Curse that evil quill and sofa seller! He's the stallion that sold me that Oreo. And got me in the dungeon. Sort of...
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6054408 I know, I just wanted to have some fun with the different ways to eat an Oreo.
I can't even try to stop laughing
Lolwut?
*noms Oreos* 
Silly Lyra! Everypony knows you worship Oreos, not eat them!
Quick and sweet, and to the point.
Nice, short narrative.
Yes, I got it since the first chapter. It's actually pretty effective.
Possible corrections:
1. I headed towards Jimmy- I mean Carl's stand, he waved. "Oh, hello, beautiful costumer." He said as I approached. Faker smile.
"You still want an Oreo?"
- I headed towards Jimmy- I mean Carl's stand, he waved. "Oh, hello, beautiful customer." He said as I approached. Faker smile. "You still want an Oreo?"
I'm actually thinking of doing something similar now. This is the easiest read I've had in fimfiction.
Possible corrections:
1. "Princess Celastia stood, as the crowd made a walkway...
- "Princess Celastia stood, as the crowd made way..." or "Princess Celastia stood, as the crowd cleared a path..."
2. If I wasn't terrified, I would of screamed when she said, "Gaurds, ... Take her to the dugeon.".
- If I wasn't terrified, I would've screamed when she said, "Guards, ... Take her to the dugeon.".
Uh, the whole story went "Dark" after the princess said "Death."
I was half-imagining her to give Lyra a lecture about how you split the Oreo in two, and dunk it in milk or something like that.
But, I am impressed at how effective the shortness of the chapters are. So, thumbs up for that.
Possible corrections:
1. The other two were Pegasus.
- The other two were Pegasi.
I would just bite into an oreo, same as any other biscuit sandwich.
6054917 Thanks so much!
And, again, thank you for pointing out my errors. Some times auto-correct just doesn't work.
6058369 Np
Darnit. Now I want one, too.
Celestia is upset that Lyra didn't offer her a bite first.
6054408
Or a Reeses.
What is the verdict on dipping Oreos in milk. Also sequel hype
New Chapter! A little bit of Luna for you!
And Celastia...
*Dislikes Oreos*
*Likes the story*
What form of wizardry is this? This paradoxical conundrum shall plague me to the end of days, I tell you!
Would you believe I never ate one of those Oreo-thingies...?
6272255 Magic!
6272263 You... have never... ate an Oreo?!
Well, if your not allergic, I highly recommend trying one.
6272300*Crunch crunch* Oreo's are tasty indeed