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aliengirlguy


Greetings! I am Aliengirguy, I am a Brony. I love the show and the amazing fanworks that have come from it. I am a fanboy in a bunch of other fandoms so I specialize in non-heteronormative crossovers.

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It was during Harry's summer before his second year. He was locked up in his room and unable to leave with out the grace of his neglectful relatives. In desperation to escape, his magic came to the fore and whisked him away to a new world. A world with no Voldemort, no fickle wizard society, and no Dursleys.

In this new place, with a new body and a chance to be something, someone else, to choose his path, he seizes it.

Not that he is without secrets in this new world. In the middle of slowly building relationships with other ponies, finding himself, and reaching his own chosen destiny, he tries to keep secret his origins, his true abilities, and one rather obvious difference between himself and other ponies, something that could disrupt his new ideal life in this amazing world full of ponies.

*Please be aware that episodes will be out of order at times for plot convenience, or my own playful whims:pinkiecrazy:

Oh, and if anypony doesn't like it, please comment to me why, I am always looking for good constructive criticism.

Chapters (21)
Comments ( 124 )

thanks! i am always eager for feedback.

I think already from this chapter that he will not just beable to 'blend in'...but it has the protantul to be better for him at least.

He is an alicorn right? To be honest, i was still a bit wary about this story, but i managed to just read the first chapter.

What i want to say, it looks better than i thought, i don´t know what i thought would be so bad, but this could be a good story.

I like Mlp of cours, and i have read all books about Harry Potter, as well watched nearly every movie, but i still wasn´t sure about this crossover.
I don´t know how you want Harry to act, or how you maybe change his personality, since he is learning new things in a new world, but i think i start to like this story.

5 years later…

That is something i really don´t like, but.......i think i can still try it. I just don´t like timeskips, i always think i miss some important or interessting parts.

Oh i remember something, he was just a foal right?, that probably means he don´t know any of the mane six.

I decited to let my other comment stay as it is, but i want to let you know this was a good chapter.
My first reaction was a bad one, because i thought it would start, with him being friends with everyone, and some other things like that, but i am glad you choosed to do otherwise.

Good work, i think this story could be better than i thought at first.
Can i ask you if you still take suggestions for some shippings, or for Harry? I didn´t really thought about it right now, but my first reaction was Twilight, but i guess this was just because they are both new in Ponyville. I read the story first, and then i would make some suggestions if your are open for ideas.

Ah, I was one of the followers of this story on fanfiction.net. I hope you continue it, as it's a pretty decent story.

"Eeyup," the large red pony sighed, before he fell asleep, the feel of a small black hoof running absently through his mane the last thing he registered.

this already looks like Harry would really like him. It would be not bad, but even if he grew up a bit different, i don´t think he would just touch someone like this.

She was a painfully shy, soft spoken pony that had a flare for animals, apparently she could communicate with a large variety of them, and seeing that he was making her uncomfortable, he had merely given his hellos and backed off calmly, but quickly, giving her space as soon as politeness allowed.

i think i promised you to name some mistake if i find some i guess you missed a d there.

I like it, i just can´t decide if this are just friendly actions, or if Harry already knew he was into boys/Stallions. What i mean is, i hope his romance isn´t rushed, that is if he should like Big Mac this way.

To be honest, most of the time i only can see Big Mac with another Male, or with Cheerilee.
While i like the idea of him, and Big Mac, i am curious about other possible shippings for Harry.

I really enjoy it, how Harry is in the background all the time, but at the same time he does important things.
At the start of a chaper, i always with for more conversation, but then there is always enough time, where they are talking, and other stuff like that.

sometimes it feels like you would rush a chapter, othertimes i think it works rather well for your story.
I know Harry should be probably not able to know the best course of action in every situation, but then again he grew up two times already, and he is reading much right?

I really have nothing against Harry, and Big Mac, but you somehow rushed their possible romance, i always have to think they,....well that they like each other way to fast, or that Harry starts to like males way to easy, but i don´t remember if the Harry you choose, already had a girlfriend, or started to like a girl.

I already have read one or two good Derpy romances, but i guess i would still like Derpy X Harry, or Harry X Soarin.
To be honest i don´t knwo how much i would like Harry X Soarin, but it would be interessting.
I guess what i don´t like about Harry X Big Mac right now is, that it really looks, like they would never have to earn the affection in some way, at least i think that is what i want to say about it.

