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After the event in Rainbow Rocks, Sunset Shimmer Finally realized she needed to fix her past in Equestria. The only way to do that was for her to go back.
(Hi everyone. Basically this story is going to be about if Sunset Shimmer had returned and if she was in season 5. I'm going t be updating it weekly depending on the episode.)
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Poor Sunset Shimmer
Summon the Pinkie...
Oh. Never mind then.
oh pinkie pie, you're so random lol
Interesting.
oh yes she involved during episode five ^^
Interesting idea, and I loved your rainbow Dash, both tough and soft. Other then that, there's not much go look at in this chapter.
Nice premise, some capitalization errors. Feels a tad rushed, hard to say where. My eyes wanted to kind of skim the first part until she finally said goodbye and went into the portal, then it wanted to skim until she dipped out of the castle. If I had to force myself to read it, it probably could have been a bit more attention grabbing somehow, I can't really put my finger on it.
Overall, doing good! Looking forward to the next chapter. Tracking this.
I don't think the timing works that well--Sunset going with them on their map-quest-thing doesn't really have anything to do with making up with Princess Celestia, her family (if there is any), or whomever else she might have wronged. There's not much confronting of her past going on with that.
You might want to describe just why Sunset is trying to sneak around the Mane 6. She knows Twilight won't arrest her and that the others are analogues to the people she already knows; avoiding them and running away from the castle is entirely unnecessary.
I'd like to see Sunset's response to Equalityville, considering she's taken history courses and can probably go on a spiel about Soviet era Russia.
This chapter made me realize something: I thought Rainbow Rocks was supposed to be set between seasons 4 and 5, but a lot of people are saying the season 5 opener is set like within a day after the end of season 4. What are other people's thoughts?
Also, I like Sunset being confused about Ponyville here, it makes a lot of sense. I hope she passed on the journal to one of her human friends so they can still chat.
I can imagine Pinkie moving so fast on the tour that she's running on her hind legs and still holding onto Sunset while she's bouncing up and down on the ground
Poor Sunset.... the Pinkie Pie Tour waits for nopony! I can't wait to see her reaction to all the ponies she's meeting for the first time but knows as humans.
i like it and i hope a another chapter come out for your story Raising a Human Daughter soon
It's finally updated! Hooray! Great chapter!
You got Pinkie!!!
Wah-Wah!
Interesting... have to wonder what kind of changes Sunset makes to the story line.
Eh, it has the buildings of different ideals among the elements, but there's nothing here yet that screams: Sunset Shimmer is essential for understanding the new version of the new season 5. At least not yet. But, let's find out what comes next. After all, her forward, somewhat guilty, intelligent personality is bound to make some things different.
So much potential, so untapped.
I think it would be interesting if you play up the fact that Starlight Glimmer is more or less the exact opposite of Sunset Shimmer in the first film which would make for a great friendship lesson for Sunset.
How's it going with the next one?
I really hope this story isn't dead. I'd like to see a lot more of Sunset In Equestria.
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Me too
Nooo come back pkease continue 🙏😭