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ShadowKirby


26 years old, Bipolar Disorder, Asperger's Syndrome, am legally blind, and am a born again follower of Jesus Christ! I like Pinkamena/Pinkie and Fluttershy best. Send me a message if you wanna chat!

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I've been stuck like this for about a decade, and I'm finally free. But of course, those pony friends of that evil jail keeper aren't happy about that. Why? Don't I deserve a shot at life too? Just because I have to lock up Pinkie Pie in my mind? Hah! She deserves it for doing it to me!

When Pinkie retreats into her own mind due to the depression of thinking her friends abandoned her in 'Party of One', Pinkamena finds herself in control of herself for the first time since the Sonic Rainboom. But her friends aren't too happy about Pinkie Pie being locked away in Pinkamena's place.

Now has a sequel!

Chapters (8)
Comments ( 342 )

I have high hopes for this story.

Keep it up.

Hm. Interesting. I'll have to keep an eye on this one.

I opened this story in a second tab so I could like it twice.

I am hoping for a Pinkie is a artificial controlling personality comparison to Nightmare Moon.

I'm really not liking Rainbow Dash physically attacking other ponies here. Pinkamena hasn't done anything to justify that. Possible moral of the story: better like your surprise party or you'll get knocked out.

Let's see where this goes....

5822274 I'm using Season 1 Rainbow Dash, since that's when this takes place. She was always quick to be suspicious (and she's confused and concerned for her friend). It's in her personality to jump to conclusions, especially earlier on.

Also, I don't know what you mean by 'Pinkie is a artificial controlling personality comparison to Nightmare Moon. '

5822196 The ending is kind of a long way off from now X3

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Also, I don't know what you mean by 'Pinkie is a artificial controlling personality comparison to Nightmare Moon. '

Basically, Pinkie is to Pinkamena as Nightmare Moon is to Luna, minus the malicious intent.

It's questionable if Nightmare Moon is some kind of parasite (as portrayed in the comics), a split personality, or just Luna's madness given form, but Luna is treated as being separate from Nightmare Moon afterwards, as being different fundamentally.

Isn't Pinkie Pie in this story sort of the same thing to Pinkamena? Either a split personality or something from the Sonic Rainbow that unknowingly possessed Pinkamena and thought she was actually her, and if she heard Pinkamena at all just thought that it was her depression and cynicism talking instead of being a separate entity.

5822486 ah I see what you mean. Well you'll see soon enough :3

Nice idea.
Fav and followed.

5824855 XD and what exactly is making you go 'yeeeeesss'?

5824864 just the whole idea for this story. that, and it is very well written in a timely manner.

Pinkamena being mean for the sake of being mean is kind of petty. Understandable considering Pinkamena may still be a filly mentally and is finally able to live out her revenge fantasies, but it is still pretty petty, even considering Pinkamena has every reason to loathe Pinkie Pie.

She'd have a much better case by pointing out that it's her body, and Pinkie Pie stole it away. Why should she even consider working with Pinkie Pie unless she had absolutely no choice but to do so? Pinkie Pie owes Pinkamena 10 years of Pinkamena's life that she stole away, unknowingly or not.

Many will call me a touch macabre, but I actually prefer Mena to Pinkie. Pinkie is too ADD 24/7, Mena has a more realistic view on life even if she's cynical.

This story have potential :pinkiesmile:, continue please :scootangel:

5825016 yeah I know what you mean. I love them both, but I tend to prefer pinkamena (depending on her characterization of course; some writers depict her as insane or evil, which I dislike.)

Enjoyable. I'm glad to find a story involving Pinkamena that doesn't portray her as insane or inherently evil.
Go on! Your audience demands an encore!

5825012 that comment soet of seemed like you were arguing with yourself.......lol

5825127 thanks! And I know what you mean, I dislike fanfics that portray her that way.
all this positive feedback really is helping me keep going! I've never been this excited to continue a story before! The encore is granted.

5825012 Except that there's no real reason to think that she's the 'real' Pinkamina and not some shadow created when the rainboom happened, since Pinkie remembers being the real Pinkie before that event as well.

