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SwiftShad0wWing1


"Fairy tales are true; not because they tell us that dragons exist, but because they tell us that dragons can be beaten."

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Rainbow Dash isn't your ordinary pegasus. She has a secret ability that ponies thought only unicorns and alicorns could posses. Magic! Not magic like Twilight's though, Rainbow's is stronger. And it's dark magic.

Sorry I suck at descriptions

So I had a weird dream where I saw Rainbow Dash ruling the Crystal Empire like Sombra did and thought, "Hey would it make a cool story if Rainbow Dash was secretly King Sombra's daughter and had a stronger version of his abilities?" So here it is! Not too harsh in the comments please, this is just an experimental story to see where it goes. Helpful advice is always welcome though! :scootangel:

Chapters (9)
Comments ( 118 )

alright, i'll watch this.

This is an interesting concept, not something I've seen before. One thing I'd have to say is that it'd probably increase the quality of your writing if you had more in each chapter. It might also help with your pacing. :twilightsmile:

More details would be nice.:twilightsmile:

My only complaint is the chapters are to short. Otherwise it's good.

This is a good story definitely going to keep reading!:twilightsmile: The chapters could be a little longer, maybe try for 1500 to 2000 words.

Continue pls just make the chapters longer

This site needs more stories about somepony from Mane6 as Sombra's descendants.
Too many Mane6/Celestia/Luna/SomeponyElse Sombra shippings. I'm tired.

Continue all the way!! I never even thought of this! It's a stroke of genius!!

This story needs continuing!!!

Please continue this! It's amazing!

Awesome, i really like the idea. :pinkiehappy:

make chapters longer, like 5 or more times what you have here + let her have shadow wings (#google that)

YEESSSSS A NEW CHAPTER! Please make them a little longer though.

I agree, we are waiting too long for chapters that are too short.

I really enjoyed this story. Slight grammar issues, nothing major. The length of the chapters, if this is your prefered writing style, then ignore me. The chapters just seem rushed and unorganized if this is the first story you've made; CONGRATULATIONS! You are an amazing up and coming author, this is an original idea and you pulled it off exceptionally well. Sorry, got off topic there, try making the chapters a little longer I'm not forcing you to change, but that is the main thing holding this story back from greatness. Other than that, all I can really say is keep up the good work and I hope to see a new chapter soon.

I like this story
I WILL CLAIM IT FOR THE MOTHERLAND
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Fuck. Do you know how BADLY I want to copy that idea!

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That's it. After I publish my Twivine story, I'm gonna start writing a story about Fluttershy being his daughter.

Twilight? We already had.

Applejack? My first idea, but nah. I like the apple family, even though I'm sooo against traditions in general.

Rarity? We already have Nightmare Rarity.

Pinkie Pie? Alicorn story. I'm working with a friend on it.

Rainbow Dash? Again, stolen idea.

Fluttershy? Why the fuck not?

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Hey! Sorry it takes forever for me to reply and post, but thanks! No, this is not my first story, and I don't usually write such short chapters. This was just an expirement that I didn't expect to go anywhere. I promise I'm going to try make bigger chapter!
:pinkiesmile:

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Haha, I didn't think anybody would like this idea. But thanks for thinking it was good! I will definitely check out your stories (that Fluttershy one sounds pretty good :raritywink:).

6254129 Still a work in progress. I'll inform you, when it's out.

I like the story idea, keep going:twilightsmile:! I also have a little idea you can maybe use later in the story, what if Sombra tries to attack the mane six and Dash protects them with her dark magic and that they then discover everything about her origin. Of course we have the fact that Sombra exploded or something:applejackunsure:, but it is only brainstorming feel free to do with it what you want.

I'm really loving your story so far! :twilightsmile: I like the. Idea of Rainbow being Sombra's daughter!

Also, if you don't mind my asking, will the next chapter be out soon? :twilightblush:

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I have an idea like that, but I don't know how to get from where I am at to there just yet. :applejackconfused:
If you have any other ideas that you think might make the story better please let me know! :pinkiehappy:

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I am currently working on the next chapter. I had a brain fart so I couldn't remember what I wanted to do with it, but I'm fixing it up!

Continue it

This is too awesome ;-;

Well, the idea is very interesting and unique; the only thing I have to whine about is how the chapters are so short. So far, so good.
Keep Writing!

I request that you follow the correct response when writing a story such as this. construct more chapters...failure to do so will result in your destruction. please have a nice day.

Interesting concept, but my principle is to only read stories with at least a thousand words per chapter goodday

I really like this story, and where it's headed! :twilightsmile:

Really like this story, still wish the chapters were longer or you updated every few days.

Oh yeah, reminds me to update my own story. Urrgh, I'm writing too many at once. But man, you keep the tension up, huh? Too bad you don't write more than a couple of words per chapter. Not helping my excitement, you know?

Nothing wrong with a short chapter fic.
SS&E writes these huge fantasy stories with chapters that are barely more than 500 words each (on average)
Austreoh and the rest of 'em.

6464784 yeah i agree with you

as long as you will contnue we dont care

I want MOAR
more WPC (words/per/chapter) pwease? :scootangel:

This is so cool!!!!! :rainbowkiss: I can't wait to see where it goes!

MOAR!! If it's okay that is..

6464015 that's a terrible way to read stories we all love children books and those often have les than 500 words

..... a bit short but.... eh. It's still good.

keep updating, dont stop. The story has potential.

Glad to see this story's back!:pinkiehappy:

A brilliant story so far. I wish it to continue.

I'm afraid what happened if they find out the truth

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