Of course, not all friendships stem from favorable events; some can be created by even socially isolating issues.
Sweetie Belle and Scootaloo completely understand this fact. Apple Bloom understands this as well, but not like Sweetie Belle and Scootaloo did, for they have known this lesson longer—about 30 minutes longer.
Special Thanks to luna150 for the cover art and editing.
This story was written for the Everfree Northwest Writing Contest.
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Your punctuation is practically perfect (which is always nice to see).
I enjoyed the story, s'a fun idea
If you're looking for any advice, mine would be to try and expand upon the points you make in the story; go deeper, y'know? A specific example, I can think of, would be to extend the dialogues --as I noticed that this story seems to be heavier on narration than dialogue, so evening that out to include more dialogue, I reckon, would help further it (provided the dialogue is relevant, etc, of course). Especially for when/if you want your stories to have a slower pace.
"before the party, She knew she couldn't" No need to capitalize "She".
Otherwise, I agree with what Atreyu said.
Nice prologue!! I like it!
Simple, yet somehow awesome. I wish there were more one-shots like this.
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Thank you guys for the comments!
Just a heads-up, you are missing a few periods. For example:
Stuff like that. Nothing serious, though.
That said, this is a very sweet one-shot. Like a cold, tasty treat straight out of Sugar Cube Corner! Thanks a bunch for writing!
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When the first line of a rated E for everyone fic is a stealthy STD joke, I know I'm in for a good time.