Twilight nuzzled Silver gently a moment before circling the room almost aimlessly. "So, I heard you got a new guard?"
Silver watched her intently. "I did. Rough Tumble, an old friend of mine, from before I was a lunar pony, before I even had my cutie mark."
Twilight tilted her head, pausing in front of some papers that she straightened obsessively. "Spike's said he's been trying to be helpful around the castle." Her eyes wandered a moment before settling back on Silver. "I heard... you spent time with Fast Change?"
"Twilight."
"Yes?"
"You're stalling..."
Twilight shrank a little. "Maybe... I did it the first time out of scientific curiosity. I..." She shuffled in place a little, then approached Silver, kissing her cheek. "I love you." Silver warmed at the words. "But..." Silver tensed. "It's more of a familial love. I don't... get excited when I see you. Not like that."
Silver considered the words carefully. "You haven't given much chance for those thoughts to come out. We're both busy ponies." She leaned in and rubbed her nose over Twilight's cheek and neck, where she began nibbling gently. "You don't let yourself get excited for many ponies. Go on, do it. For tonight, let me be in charge."
Twilight's wings went stiff and wide as she nodded. Soon she was more than she, and Silver softly held her. True to her word, Silver carefully worked Twilight, teasing and plying her with physical delight. It was quite some time before they even made it to the bed, but by the time they had, Twilight was breathing heavily and was putty beneath Silver's hooves. Fast's advice was paying off, so far as Silver could see, and she eagerly brought Twilight higher and higher.
"Twilight. I'm going to mount you now."
Twilight breathed in deep gulps of air. She said nothing, just bobbing her head before letting it hang, lost in the teasing Silver had subjected her to. Silver climbed up on her and soon the two were one, and both learned a deeper appreciation for one another in their gender roles. Silver was relentless in her work, bringing Twilight to the mountain only to push her off the cliffside repeatedly. As they approached the fourth time, Twilight suddenly rolled over, pinning Silver to the bed and taking charge. Silver squealed and thrashed, but the noises were of delight, not panic.
As Twilight reached the top, instead of falling free, she took flight. Silver felt a burning harsh tingle explode through her and went limp as it become a new, alien pleasure building inside of her form. Twilight was making the oddest noise as she grinded against Silver. Between them, Silver's heart crystal throbbed with Twilight's color, seeming to harmonize with the powerful exchange between them.
Consciousness fled them both, and Twilight fell into Silver's loving embrace.
Twilight awoke first to find herself flopped to the side of Silver. She stretched out before noticing she still had something extra and willed it away. It was a new day. She nudged Silver gently. "Wake up. We have to get washed and get to work. There's plenty to do." She pulled off the sheets in her teeth, whipping them away to reveal a bloated Silver. She crashed to her haunches. "What?"
Silver awoke to feeling cold and reached out blindly for the blanket. When she failed to find it, she cracked her eyes open. "Oh, hello Twilight."
Twilight pointed at Silver. "Y-you're huge!"
Silver followed the hoof to her gravid belly and jumped to her hooves on the bed, a dangerous move when so large. She flopped right back over, almost slipping from the bed. "What happened?"
Twilight shook her head quickly. "I don't know. Are you OK?"
Silver closed her eyes and searched her body for problems. "I don't... feel wrong, just..." She put a hoof to her belly. "Big... Wait. You felt that, last night?"
Twilight turned red quickly. "I felt a lot of things."
Silver wobbled a hoof. "The last thing!"
Twilight defaulted to her comfort zone. "At optimal stimulation, I felt a rhythmic contraction resulting in a release of seminal fluids and a sharp release of magic."
Silver bobbed her head. "That last bit." She licked her lips then nodded once more. "I... have an idea. Sit with me." She rolled up to her haunches, and soon Twilight was seated beside her. Silver wrapped a wing around Twilight and held her close. She focused on Twilight's magic, then her own, trying to get a clear picture of the two, side-by-side, and within her. "This is your chance, come on. We want to see you."
"Who are you talking to?"
Silver softly nudged against Twilight. "Maybe nopony, shh." Silence came back to the room a moment before Silver could find that vague presence within her. She called to it, mentally making funny faces at it and smiling, trying to coax it as one might any child. Silver felt a powerful suction, not unlike when her cutie mark was removed. Twilight stiffened, feeling much the same thing. Magic poured from the two as Silver's rounded belly started to flatten back out. All the magic available swirled together in a bright burst of rainbow light, revealing a tiny foal with little exposed fangs. He had brown fur with lavender mane and tail. He squeaked softly and reached up at Twilight and Silver.
