- Member Since 9th Dec, 2013
- offline last seen 8 hours ago
Ponyess
I just recently started to write stories directly towards the FiM actively, though I have been writing for years, publishing numerous stories at Mibba and the eventual pony story, as far as to the MLP
Also LikedSimilarAuthor
- Theorangefox · 5.9k words · 92 16 · 4.3k views
Featured In19
Twilight is Best Pony6,371 stories ·3,072 members
Twilight Sparkle12,269 stories ·4,752 members
- Crossbreed My Heart872 stories ·977 members
- Useful Feedback607 stories ·236 members
I Just Want a Comment15,697 stories ·3,671 members
Anthropomorphics7,624 stories ·5,013 members
My Little Fetish16,588 stories ·8,567 members
Looking For Critique (Feedback)152 stories ·52 members
Stats
Page generated in 0.11 seconds
Total duration
693 users online
583,146 hits today, 1,822,946 yesterday
FIMFiction
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
Designed and coded by knighty & Xaquseg - © 2011-2024
Follow & Support Us
Support us
SubStar
Chat!
Discord
Follow us
Twitter
MLP: Friendship is Magic® - © 2024 Hasbro Inc.®
Fimfiction is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro Inc.®
Okay, for anyone wondering why this story has such a like-dislike ratio (like me when I clicked on the title): This story is... pretty blank, to be honest. Twlight and 2 random OC's (I think) have such an unnatural and almost robotic interaction with no flow whatsoever, the dialogue and story is all over the place (oftentimes seeming like insane troll logic, for you tropers), and when the "sexy" comes, I probably found the most OOC-Twilight I have ever read...wich says a lot, believe me.
However... I do think that this story has potential. The setup is actually interesting (to me at least, probably as well as those that upvoted), but it's just the execution that turns people away (and thus the downvotes).
Thus, I sincerly ask that you find a proofreader or editor for this, since I do think this can shine if you ask someone to help you polish this story up.
6786620 This is an issue with literally all of Ponyess's works. I believe they are all written in another language and then translated, with the outcome rearranged into more or less proper sentences. This leads to some... strange wording and lots of OOC on behalf of the ponies. His Pinkie Pie very often sounds like if Rarity was trying an impersonation of her instead.
6786620
I am proofreading all my stories, with the aid of two spell-check tools, which is all I currently have available to me. After failing numerous times to acquire even a proofreader, which leaves me depending on comments from users such as yourself here.
Then you would like to see the story completed and worked upon?
If you care to elaborate, maybe the story could be more interesting before it is actually completed?
6788251
From how you put it, you have read in the order of 100 of my stories? Or, is this just for the few stories you actually have been reading?
Thanks, I think; but if you could lend a Hand/Hoof in order to help me improve, even if just a small baby-step forwards? Not that I am writing in Queens English, which may account for some of the problems, at least for some of my readers.
Pinkie Pie impersonations are canon, even if it was Fluttershy; if memory serves me right?
Some of these may be up for interpretation, aside from application of obscure references from the entire of FiM, including the films and a few other instances that holds relevance to my stories.
6788959 I'm thinking of the more recent stories, which are the ones that caught my attention. They all seem to have this style to them that is almost too clean, and yet a bit jumbled and sounding like it's trying to be poetic because of that... It's hard to describe. It's distracting to say the least, but I can see where it comes from with what you've mentioned about proofreading.
Unfortunately, it makes them hard to read, though the premise has always been interesting(that is the reason I've checked those stories out, after all) so I try to see past the unnecessarily complicated sentences to understand the gist.
6789013
I think you are just putting a finger on a large part of my problem, right there. If it is in the large group of stories, or the misunderstanding of exactly what I was originally saying?
Too clean? I guess the poetry is a bit of the style I am working with. If anything feels jumbled, that's something I could use some help with. If you could point at a specific spot and suggest how to alleviate the problem, or correct mistakes?
A mechanical aid isn't intuitive. I have to balance between two sides as I correct my typos.
Thanks, I could make use of some help; dealing with these issues when and where they come up.