And here is part two! Again, no clop yet, but don't worry. The payoff is coming!
I just hope I'm not making Trixie seem too sad or pitiful in this. She's just got a lot on her mind, and thinking about things she never really thought about before.
But anyway, I hope you all enjoy this chapter. I'm going to try and wrap it up in the next one, that is if I don't get too long-winded with my writing again

Great so far, the only problem I'm seeing is that you have a whole lot of "would of/should of/could of" in there that should be "would've/should've/could've" or "would have/should have/could have". ^_^

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Yeah. I made grammar my bitch

this is a clopfic?i52.tinypic.com/33139n9.jpg

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Instant gratification isn't one of my lont term goals

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I would hope not, as long-term goals go that would be pretty short-term.

it has potential very few to no major errors keep it up

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Now I know you're just being nice. I know I make a lot of errors just out of habit when I type. But at least they don't (in my opinion) make the story unreadable, so I don't fret over them. I'm more concerned with the story I tell than following proper grammar. And, in this case, getting the story proof-read and edited isn't a high priority for me.

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Well, it sorta is if you're worried about the story aspect of it. If you just want to read something that'll end in clop, I guess not

TMB was amazing for a clop fic, I enjoyed it greatly just for it's story. You seem to be doing well so far with this, I'll track to see if you can keep it up.

I-I just read the entirety of Trixie's Magic Bit just today with minimal interruption at best in the form of Minecraft and a short, two hour birthday party. Something that long usually takes me 2-3 days at most. Now I'm here before subjecting myself to the sequel. My mind is filled with so much clop, but I must read this.

I love Trixie's Magic Bit and ima let you finish

But leading in with author's notes that are... like that... is bad and you should feel bad. Put it in the synopsis.

One more thing. This is a side story to my single favorite fanfic? Then I'm gonna be the one to tell you that your grammar deserves a TTG-style ass-beating. Either you or someone else needs to grind through this, finely combing it for errors. Not just the "would of" one, which is by far the most obvious, but smaller ones too.

That said, I'll read this simply because I was wanting to write a TMB side-story too.

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Firstly, I feel I should warn people before they get in over their heads. Seems only fair.

Secondly, I know my grammar sucks, but this story is low priority when it comes to getting it fixed. It's just a side project I do when I feel like writing but not on my main writing project. So if you're one of these people who cant read something unless it's got text-book grammar, feel free to proof-read it yourself. I might even post your edits if I like them.

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Not wanting to work on your grammar is your right. I guess. Your attitude towards "people who need textbook grammar" isn't terribly reassuring, but don't let me tell you your business.

I really think you ought to re-evaluate your attitude regarding author's notes, though.

One: It robs you of the ability to smack the reader in the face with your opening hook. We get distracted by hearing you talk to us; we'd rather get to the point. Your hook is less effective because you pulled us aside for a moment before delivering it. Two: It really isn't necessary. Any PR as well as almost anyone else will tell you that these things should go into a space that isn't designated for the STORY part of your story. In fact, people don't need any warning beyond the mature tag. Write what you're gonna write with confidence--if people are shocked by the effects of the titular bit, they are welcome to leave; that's not your fault or your problem.

The looks and giggles she got just seemed to please Trixie, assuring her that more ponies knew who she belonged to.

Your participle's dangling. Sorry, I've always wanted to say that.

I know what you said to others about your grammar, but it kind of does take away from the story. At least for me, it does. I see bad grammar or improper word usage (like "make due"), and I have to mentally correct it, which ruins the immersion into your story. Now I'm not saying you have to be English Professor perfect (Lord knows this post alone contains a handful of errors itself), but a little more care would go a long way to keeping your audience's interest.

That said, it's a pretty good side story to TMB, and I look forward to more updates with it.

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You've given me some thought about my own A/N in my stories.

Great story. I love Romance clop fics

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Will this be updated ?