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The Lunar Samurai


If you are enjoying my stories, I thank you. Nothing means quite as much to me as someone really appreciating what I put out into the world. So, from the bottom of my heart... Thank You.

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My name is Starswirl and I am an earth pony. This is a collection of stories about my life. As I reflect on the events that have brought me to this home by the sea, I can only hope for one thing; that my life be viewed as ordinary and plain, but my work in theoretical magic be held the highest regard. I placed so much effort into my studies in theoretical magic that it would be a shame to let my work be lost somewhere in the sands of time.


As seen on Equestria Daily!

updates whenever I get a chance to update it :P.

Chapters (57)
Comments ( 578 )

This story is going to be great!

This story is an ongoing project. I have the outline, but I haven't finished writing the body. That being said: I would love any feedback! I chose to update on a 2 week schedule so that I could get your input. Tell me what you like, tell me what you didn't. If you have questions, feel free to PM me. I'm writing this story for you!

change nothing about your current style and this story will be better than anthropology

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Thanks, I really appreciate it! The style will remain the same throughout. This is the first time I've tried a longer memoir, but I am really enjoying it. Delving into a character like this is quite fun!

Interesting premise. The racism in Equestria isn't always explored.
It has a riveting style that makes me want to continue reading.
There are some grammar mistakes here and there. A few times "Starswirl" wasn't capitalized and he once referred to himself as a filly but nothing too distracting.
I look forward to seeing more updates!

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It has a riveting style that makes me want to continue reading.

Excellent! I've been experimenting with different styles, and this one seems to be the easiest for me to write. I'm really enjoying taking this perspective, its a welcomed relief from my usual 3rd person.

There are some grammar mistakes here and there.

Can't catch em all I suppose. Thanks for the heads up, I'll look more closely in the future!

I look forward to seeing more updates!

I see the lures are working. >:D

So far I love this story. It puts a whole new light on starswirl that is absolutely plausible. I love the rasism in the story if only for the fact that is gives starswirl a main enemy to overcome. I look forward to seeing what you do with this story in the near future.

This story is absolutely engrossing. One of the few stories I have read on this site that made me lose track of time. Awesome job so far!

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I'm glad you like it! It's always kinda strange writing from a new perspective, but if I'm getting this kind of feedback, I may keep it this way.
Thanks for letting me know!

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I look forward to seeing what you do with this story in the near future.

So do I! it is really fun to write this one! (also, there's already been a few suggestions that I may end up using.)

Why are you not a famed writer already?

In any case, amazing job, hooked on every word. I look forward to reading the next chapter of this story. :pinkiehappy:

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Why are you not a famed writer already?

I'm not quite that good, but I've been practicing. Good things come to those who wait, right?

In any case, amazing job, hooked on every word. I look forward to reading the next chapter of this story.

I'm glad you are looking forward to it!

Comment posted by Disavowed ASH deleted Apr 4th, 2015

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A little advice though. Read-up on some Welsh myth. It does wonders ;)

Will do! Thanks for the recommendation.

Edit: Where'd ya go?

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Well, your practice has payed off, and in any case, you should be an acclaimed writer. It's really that good.

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I'm extremely glad you enjoy it! I just started a podcast of sorts where I discuss the story from my perspective.
I'm going to be updating it frequently, maybe you would be interested in seeing what happens on the other side of the screen. https://soundcloud.com/the-lunar-samurai/sets/memoirs-of-memoirs

Definitely LIKES!! Looking forward to more of this:pinkiehappy:

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he once referred to himself as a filly but nothing too distracting.

Most likely caused by an unfortunate side effect from a spell heshe cast....:twilightoops:...or perhaps a momentary encounter with a set of pink & blue stones....:facehoof:....

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I feel like pink and blue stones is a reference, and it is flying over my head.

Also, thanks for the input! I've got some behind the scenes work on my soundcloud if you are interested in the inner workings of the story. :pinkiehappy:

5845608 Sorry, about that. I had debated whether I should have linked the other story or not. It's from "Diaries of a Madman" by whatmustido--there's a cursed artifact the protagonist acquired that would let him switch his gender.

Yeah, I really like how you're doing your own take on such an iconic figure from their ancient past--I really hope that after you've finished writing Starswirl's memoirs that you do a follow-up story about Twilight's reaction when she finally discovers them (:derpyderp1::derpyderp2::pinkiegasp::twilightoops::twilightangry2::raritycry:)

I'll be sure to check out your BTS as soon as I'm finished reading this chapter:yay:

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That's an interesting idea, but I'm not sure if I'd ever be able to get around to it. However, derivative fiction isn't out of the question. :twilightsmile:

there will be lots of situations that I will be forced to leave out due to brevity, but I'm not ruling out someone else filling in the cracks. (once its completed of course)

So, I finally got around to reading this. After getting through the first chapter, I have to say that it left an impression on me, though we will see if that holds. :duck:

In complete honesty, I like where it is heading, and I like how you're exploring the darker subjects of Equestria. It's also fascinating how you've taken a pretty stereotyped fan-established character and reduced him (I use that term lightly) into a character that we can almost relate with. Me still attending college can empathize with Mr. The Bearded because I almost had the same attitude, albeit I wasn't as hateful or full of myself as he is. Nevertheless, I found that this only helped your cause of getting the message through, so well done.

