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Rainbow Dashed

Rainbow Dash is tested by the appearence of an ultimate predator.

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Booster Spice

Booster Spice #1 · Apr 18th, 2015 · · ·

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Thank you very much for the constructive critisism.

Um, Im real sorry about that, but its taken me two years just to post this bit, because I can see the rules, but the understanding is not really there.

I dont know how many people can get into a Degree course, without passing basic English, but I somehow managed it, after failing twice at the English. In UK terms, at that time, it was O level.

I also noticed that the dedication was missing from the chapter i posted, since it was on the other PC whose hard drive failed on Sunday. Im not sure where the actual final information included chapter is.

The idea started, what if we put RD up against Airwolf.

Then I found out that the aircraft used in the TV series after was repurposed as an Air Ambulance.

It was lost with all hands during a return to base flight in bad weather.

Sparkle Cola

Sparkle Cola #2 · Sep 13th, 2017 · 1 · ·

Heh, actually not too bad with your spelling and sentence structure. But it would be helpful to break up the wall 'o text into more accessible paragraphs for the audience. Including the speech by Rainbow. Don't be afraid to go back and restructure the thing. As I said, not half-bad writing, really. Fun one-shot. Oh, and there is this:
/watch?v=8er83h9Bbn8