Or Harry suddenly just start to date Zecora, i didn´t thought about that befor.

Going out of order are we? Last chapter had someone that occurred before Discord canonically (yet if that was true here, Voldemort wouldn't have been able to intervene), while this chapter has something that should occur in season 3 after the wedding and the return of the Crystal Empire and thus Sombra.

Mmm... Sombra. I'm sorta expecting a Voldemort possessed Dusk vs Sombra confrontation.

By the way, Cherry Berry is an Earth Pony, not a Unicorn.

just put in the thing about out of order chaps in the story description. just to make sure everypony knows.

I don´t know what makes it different from Big Macs possible love for Harry, but it was nice to see how Soarin was after Harry, he even seems to be a bit shy about it. Well i would enjoy that more than Rainbow X Soarin, because like he said, everyone likes them for being a Wonderbolt, and it always looks like Rainbow would love him for that, but i think i said this already.

Good work, i can´t wait to catch up with the last chapter, but then again that would mean i am already through it.

I've already finished all the chapters so far....but...what am I supposed to do now? :raritydespair:

I know tht won´t happen, but now i want Strong Heart, to live with Dusk, or at least visit him.

It is interessting how Dusk always change, if he is meeting Big Mac, and even if i think part of it is adorable, i still think it is strange for Harry, to be so touchy ? (I hope get the right word), with his Male friends.
Everytime something bad happens, he has to cuddle with one of the Males, okay he lived a few years as a pony, but it is still a bit weird, that he is huggin, and Cuddling only his Stallions friends all the time, if i remember it correct.

It looks like Harry was always gay, and that he already knew that he likes the boys, i just think, that if he hasn´t thought about his Stallion friend as special someponys, then he should probably act the same way with some of his Female friends.
Have i explained what i mean good enough?

I like your story, but sometimes it is strange, to have much of it skipped.
I am a bit sick today, so i don´t explain more, i just wait what you have to say to this, and then i tell you what i meant exactly, if something should still be not clear enough.

5814948 Yes, i can see why you get that impression, but actually, he is touchy with his female friends, he just responds to them differently. Fluttershy for example, they cuddle together in a few chaps for comfort, though more for Fluttershy then for Dusk.

Rarity and Dusk touch in a fashion in that she manhandles him for the sake of fashion, but Rarity is not the cuddly type in my opinion, and Dusk respects that.

Twilight, its more of an intellectual relationship between those two, and her closeness with royalty is likely to make it difficult to get closer to her.

And Pinky...well, she's Pinky and in certain ways the complete opposite of Dusk. They are friends, but not likely to ever be close friends (from his perspective anyway).

Applejack, well, its more along the lines of buisness friends and her being the sister of his best friend, Mac. Why would they cuddle?

Finally the stallions.
Harry cuddles alot with Big Mac because any physical barriers between the two was abolished during his stint in trying to raise the sun. Mac was the first to initiate touch between them by taking care of Dusk, and comforting him as a fellow pony who was doing something amazing, but horrendously painful to keep other ponies safe. Something like that can give any ponies an excuse to cuddle if they want.

Soarin, well, Soarin is the initiator at first, but its because that yes, he is interested in Dusk so that comes out in thier interactions, but after growing a friendship with others, in particular Mac, Dusk responds to this on a subconscious level and takes i as permission to be more tactile.

Also one must remember that in his old world, he was starved for affection, was never hugged or allowed to hug. Even in the Wizarding World there was a sense of distance because of his fame, even with Ron and Hermione in his first year, so this is likely also a large part in influencing his reactions with other ponies.

One can even argue he is tapping into a bit of Voldemort's personality as well, as Voldemort, interestingly enough, was rather tactile in the cannon, though more in the movies then the books.

5814378 :pinkiehappy: glad your enjoying it, but if your interested, i do have another fic that is also a hp/mlp corssover up here called The Journey.

My, was little Twilight a tad jealous of his magic prowess? Still, former brit running a tea shop. And his subconscious must have been inspired by a few Ponyville shops when it designed his shop.

Interesting expansion on griffon culture.

I was wondering if Harry ever got a chance to spread his wings.