They knocked her out? Yeah, very nice guys.

I pity Pinkamena, she was jailed for ten years, yet instead of running away to avoif friendfship bringing Pinkie Pie back, she still tried to talk and reason with those rude ponies.

So Pinkie Pie is a body snatching monster?

5825782 It'll get explained in the next chapter.

5825795 Well, unintentionally.

This could be promising.
The Cap Locks are a bit bothersome though.

Also, Twilight and Rainbow don't really sound like Twilight and Rainbow.
I'm curious though.

Ah dunno.
Good luck and whatnot.

5826235 I'm using Season 1 Rainbow Dash and Twilight; this takes place after Party of One. But if I messed up a bit I wouldn't be surprised.

5826303 XD don't worry, there will be more.

5826554 I don't know. Whenever I next feel like writing. With the huge support I've been getting I'll probably do some writing this evening. Maybe earlier or maybe later.

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While plausible, there are hints that Pinkamena may be right.

Pinkie Pie at least notices it

I certainly didn't feel like I had actually been there when I recalled memories before the Rainboom.

Beyond that, from a neutral point of view, Pinkamena acts in a way similar to how she acted before the Rainboom. Pinkie Pie is a completely different personality that appeared after the Rainboom. I find it difficult to accept that such a great personality shift is what occurred naturally and that how she acts before is what was created by the Rainboom.

Hmm.... a little too much monologuing about how Pinkie is terrible. Not that she isn't, but the less you say about it, the more you can describe it. So like 'Who....who are you? I need to know, I don't understand!' 'No you don't. It's my turn now! Now leave me alone, and stay quiet!' [crying inmentally] or something vague and unhelpful and less like "THIS IS THE PREMISE OF MY STORY THIS IS WHAT IS HAPPENING"

5829528 yeah I kinda know what you mean. Things like flavor text and properly getting across things in a good way that flows isnt my strong suit. Im working on it tho through. Thanks for the advice :)

'We'll get Pinkie Pie back, no matter what it takes!'

who else sees twilight going crazy scientist on pinkamina when she realizes that she doesn't intend to let pinkie out of her own free will? maybe even try to get the elements of harmony involved. huh, would they even work with pinkamina in the drivers seat?

5829540 XD psycho Twilight is pretty funny.

5829544 depends on the situation. if it's just her going psycho, and no ones being harmed, then yeah it's funny. but if someone we (the readers) have come to care about is being harmed or wronged in some way by her when she's lost it, then it's annoying, or even out-right infuriating.

5829540 They'd have to replace her. Spike could be the new Pinkie Pie.

Twilight grinned a bit, but quickly hid it with a normal smile. Like I wouldn't see it.

"I'll answer your questions, if you explain to me how a Sonic Rainboom could've possibly made another pony control you."

My suspension of disbelief almost broke here. Twilight Sparkle, who upon being hit by the wave of energy from that same Rainboom went into a magic flare that hatched spike's egg, turned everyone in the room into potted plants, and then grew newly hatched spike into spikezilla, doesn't believe the Pinkamena could have been affected by the Rainboom.

She more than anyone else in the world should understand exactly how powerful and transformative that Rainboom was.

Twilight also asks Pinkamena to explain it when she herself cannot explain or even understand half the things that Pinkie Pie does, as Feeling Pinkie Keen demonstrated before.

I also liked the bizarre reverse logic that Pinkie Pie hit her head somehow and had a complete shift of personality; I mean, that'd be the second complete shift of personality. The first being, of course, the Rainboom itself. Or do they not remember Pinkie Pie's story?



I don't understand Rainbow Dash's shift of position. Pinkamena would probably be the first to declare that Rainbow Dash is enemy #2 to her (after Pinkie Pie, of course). Rainbow risks losing her friend; her friend she just broke up her friendship with Gilda over. That said, her position, as confusing as it may be, is much better than

'We'll get Pinkie Pie back, no matter what it takes!'

How very Ends Justify The Means. I'm sorta getting an image in my mind of the travestry of Lesson Zero, where Celestia had to show up and intervene to stop Twilight.

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