Silver trembled with emotion. "My foal..."
Twilight reached forward, picking up the little colt. "Our... colt? Isn't.. it too early? He looks fine."
Silver smiled broadly. "He's perfect. Hello there little guy." She leaned forward and nuzzled the foal, as bright colors filled her view. In a flash of rainbows the foal was gone. "Wha?"
Twilight tapped her chin softly. "I think it was too early... We should... maybe try that later?"
Silver shrank in place, simultaneously pleased and disappointed. "Yeah... But, it's proof! He really did make it." She squeezed Twilight tightly. "Our foal survived!"
Twilight wrapped her wings around Silver, letting out a slow sigh. "He did, and he was adorable. Now if we can get him for longer than a minute?"
Silver snorted. "That would be good. Is he back inside of me?"
Twilight tilted her head. "I assume so? I don't know how to check that."
Silver rose to her full height, looking confident. "He's fine. Let's get to business."
Twilight followed after Silver as they descended the stairs. "You seem... different. In a good way?"
Silver perked an ear back at Twilight. "I feel like I've gotten a ghost to go away, several. Our foal is safe, the Text isn't bothering me, but there's something we need to take care of."
"What's that?"
"Minso. She's out there, possibly in danger. She deserves to be rescued."
Twilight tilted her head. "That was the human you ran into, yes? You're not... attracted to her, are you?"
"No!" Silver stopped and turned to face Twilight. "She's a fine person and doesn't deserve to be abandoned. I... actually have an idea for her that wouldn't even put her next to either of us, but first we rescue, then we place her. I brought her here, it's my responsibility."
Twilight set a hoof on Silver's shoulder. "Sorry, I didn't mean to sound accusing. Rescuing somepony is always a good cause. Any idea where she might be?"
Silver pointed at Twilight. "You do. You have the human detecting spell. We'll cast it together for maximum range and find her."
Twilight smiled brightly. "Excellent thinking. You go to the map room while I fetch the spell." She turned around and vanished upstairs, leaving Silver to trot to the ground floor and wander into the map room. Tumble was in there, looking at the map with undisguised curiosity.
He looked up when Silver came in and rushed for her. "Good morning! Did you sleep well?"
Silver nodded softly. "Very well. What are you up to?"
He shrugged a little. "Nothing special. Fast Change isn't up yet."
"Going to practice?"
A quick nod was given. "Then I'm going with him out to the road. He said Night Watch'll be there too."
Silver sat lightly. "She should be. How's your business?"
He huffed softly. "The drivers are doing what they always do, but I don't have time to drive my own truck."
Silver leaned closer. "Does that upset you? I know it's your talent."
Tumble glanced around. "Being here is... It's worth it."
Silver nodded. "Then why don't you make the business more of a... what was it... franchise? Or get a manager. Let somepony else sweat over it, collect the profits for now."
Tumble nodded slowly. "Yeah... that might be a good idea. Thanks, and, uh, thanks, for all this. For giving me a real chance."
Silver leaned in and rubbed noses gently. "You gave yourself a chance. Don't let anyone else be the gatekeeper of your destiny."
Twilight returned with a scroll held in her magic. "Ready when you are. We'll have a big breakfast afterwards." She licked over her lips. "I'm sure we'll be famished."
Tumble perked his ears. "I'll cook something up." And off he went, hurrying towards the kitchen.
Twilight chuckled gently. "He's so eager to please you. It's kind of adorable." She unfurled the scroll and floated it in front of Silver where she could read it easily. "Let me know when you're ready."
Silver frowned at the horn symbols, playing them out over her own horn slowly. "Not too complex. The hard part will be doing it together. Team spells are always more tricky."
Twilight nodded. "We'll manage." She moved beside Silver and sat down. She leaned over and tapped their horns together. "I'm going to get us on the same frequency." She began to pulse magic through her horn, which shot right down into Silver in electric tingles. It started slow but increased in tempo until it hit a brisk pace fast enough to cast a spell through. "With me?"