You crossed 'pact' with 'pack' and switched your What in Equestia and Thank Celestia in one place.

I do like your resolution of Brindle Gossip though. The cultural awareness classes is something Equestrian cities seem to be in dreadful need of...
I love how harvest happy Harry and Zecora are.

So... Equestria's almost Lockhart? And I did not get the riddle at all... I'm no good at riddles...

So Dusk learned feline from Fluttershy? Cool. I loved that moment with Opal in the tea shop though.

Okay... I completely forgot about that little Tidbit. This does not bode well...

5817489 I think you mean the Sphinx, Yes, he's sort of a MLP Lockheart version that was also inspired by the Sphinx from the Aladdin animated series.

5817536 No, its more along the lines that Opal is good at charades. think Angel bunny style.

5817600 heh. yeah. i love voldie.

Meanwhile in the deepest recesses of Harry’s subconscious...

Voldemort was pleased!

Finally! After so long! he had a minion! Not just some piddling little friend that belonged to his Precious, though he was sure that the sentimental boy would consider it more as a friendship then anything, but Voldemort saw the servant/master connection there, and he was going to focus on that part.

Not only that, but this minion was a dragon! Granted he was a relatively young dragon, but still a dragon! Who had connections to royalty!

Okay that was funny, i can see voldemord laugh, like the grinch in the cartoon version right now.

5815270 i just noticed this comment right now.

Also one must remember that in his old world, he was starved for affection, was never hugged or allowed to hug. Even in the Wizarding World there was a sense of distance because of his fame, even with Ron and Hermione in his first year, so this is likely also a large part in influencing his reactions with other ponies.

I guess this is one way to see it, and i guess i can more than accept your reasoning.

I didn´t only meant that he should cuddle with everyone, but i don´t remembered, that he was nearly as.....physically? with the Mares in any way, as he was with the Stallions, i guess i just thought, that if he wasnt into Males befor, that he would be a bit shy or anything if he noticed how he act around them. Then again, even if i am sure, that i could find reasons against it, i think your reason why he is acting that way is good enough.

I don´t know what i should say for Rarity in this matter, but i could see Applejack, giving him a good hug or anything at least, that means if he had done something nice for her, i guess it depens on how close they are.

Twilight, its more of an intellectual relationship between those two, and her closeness with royalty is likely to make it difficult to get closer to her.

I guess your right, i mean since you Harry don´t want to meet Celestia, he doesn´t tried to get that close to Twilight.

Applejack, well, its more along the lines of buisness friends and her being the sister of his best friend, Mac. Why would they cuddle?

I already said something about this, but i wanted to do it again. I don´t exactly see, how her being the sister of Harrys best friend, would make her unable to get a little bit closer to Dusk, since he helped her with one of her problems. I know it is maybe a bit overstated, but right now it nearly sounds, like he would not have one normal friend in the little group of the main six, beside Fluttershy maybe.

I would actually enjoy to hear something about one of his employee, it doesn´t seems to be necessary, but i would like to see them doing something together, if he was trough about being at least Derpys friend.

To make sure that you get the main thing i want to say, since there are always reasons, to agree with something, or reasons against said things, i choose to agree with your reasoning, since it sounds good enough.

While i prefer some things in a different style of writing, i have to say, that your story is very good in its own way.

I guess i didn´t liked it at first, that you skipped some things in the story, and just gave us a short description about what happened, but it is really not bad.

Well that's just wonderful. I marathon the whole story in one night then get smacked in the face with a cliff-hanger :raritycry: Can't wait for more :rainbowkiss:

yay I get an cookies! :rainbowkiss: :heart: :pinkiehappy:

I assume the Horcrux was briefly referenced when Voldemort was talking about revenge towards Dumbledore?

was it the revenge thing or the near indestructible neclace...

either way in the last chapter I still thought of the Horcrux
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nice tie in with the smartypants doll

lol so thats why ol' mackie grabbed it at the end of lesson zero

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It looks like Harry was always gay, and that he already knew that he likes the boys

Harry/Nevile ship all the way lol
:moustache:

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Applejack, well, its more along the lines of buisness friends and her being the sister of his best friend, Mac. Why would they cuddle?

I believe the first part refers to the apples Harry/Dusk would buy to make any apple based tea he would sell

as for the second in my opinion it would get kind of awkward at times I guess?

