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Alex Rite


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(Disclaimer- This story was written with the help of fellow fimfiction author LikeaBaws. It was made as sort of a Role Playing game between the two of us, which is why the two main characters share our names and told from each's point of view.)


We are Alex Rite and Winter 'Baws' Frost- master thieves in the world of Equestria, known to the public only as the Black Mask Brothers. Our success in thievery is due mainly to our teamwork, mastery of combat, and our magical abilities. Over the years, we have amassed a large horde of treasure, and are Equestria's most wanted thieves, though they will never catch us, as we appear and disappear, never seen for longer than a single glance. What makes us most famous, though, is that we only steal from other thieves. After all, there's no honor, no challenge, no fun in stealing from ordinary people. This, of course, splits the people's opinion of us: some think of us as vigilantes who get scum off the street, others think us no better than the criminals we steal from. Eventually, though, we meet our match when the Vendetta Family starts to surface. These villains are a menace to society, having a branch in every major town in Equestria, each led by a top ranking member of the Vendetta Family. If they're allowed to continue at the pace they're at, even the Princesses themselves will be forced under their boot. As honorable thieves, it is our sworn duty to take these creeps down (and make a few bucks while we're at it). Only problem is, these guys are too big, too informed, too tough for even the two of us to handle on our own. So what do we gotta do? We gotta put together an expert team, that's what! Taking down the Vendetta family one by one, filling our ranks with experts in all sorts of fields all the while, from hackers, to demolition experts, to even ex-members of the Vendetta Family, we will bring the Vendetta Family crumbling down!

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(Disclaimer- This story was written with the help of fellow fimfiction author LikeaBaws. It was made as sort of a Role Playing game between the two of us, which is why the two main characters share our names and told from each's point of view.)

So this is a self-insert story, then? In that case, I should warn you, (and I'm not talking about me) some people don't like self-inserts...

7075916 It's kind of like a self insert, but at the same time, it's not. These characters share the same names and personalities as me and my cowriter, but at the same time, they are different entities. I suppose the best way to explain it is like observing yourself through a gateway to an alternate reality and recording the events you see happening. If anybody has a problem with that, then they don't have to read it, it's their choice.

Interesting story, I like the idea of a group of thieves trying to get back at an other for destroying their old HQ, but I feel that their isn't enough tension or character development in the story and I am not big on the idea of some of the M6 being part of the operation. I think you might want to put this story in more group if you wish to garner more attention for yourself.

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