Silver nodded faintly, not breaking the contact. "I have the beat. Let's try it." Their horns shone with the magic of the spell, forming the letters quickly and smoothly between them. Power was drawn greedily from the deep wells of the alicorns, and questing energy fired brilliantly across Equestria, feeling for humans. She could feel Jake, and some other male in Manehattan, and others lurking here and there, but felt no familiarity to them. The fact that she could feel Manehattan was amazing.
"Focus on the human you want to find." Twilight nudged against Silver gently.
Silver pulled the mental image of Minso into her mind and held it firmly. One of the presences became a little distinctive. It was deep in the forests west of Baltimare. "Got her!"
Twilight wrapped a wing around Silver. "Hold on!" With a bright flash of lavender magic, they were sped away. Hopefully Twilight's rash decision to teleport wouldn't put them in immediate peril.
Harts Fire is literary dancing around the room right now, he can be such a bother at times.
All the magic available swirled together in a bright burst of rainbow light, revealing a tiny foal with little exposed fangs. He had brown fur with lavender mane and tail. He squeaked softly and reached up at Twilight and Silver.
Silver trembled with emotion. "My foal..."
Twilight reached forward, picking up the little colt. "Our... foal? Isn't.. it too early? He looks fine."
Silver smiled broadly. "He's perfect. Hello there little guy." She leaned forward and nuzzled the foal, as bright colors filled her view. In a flash of rainbows the foal was gone.
the first peek at Silvers and Twilights foal.
after that the rest of the chapter just rocks.
Harts Fire
Twilight is luring how to make love not just sex for studying.
Not every thing in life is about tacking notes some times it is just bets to let your self go so to speak.
Not an error per se, but I really think that should be "You're stalling..."
Twilight's wings went "stiff."
Capitalize the "i" in "it."
So far "as" Silver could see.
Change the phrase "and letting her head hang" to "before letting it hang."
Delete the comma after "alien."
Change "some" to "something."
I...thought it had been established that Silver and Twilight's foal was going to be female, and that Night was the one bearing a colt? Or am I misremembering?
Delete the "an," here.
Why is he referring to Fast Change in the feminine form? Has he changed back into a female?
5939868 Tweaked for much improvement. Did I say that? I could be misremembering. Wouldn't be the first time! I didn't think I had mentioned Silver's foal, just Night's. [Citation Required]
5939879 Hrm, I can't seem to find it now...and there's some references to them not being sure of the gender in earlier chapters. I was sure I saw it somewhere that Silver's foal was a girl.
5939914 Someone else found it, fixed!
Yeah... nope, they are in some deep shit. Dammit Twi.
~Crystalline Electrostatic~
5940401 Kudos to that person, then! Just out of curiosity, where was it?
5940588 Zecora mentioned it during episode 3, chapter 29 or so.
5939879 Well, this was certainly a spicy chapter! For all the naughtiness, what happened here managed to raise several points regarding Silver and Twilight, most of which were for the better. Let's examine them in further detail, shall we?
If there was any lingering doubt that Silver has fully embraced a feminine identity, this chapter dispels it. Not only content to be the mare during sex, Silver displays an aggressive appetite as a heterosexual female here; her willingness to play with Twilight's "equipment" showcases an utter lack of hesitation with regards to being with a male partner in every manner imaginable. It's one thing to be a passive "receiving" partner during sex; it's another thing to actively "pet" a stallion. While previous chapters may have closed the book on Silver's masculinity, this was it disappearing completely.
Insofar as Twilight was concerned, I'm of two minds regarding how aggressive Silver was with her. On the one hoof, Silver was quite clearly correct in that Twilight was letting her fears get the better of her, to the point where it was impeding her sex life. Twilight has a long history of trying to avoid the things that make her uncomfortable, and it wasn't surprising to see that happen again here. In that regard, Silver did the right thing in gently pushing Twilight, since the latter ended up very clearly enjoying herself quite a bit.
On the other hoof, however, I'm a little concerned that Silver is pushing Twilight to be more sexually transgressive than she's comfortable with. Twilight flat-out stated that she used that spell before because she was curious, and there's no particular reason to doubt her in that regard. Her desire to "experiment" in that way faded after that, and hasn't resurfaced since (one instance of rubbing hers against Silver's notwithstanding) prior this chapter. That brings up an uncomfortable point of view - that Twilight doesn't really want to experience sex as a stallion, and Silver pushed her into it. Now, obviously this latter idea is somewhat undone by the description of Twilight's screaming orgasms, to the point of her actively taking charge towards the end...but that doesn't discount the idea completely. Simply having a major physical reaction doesn't necessarily mean it's something she's comfortable with.