5892444 Harry/Neville?....not sure, but i think i saw something that went in this direction, but i didn´t remembered it.

5892863 i think i remember what i meant right there, well....for me it would probably akward with both of them, Applejack and Big Mac. Because of that, and because Harry can´t stop to cuddle, hug or whatever to the Stallions, i guess it makes as much sense, as it does not.

I have no special argument, i just don´t see why Harry should have a problem with that, or why Applejack would have a problem with the cuddling, well the friendly cuddling. I just think it is already clear, that Harry probably get a Stallion as his special somepony, because of how much affection he shows them.

5815270 the way I see it, I'm lot more touchy with my guy friends than my female friends. I practically cuddle with all my guy friends but tend to avoid physical contact with my female friends. And yet, I'm straighter than the displacement line from my house to yours. I just feel more confortable around my guy friends because there is no romantic possibilities or implications there. What would be awesome, I think, would be to have Soarin' and Mac end up together and Dusk with fluttershy. Evidence to this being planned is that he admits flutterhy is beautiful and then blushes at the comment. This implies that he was embarrassed to say it, like how telling a your crush she's beautiful would be nerve wracking and embarrassing, but I would have no problem telling my guy friends they look nice.

Well right off the bat I have to say that I do enjoy this story so far, and I very much like the fact that there was no extra element of harmony.

That being said I would say that you do yourself a disservice by skipping Harry's childhood years.

The beginning of a story is where you as the writer can not only set the hooks for a compelling story, but also get your readers emotionally invested in your protagonist.

There is potential in the beginning to really get the readers involved in Harry by having us figure out along side Harry what exactly he is going to do.

The shock of finding out he is a special breed...finding shelter...a family...emotional moments that the readers can experience along side the protagonist...skipped over for the sake of moving the story along to present day ponyville...

I can only guess at why...maybe you don't feel confident enough to write a story mainly with OC's...maybe you had a vision of a part later in the story and you wanted to hurry up and get to that part...I don't know...

I still like the story of course, but it is the details like that which can take an okay story and convert it into an incredible story.

I do hope this updates again soon.

Bah...second chapter in and you slap us with a 5 year time skip.

It's making me want to write my own spin on this plot though. Maybe have Harry arrive in that ally while sick with a fever? He watches the ponies from the shadows not sure what's going on. Seeing only regular ponies, unicorns, and pegasi walking the streets, he grabs a dirty bit of cloth from a nearby dumpster to cover his wings so no one will call him a freak. Probably wanders the allies until he passes out due to his fever.

Then maybe some hobos find him. They tend to his illness and discover he's an alicorn. When he regains consciousness, I'd imagine he'd be scared and beg them not to tell anyone. After explaining how his aunt and uncle abused him, they reluctantly agree to keep it a secret.

So the hobos adopt Harry and he becomes the Alicorn Prince of the Hobos.

Or maybe Celestia come to investigate the strange magical energy surge and finds the sick little colt and adopts him a-la Rocinante's Tears of a Foal. I love Momlestia fics.

She'll try to get Harry to open up and come out of his shell, but he again begs to keep the whole alicorn thing a secret. All he wants is to be normal. Celestia agrees with it and enrolls him in that school of hers.

I don't think there is any reason for Harry to bring up the whole being-human-from-another-world thing. It doesn't really add anything to the story other that a massive headache.

What to do about Voldemort though...hmm? I say just screw it. Maybe Trelawney faked the prophecy in order to get a job? Let Dumbledore and Magical Britain hang. I imagine eventually the Crown would start to notice and take over the Ministry of Magic. Then they start bombing the hell out of Death Eaters all while Dumbledore's pulling his beard out as all his plans go up in flames.

just read through all the chapters today and so far enjoying it, except for maybe the possibility of same sex relationships, while i have nothing against it, it makes me uncomfortable >.>
i am having evil thoughts of dusk getting a marefriend despite mac and soarins attempts and their reactions to that happening

I do hope this story will continue to be updated though

So is it going to be a three sum or is dusk going to pick. I think the three some would work beacouse saorin seams like the type to be both submisive and dominate

I wonder if all these things where he cannot remember doing something or talking with somepony will finally clue him that something is wrong with him.

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