I really hope they all go to jail

It's alive.Yay!

>>MustangII You're right, they are being complete jerks to her, let's see what they did : raping, wich is illegal. Keeping into weird dungeon thingy attached, probably illegal of what i know. Stealing from her home, illegal once again... And probably more. Seeing the timeline of the serie, they might just get executed... And they will deserve it.

6198415 I think you're taking this a bit too seriously...

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6198415 I agree with you on that one. I can settle for it if Starlight gets a light sentence if they were caught, but I have a strong feeling this story will only end badly for poor Starlight. Maybe Sugar belle will be the compassionate one. ..... Nah I know she wont. It's still a good story, but I just hope it ends well for Starlight.

She wasn't a bad pony, though a bit extreme for what she wanted to do. But i agree raping her like this is a bit much. But i still enjoy the story as it is but I really hope Starlight gets some sort of happy ending. This would literally be the first story to do it that I've found if it did.
6198445 Keep it up you!

This story is gold and every chapter leaves me wanting more! Well, perhaps not so much rapey time, but I still like how some of the characters are showing that they have a conscience. Like I believe it was Double Diamond who had second thoughts before he decided she deserved it? Thogh as said before I do agree with the previous two I'm not at all dislikeing what this is. I just hope for hte best for all in this story.

Please don't make me wait again... This story is too good to die unfinished.

>>Alcatraz Maybe i should calm down a beat ... I need to stop being a overreactivly emotionnal foal.

Finally, an update. Also, YESSS, more of Starlight getting what's coming to her (if not a bit more than she deserves, but still)

I absolutely adore the fact that she can recognize the smell of Double Diamond's cum.

6199806 Well, in the part that was cut (because it was arguably pointless), Night Glider went to get the key for the door to the room from Double Diamond. Because he didn't shower after he got home, he reeked of musk. It was that connection that Night Glider was supposed to make.

Forgot about that XD

Here, I dug through the raw draft (unedited, not spell checked, just a planning document) to find the section that got cut.

Night Glider smiled a silent good morning with a cheerful wave to a few passer bys before she got to Double Diamond's house, where she knocked on the door. A few moments passed without an answer, so she rapped harder and longer, using the side of her hoof this time.

"It's Night Glider," she bellowed to the stallion within, "I need the key for the room!" She heard a large thump from the bedroom followed by some groaning, then the door opened some twenty seconds later.

"Wha di-ya say ya needed?" he sleepily drawled.

A heavy musk hit Night Glider's nose. She snorted in surprise, and to clear her nostrils of the Odour. Double Diamond really needed to take a shower. She passed it off a poor bodily hygene and asked for what she came to get.

"The key. For the room. So I can check on Starlight, remember?"

"Oh, uh, right..." he mumbled. From her place at the front door, Night Glider's eyes followed Double Diamond as he went into his room and came back out with a key in his mouth. He put it on his front hoof and extended it to his friend, who then picked it up with her mouth then tucked it under her wing.

"If you need it, just come find me. I'll give the key to one of the others after I'm done so they don't have to wake me up like I did you, so you've got nothing to worry about it. Just hold onto the little bracelet until one of the others need it; I'll mention you still have it."

"Alrighty." With an overdue yawn, Double Diamond turned back into his house as Night Glider heard him mutter under his breath, "Wow I had a good sleep last night..."

Night Glider gave a mirthful hum upon hearing that and ruffled her wings with excitement.

She had a pretty good sleep last night too.

I was hoping for something more fetish-y hardcore-y but this is kinda vanilla chapter, with some light BDSM at most... Hope next chapter will have some breath-play or facesitting or SPANKING (omg I so want spanked Glimmer!).

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This si clopfic after all, they tend to lean to 'sex' territory without caring for logic or character motivation that much

I don't know if you know that a My Little Pony card game exists, but apparently Night Glider is "overpowering". Made me this of this story immediately.

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Awww, I was hoping for a big gangbang ;3

what did Nightglider think about Double Diamond raping her the day before?