There are still a few grammar mistakes, and the prose itself can be choppy at times, but that's nothing some fine proofing and editing can handle. I recommend getting this looked at by several people before posting, so you can truly make this story sparkle, because it has the potential to shine unlike no other story, especially a Starswirl origin story. :twilightsmile:

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It already goes through several people, but I've been stressing out my pre-reader with the volume of work. It's a two man job at a minimum, but I'm working toward getting more people on the team. (or making the people I have more active.)

I've also been seriously considering a grammarly subscription, seeing as it would save everyone involved a lot of time, but that is quite expensive.

An extensive relook will come before it is put into print, but how soon before is still up in the air. School has begun to take it's toll, and I will be hard pressed to keep my studies up to par as well as writing, editing, and podcasting on the story on a weekly basis.

It's quite the workload, but I believe it is doable. :twilightsmile:

Where did you find all that info on mental dimension building? I would really like to know more. The method is really sound and it doesn't sound like something you just thought up.

This is an amazing story so far and i want to see where this leads.

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The mental dimension building follows a similar pattern for engineering solids modeling.

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6015817 I had a feeling it was like that. Though now I'm curious, how would we create a fourth dimensional space in our mind if we are third dimensional beings. Because we have no way of knowing what it looks like because our perception is limited to three spatial directions, and I'm not going to count time as the fourth.

This is the first fanfic that has made me think about my own universe this hard, you're a good author if you can do that.
Eager to see more.

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Great to hear you are enjoying it! (also, I've got another 2k word chapter slated for release really soon. It's going through my editor now.)

I couldn’t be a part of them., and that 

Unnecessary period there. I also saw something else but i can't remember what it was.

This was an awesome chapter. Keep up the good writing!

When a single characters speech ends one paragraph and starts the next you do not put a quotation mark at the end of the first paragraph.
If you do it implies a new character is speaking in the new paragraph. This does not apply if there is a break in the speaking.
Examples:

"I'm a single person talking blah blah blah blah blah yakity smackity.

"This is a new paragraph and I'm still speaking. Notice the lack of a quotation mark at the end of the previous paragraph."

"This is someone else speaking now. Notice how the previous paragraph had a closing quotation mark."

The narrator describes the scene a bit. "I'm still the second person speaking now. Since I was interrupted by the narrator the previous paragraph was closed with a quotation mark"

Thankfully you've only done this error during long monologues so far. Some authors on this site have this error in the middle of multiple actor dialogues, making the action impossible to follow.

Brief, but pretty concise. I like it; you don´t need much to explain the great step forward this is for Starswirl, the previous chapters took care of it wonderfully. So, yes, I am tremendously satisfied with your story so far. I wanted to tell you that I hadn´t been this invested in a book in ages. I usually get attached to characters in any media but literature (mostly) but every time things star going well for Starswirl I literally jump of my seat with joy. So, keep up the great job! This is definitely one of my favorite not only fanfics, but pieces of literature I have ever read.

Wrong roman numeral, and /) You are one of my favorite writers.

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In my defense, I was exhausted. Fixed! Thanks for pointing that out!

Also, the fact that I'm one of your favorite authors makes me incredibly happy. :rainbowkiss:

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but every time things are going well for Starswirl I literally jump of my seat with joy.

I get giddy when good things happen to Starswirl too! I also took waaaay to long writing the first chapter because his personality was something I honestly despised. I'm glad you're enjoying it! It really makes me feel amazing that I can make something that people will genuinely like.

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I'll definitely look into this. Thanks for the pointing this out!

I really enjoy this portrayal of starswirl- seeing him change from what he initially was in chapter 1 to what he is becoming, and knowing how he will end up, makes for a fun read. I also like how this is reminiscent of the civil rights movement, with people changing their position in life, and uncertainty with how to do so.

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Good to know you're enjoying it! That is definitely a feel that I was targeting with the class divide. There are some serious societal struggles going on in the zeitgeist of Equestria. Right now, things are kinda simmering, but they may boil over in the future.

FINALLY!!:rainbowdetermined2:

At last, the kid pulls his head out of his own ass and starts networking with the folks who can/will help him achieve his future!

This is an interesting take on the character & I like how this version of Starswirl is progressing. Definitely looking forward to more :pinkiehappy:

FINALLY!!:rainbowdetermined2:

IKR! I almost didn't add this in this chapter, but my editor pointed it out so I tossed in that last little moment. He's got to learn sometime, so why shouldn't he learn today?

