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Lost_Marbles


I don't read your stories because I'm crazy. I'm crazy because I read your stories!

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Poor, poor Fluttershy. The guilt had been festering in her, gnawing away at her sanity until she couldn't take it anymore.

Luckily for her, she has friends that will go to astounding lengths to help her, no matter how dark her secret may be.

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That was no doubt the most... interesting... story I've read so far. :derpytongue2:

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So am I correct to assume you haven't read my other works involving a self proclaimed dirt-and-ruby mouse monarch in a floating castle who loves songs about butts or the one where Twilight plays a game involving clams and kicking?:derpytongue2:

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That was pretty much my reaction. With an additional dose of :ajbemused:, :facehoof:, and :rainbowlaugh:.

All of that fuss over a few worms, hilarious!:rainbowlaugh: I honestly thought that she was a killer until the worm came into the story and made it a very good, and funny.:twilightsmile:

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You're missing out on some of "the most... interesting..." stuff on the web, dood!

By the time I got to the end I was already laughing out loud, but that last line just about killed me! xD Great work!

Fluttershy, you're a monster.

And I like it for some reason.

At first I was like "This is terrible.. just really bad" because it seemed poorly written because nothing was explained and such, but then nearing the end I was like "Ha! this is a great story" so well done changing my opinions so easily.

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What? You'd thought I just explain everything? You don't start a joke with a punch line!:pinkiehappy:
You've got to have a bit of mystery, a bit of build up. :pinkiecrazy:

And then, boom, you smack them on the side of the head with the twist! :twistnerd: (Not the foal, but the literary term! Foals are for cuddling, not for pummeling.)

YOU EVIL, EVIL MAN, but to be fair, I kinda was expecting no less...... also,

Pinkie Pie grabbed Fluttershy by the shoulders and pulled her up to eye-level. “Don’t worry, Fluttershy! We won’t let you fall for this! Whatever happens, we’ll be there for you! Rarity! I’m going to need a bucket of cold water, some bleach, a hockey mask, some trash bags, several passports for Neighico, 2,000 bits, and a slow, white bronco!”

I feel like this is a reference, I don't know what of, but I feel it's a reference to something.

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There certainly a reference in there, but I think most of the people on this site might be too young to really understand where it is from.

Here are two hints:
1)
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2)
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Oh Celestia, I feel old.
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I imagine her to have a better grasp of these things then the others, but this was still funny.

A friend will help you move.:pinkiesmile: A good friend will help you move bodies. :pinkiecrazy:

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And now I feel old too. But I'm sure there's quite a few here who would get it.

Hey, sorry if this is a bit late, but here's my thought on this. The twist ending was pretty funny, not laugh my ass off funny, but still funny. Though to be fair, I kind of expected there to be some kind of twist from the Comedy tag you have on it. I don't really see any grammatical errors and the description is decent. I suppose my only concern is that you didn't really flesh out Rarity and Pinkie's reaction at the end when Fluttershy revealed what she did.

Other than that, this was a pretty interesting read. I'll give this story a like.

Oh, I've seen this comic before in another thread. It's pretty funny I'll admit :rainbowlaugh:

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I'm glad you liked it.:pinkiehappy:

I just keep getting these stupid ideas, and I think "Why not use that to promote my stuff?"

Also, his speech at the beginning is taken practically word-for-word from a certain lolcow on the interwebs.

5970710 I see. Well this was a very interesting read.

Nice! I was actually convinced for a second. :P

Nice twist to the end and simply one hell of a good story, well done!

-Frost :twistnerd:

I realized half way through that she had to be talking about killing animals and not other ponies. I mean this is Fluttershy here.

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What comic? Whose speech at the beginning of what?

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