Ultimately, the issue here is that the nature of Twilight's reluctance is ambiguous. Was she shying away from having sex as a stallion because she's just shy and afraid to try new things? Or was it because she honestly doesn't want to keep transgressing her own sexual identity, and Silver is pressuring her to do so? It's unclear...but either way, it's a bit upsetting how Silver presumes that Twilight is going to be, or even wants to be, as comfortable with "gender fluidity" as she and Fast are. That's especially true since Silver has nothing against having sex as a female with another female, as Night can attest - between that and how she has Fast and Tumble with her now, there's no reason for her to keep pushing Twilight like this. It's selfish of her to do so without asking, if nothing else.
Of course, the more noteworthy event was that this led to them accidentally figuring out how to reincarnate their foal, albeit temporarily. I'm not quite sure I understand the underlying reasons for why a sudden influx of Twilight's magic into Silver's body would suddenly allow their foal to create a new body...that's clearly related to how their foal is a mixture of Twilight and Silver, and is now diffused throughout Silver's body in a mixture of Twilight, Luna, and Celestia's magic, but how that ties into Twilight donating her magic to Silver like that isn't entirely intuitive. It's clearly related to both Silver "impregnating" Luna, and Luna being able to create Celine, but the specifics aren't as clear as I'd like.
I smirked at Twilight sharply asking Silver if she was attracted to Minso. Given that the herd has a de facto size of seven (Silver, Twilight, Night, Fast, Tumble, Celestia, and Luna) - and could swell as large as nine if they do end up dragging Cadance and Shining Armor in - Twilight is right to want to keep Silver's wandering eyes in check. Heck, Silver still seems like she's halfway to having an affair with Starlight Glimmer. The presumption in any harem story is that new female characters are there to be "consumed" by the central character, and it seems that even though that's a meta-narrative trope, Twilight is aware of it on some level. It'll be interesting to see she can make sure Silver stays true to her word (Asian women, amirite, Silver?).
But why in the heck did they just teleport off on a whim like that? Twilight isn't that reckless normally, and especially after her last bout of recklessness killed Silver and their foal! The idea that Minso was in danger was somewhat credible, but not to the point of requiring immediate action - for heaven's sake, Tumble is one room away, and you can't even tell him where you're going in case you need backup?
That said, it is nice to see Tumble integrating with the group so well, and with Silver in particular. Hopefully he'll be able to manage his business in a hooves-off manner, as Silver suggested, while still juggling that with his guard duties and his relationships with the rest of the herd. One of the bigger pitfalls with harem fics is that the supporting cast tends to interact with just the main character, while ignoring each other a little more than feels natural (hence why it was good to see Fast and Night going on some dates a little while back). That Tumble developed such a rapport with Fast was a good sign, and while it's obvious that he wants to be as close to Silver as much as he can, she shouldn't be the sum total of his social life.
5940688 Not everyone around Silver will bend the way she herself was bent. She has come around to Fast's lifestyle, at least with those she finds favor with, but not everyone she is in contact with will want to or even be able to make that adjustment, and it will come to a head quite shortly(the chapter's been gnawing at my brain trying to escape but my brother dragged me to the Avengers instead).
Twilight doing something rash that can result in more trouble than if she had calmly thought it through? That sounds pretty Twilightish overall. Maybe Rainbow Dash has a masters degree in it, but Twilight at least minored in impulsive actions.
One big thing is that the castle is like one big family. No one is left standing on the outside, except maybe Spike. Poor Spike.
Another inconsistency:
You had Zecora declare that Night's foal is male, while Silver's is female; then you go and say that they have no diea what cgender the child is... and not suddenly Silver's foal is male.
6611965 A little late to the party. been poking David for a lot of fixes here and there.
The gender of Silver's foal was declared to be male, but there was some bits earlier where they talked and she claimed she didn't know the gender. These have been submitted to the appropriate authorities.
"Picking up the little colt" is what you want if the gender is male
6895143 Fixed!
Several what?