned into a gentle roar that drowned out the storm above the mountain overhead. Rainbow Dash's light stopped piercing the path ahead of her, and that's how she realized that the tunnel had finally opened up into a large chamber.
She stood at the entrance to the large underground cavern. Meditating, she ran her hoof once more over her neckpiece and murmured a few breathy words. The crimson glow intensified. She found herself squinting, then lifting her water-slicked goggles to get a good look at what she saw.
The chamber was spacious, a surprising contrast to the claustrophobic corridors that had led her down there. Pooling about a forest of limestone stalagmites was an underground lake, stretching left and right—from wall to wall—at a width of over three hundred feet. How long the chamber was, Rainbow Dash couldn't tell. It was like she stood at the entrance to a grand, foreboding stomach.
She flexed her wings and flew straight into the hollow expanse.
Rainbow Dash glanced down as she coasted over the cavernous lake. She was greeted with the sight of her pendant's bulbous, crimson reflection. The water was murky and covered with a thick layer of slime. The closer she glided over the lake, however, she could have sworn she spotted something oddly pale.
So, finding a fairly blunt stalagmite jutting a mere six feet out of the pool's surface, she touched down and perched on the pointed limestone. Positioned in the middle of the large pool, she leaned over and peered hard into the lake.
The glow of her pendant was glinting across the slime, making it hard to see through. She swiftly thought of a crude solution. Sucking all the saliva into the back of her mouth, Rainbow Dash jerked her face forward and spat hard into the lake. The slimy surface of the waters parted ways, rippled, and re-coalesced. However, she had successfully afforded herself the glance she needed, and she saw what turned out to be many pale spheres resting just inches below the top of the pond.
As the loud roar of thunder echoed through the chamber from above, Rainbow Dash couldn't help but make a face at what she just saw. They were the strangest rocks she had ever seen. She couldn't imagine a part of the limestone ceiling from which they could have crumbled.
The thunder rolled again, and this time it sent a heavy ripple through the waters all around her. Rainbow Dash blinked. Her ears twitched as she realized that she was so far down in the cavern that there was no feasible way she could still have been hearing the storm above ground. And yet, the rumbling intensified, becoming almost deafening.
It wasn't until the stalagmite beneath her began to wobble and the waters parted ways once again that Rainbow Dash realized what it was she saw. They weren't pale rocks. They were eggs.
The thunder developed a screeching tone. The air filled with a foul odor. Rainbow Dash looked up, and her ruby eyes reflect the looming overbite of a giant angular creature lunging straight at her. There was a huge splash of water, a flash of red scales, and then all Rainbow saw was teeth.
This is awesome
Oh snap. Does not look good for Dash, what with the cave monster and all.
- DRAGON!
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Serpent?
All the eggs in the water made me think of Alien for some reason :P
I was gonna say, my first assumption was that the strange rocks were skulls, and we would have gotten the same outcome... Although how would the skulls get there...?
Ugh, whatever, it's astounding that this story doesn't have a larger following. It's really one of a kind, never have I read something like this. However, I am beginning to get the feeling that this entire story is just you practicing and stretching your literary muscles. That's fine with me, just so long as we get a coherent story in the end of this.
IIIIIt's Dashie's evaluation time!
Not too much in the way of plot in this chapter. The rumbling underground has revealed itself to be the hatchlings of eggs of a certain species. When these hatchlings attack Dash, it seems that they are dragons, although I could be wrong. Perhaps the next chapter will give us more plot...These are my thoughts so far.
-MASH
Oh Snap! The plot thickens... And not in a good way!
-THEpandaman007
Such imagery! Such suspense! This needs to be made into a feature length film, S...sssssColon!
And our first conflict comes out to Play!
1159482 I thought the exact same thing. Its really very similar.
A single person exploring undiscovered and hazardous territory stumbles upon a foreign life form.
Even the way the water covers the eggs mimics the creepy fog in that movie
Only 8 chapters in and this is already one of the absolute best stories I have ever read. So glad I decided to read this
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Deep down the tunnel
Rivers feed an egg-filled lake
Thunder down here? Shit
Oh no,Dashie! Way to make me wait while I quickly write what is probably my shortest comment yet. We see more her adventurous personality coming through, and that cliffhanger... I need to continue reading. Also, have another favourite
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Not your most elegant, but certainly my favorite. So what was I doing? Oh yeah. I've decided I'll jus use whatever I would use for this one in the next chapter, considering this was just a lead in in order to give the readers literary blue balls. (I wish I came up with that). Well, I'll at least do something. Here, have a link that leads to some good and somewhat appropriate music I wasn't saving for anything.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mvYurRv74wI
Wasteland night is most fitting, but wanderer is good too
Venture into the abyss and find everything you deserve.
although I loved scale, I kind of hope that this isn't going to be another 200k words without more than one character...
I'd like to say that I loved pretty much all the chapters up to this one. The lack of dialogue, the beauty of scenery descriptions, all of it makes it easy for the reader to identify with Rainbow Dash, and the atmosphere of loneliness and being one against the world is chilling and mesmerizing.
So far, this has been Literature.
Unfortunately later chapters could really use an editor. All the typos, characters' names changing abruptly in mid-chapter, etc. really take you out of the story (at least that's the case up to chapter 34, which is as far as I've read).
Jesus, I can't get over how much you manage to convey without a SINGLE WORD OF DIALOGUE. This just keeps getting more intense. I'm almost afraid of when Rainbow or really any character finally speaks, like it's gonna break the magic.
Oh god... RAINBOW! She must live! Though, given the fact I'm what, six stories behind, I assume she does. :P Still, amazing story, evil cliffhanger, and I must read on to get the answers to my questions! Or just get more questions... again. Oh well, 'tis the price I pay for reading such quality horsewords! Now, reading on!
It's an endless quest of solitude! Cool!
5976356 ...I... I never even noticed that. *facehoof* XD I'm still mad at that person who spoiled it for me about the Mane Six though. Ugh.
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I can't wait to see what happened to Scootaloo. I mean with the Apple, and the goggles. But yeah I agree the second someone speaks up the magic might be broken.
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I found out when looking up the Tv Tropes page. Seeing if I could see anything about Scootaloo ... and sadly I found out about the M6, but nothing on Scoots.
Theory: Rainbow Dash was tasked by Luna to fly east and explore as a punishment for something she did to the rest of the Mane 6. Perhaps she murdered them when discorded?
Rainbow cannot stay out of trouble.
02/13/2017 23:32 GMT
Chapter 8 Opinions
This was a great chapter as always. It's really incredible how much you can convey through your story without any dialouge. This chapter, just like the last one, didn't have much happening in the first half of it. However, the second half was really good. I knew there had to be some kind of creature in this cave. There almost always is in adventure stories
It doesn't look good for Rainbow right now.
I'm trying to think of stuff to write here, but honestly, I'm too excited to see where this is going to think of anything xD
I'm off to chapter 9!
Haven't read any further than this while writing this. They're skulls aren't they?
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Huh guess not.
Think you want “gust”
Aww, it sounds like she made a friend!
Heh, my first thought upon combining "lake in a cave" and "place thing" was Inferi.
Use fire!
I am guessing this was once a volcano, and some beastie decided to move in
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Rainbow Dash rigth now and also the audience:"...Well Shit."
Aaand que the NieR music.
Ho hum dee dum, la dee da...hmm..
Eep!
Well, frick... Could make do with certain animal whisperer right now. Sadly, she is not available at the moment. Or, ever, it seems like...
Half of me was expecting dragon, the other half was hoping for Gollum, absolutely none of me was expecting giant angler fish.