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During a camping trip with the CMC and their sisters, Scorpan, Thorne, and Rep recount their days at Tambelon's School of Knighthood, from earning the Medallion of Knighthood to overcoming Ahuizotl's bullying. It also tells how Scorpan and Tirek became brothers, and features Tambelon's true king: The Moochik
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Catrina37,
I just read your story.
I have seen a lot of errors that need correcting, but I'm afraid I must tell you what else I find to be a problem besides that.
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What6's wrong?
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Now don't get me wrong, I loved where things were going, especially how Scorpan met the friends he has now.
But, there were so many flaws.
I mean, since Ahuizotl was the one who burned the farm, why didn't his father ever say anything to him involving that? For that matter, what did he even think?
I felt like there was also more to why Ahuizotl wanted to impress his father through more than just keeping the family reputation? What is it that has been going on between them? Was their relationship troubled? Was his father the reason why Ahuizotl was who he was, and who he is today? Was his father the reason for everything that has happened?
I will say however, that despite the flaws that I just listed, particularly with Ahuizotl, that they will not stop me from doing what I did before with your other story.
May I recommend that you make a story about how and why Ahuizotl came to be an arrogant bully, an apprentice to Grogar, and a treasure thief and nemesis of Daring Do?
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I'll try.
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Is there any way I can help?
A way to help you come up with a new story perhaps?
Anything at all?
I think I have an idea, and you gave it to me. In megan's arc, not only will she help the knights realize their code like the rainbow power arc in season 4, she will also pass tests that will grant her the magic of friendship. She already passed the tests of loyalty and generosity in two of my stories. I need something for the test of kindness. Any ideas for laughter and honesty?
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I'm not sure about laughter really.
But, I do have a great idea for Megan's test of honesty.
Would you like for me to tell it to you here or private message?
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Hello?
Let's hear it.
I just sent it through private messaging so that no one else can see it.