Hopefully Act 1 will be finished really soon. I hit the end of my backlog, which means I have to actually create content now. Terrible, right?:derpytongue2: That being said, I also get to entertain A WHOLE SLEW OF NEW FOLLOWERS AFTER I GOT FEATURED TODAY. I swear, this really threw me for a loop, but they all want the backstory. I want to push that out first, but I've got some extra time this week so I should be able to make a good dent in both. (If not finish them)

I'm glad you're enjoying this though. This is my favorite story as of late, and I'm really having fun giving Starswirl terrible emotional struggles exploring the complex emotions one goes through during these intense self discoveries. I'm glad you're enjoying it!

Not bad mate. I've seen the concept before, though it would appear you take seems original enough to warrant attention.

Formatting wise though, I would advise you try to work out and space your paragraphs out. They aren't clustered together on my end, but it would appear neater to the eye if you made at least one more ENTER keypress to space things out a little.

Other than that, I currently have no other criticisms to offer. You have my eye otherwise on this story.

You are welcome for the fave.

Though I would say that the chapter was rather on the short side.

Nonetheless I do look forward to additional installments in the future.

6479115 That chapter was definitely shorter. I took the route of making shorter chapters that I could release faster rather than longer chapters that I would release slower (hence my shift from 10,000 word chapters to 2,000 word)

Hoever, Sparks is an abnormally small chapter. The next one is ~2000 right now.

A little short, and there are some formatting issues (an indent here and a space there between two paragraphs), but good to see Starswirl's attempt to try magic. I personally thought he would be rejected and Professor Spark would help him study in secret a little while after, but this works as well. I hope to see more soon.

-W.S.

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A little short, but good to see Starswirl's attempt to try magic.

I'm just happy he finally figured out how to put his pride in a sealed jar for a few minutes and actually talk to someone about his feelings. He's a strong character, but he can't do everything on his own (as much as he might want to).

I personally thought he would be rejected and Professor Spark would help him study in secret a little while after, but this works as well.

Actually, this scene was a toss up between whether or not Spark would help him. Either way, fate has dictated many events in the future, but Spark isn't a hypocrite and he definitely would be willing to push for change where he sees unethical behavior.

I hope to see more soon.

I'm glad you're still tracking me! There is definitely more like this on the way. I've already completed the next chapter and I was going to work on the one after that in a few hours.

And so begin the adventures of Ducheswirl the Stubbly! I'm glad to finally be reading this. It's been sitting in my to read bookself forever, taunting me.

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It's been sitting in my to read bookself forever, taunting me.

Well... I've been taunting you too... :pinkiecrazy:

Chapter II
The Union
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"In which Doucheswirl The Stubbly almost gains a sense of morality."

Brief, but substantial.
So a conspiracy, huh? You know, I think I liked it better when the main challenge Starswirl had to face was the social rejection and his own pride and self loathing, but adding a major element like this to the plot, if managed carefully, could be quite riveting.
So, yeah, I´ll accept it optimistically.

On a more personal note, I was looking forward to reading this (and yes, I have only noticed today that you had updated, thank you for your concern) because, having started my own school course recently I needed some comfort in this story. Starswirl reminds me of me; insecure, antisocial, at times arrogant and all in all lost. And reading through his adventures and misadventures makes me feel like I´m not alone. Thanks for writing this story :pinkiesad2:

Well, that was sappy. I´ll go masturbate at the rhythm of heavy metal while I punch holes in a wall with my free hand. That should increase my masculinity.
Oh, and I can´t wait to see longer chapters!

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I think I liked it better when the main challenge Starswirl had to face was the social rejection and his own pride and self loathing, but adding a major element like this to the plot, if managed carefully, could be quite riveting.

Oh trust me, Memoirs of a Magic Earth Pony is definitely a character based story. There may be conflicts outside of Starswirl himself, but remember the perspective: Starswirl is looking back on his life and recalling what happened and his emotions surrounding those events.

The goal of this story was to take a godlike figure from the show and truly make him someone that was genuinely relatable. With everything that Starswirl will encounter, he's still mortal, has feelings, strengths, weaknesses, and flaws, and truly is a growing character. That was my target. Don't show what happens on the outside as much as I show what happens on the inside.

I guess at the end of the day, we're all human. That's the main reason I wrote this story.

And reading through his adventures and misadventures makes me feel like I´m not alone. Thanks for writing this story :pinkiesad2:

To be honest, I've dealt with the same feelings to. One of the reasons Starswirl feels so genuine is because I've put bits of my own experiences into his personality as well. I think everyone struggles in college and in life in general, I just projected a few of my own issues onto him.

P.S. Thanks for this feedback. It's great to know that my work is really starting to make a difference! :twilightsmile:

I hope everyone here is also familiar with this story: The Legend Of Star Swirl The Bearded

It's one of my all-time favorites, but sadly not updated for three years now. I'd be tempted to try and continue it myself, but I just don't think I could match Blueshift's inventiveness.

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