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certainly intresting. i guess.
Don't know why you feel you need to hide this. It's well written.
576509 It's not hidden. It's just waiting approval.
576513 oh. ... I'm still kinda new to this site; how does that happen?
576518 New stories have to be submitted to a queue to be approved by a moderation. Makes sure that stuff that violates the rules doesn't get through, yeah?
576520 I see. Well, I won't take up anymore space. Long story short, ( too late i know, lol ) this is well writen out as far as intimate stuff goes.
"Shut up and take my money!"
If this ever comes out in book form, I'd totally buy it. So fucking awesome dude.
not bad at all
I absolutely LOVED your 'Transcend' fic, so I will definitely be reading this... tomorrow. Damn work getting in the way
But I just know: dis gon b gud!
Clop or not it still carried a lot of the same emotional weight the rest of Transcend had in it. If you judge this on it's own merits it's still well done, touching(no pun intended) and the characters have dimension. I also don't know if I can judge this as it's own piece because like 90% of the people reading this I read and enjoyed Transcend. I still hold that fic as the standard for Chrysalis shipping, because you do what a lot of writers don't do and that is keep Chrysalis in character and slowing create character development. Plus it's ending was great.
The phrase: "big, stupid oaf" became wonderful terms of endearment.
Peace Out.
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Ohh Lord .. That was one of the best clop fics I have ever read, And I have read quite a few of them....
GOOD JOB And what more is it to say ? more?
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Interesting...
I'm not really a fan of clop. I actually despise anything clop related. Just feels weird to me, nothing against other people enjoying it. But I gotta admit, you wrote a good clop. One that does not rely on cheap sex description to atract the readers and fans. You wrote a romantic clop, fancy that!
Writing anything with sexual content is always a big problem, as far as I know, because there's this tendency of using the sex to sell your story, which is true up to a point. But I believe the BEST stories are ones with a good romantic background and development.
Cee loves Evergreen, I know that from "Transcend". But reading such an intimate moment is very good and shows us a bit of their character. I had a few things bugging me, but they were completely forgotten after I read this.
And here's something I never thought I'd write for a clop:
Keep 'em coming cap'n!
579067 I'm glad you liked it.
Once I finish the chapter 15 rewrite, I'll write up the Evergreen x Chrysalis scenes. They'll be a lot more...intense. You know, last night together, true form for the first time, etc etc.
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Even more intense? Damn... I'm starting to think us men should try to be more like Evergreen. I think I mentioned it once that he's a great guy, the perfect lover, but after this chapter... My face was like
579104 That's not...a problem is it? I really don't want Evergreen coming off as Gary Sue...
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Well, not a problem as far as I see it. I guess it's just kinda shocking (remember, this is my first time reading a clop fic). Also, I was complementing him for being a rough lover. I had that image of him before you published this chapter, but know I see he is also a true gentlecolt. I repeat myself to reinforce: Us men could use a bit of the Evergreen style. Maybe he could write a guide? "How to woo your lady"-- Wait a sec, there's already a fic with that title
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"How to woo yer mare - by Evergreen
Well, yer see, to woo yer mare like a true gentlecolt, yer sorta gotta respect her feelings even if yer got a raging itty problem that needs dealin' with, yer know?
And uhm...respect her feelings or she'll eat yer.
The end."
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You got some chuckles from me
one small nitpick, however,
"Surely, she knew of the act, knew the requisite actions, the tricks, the art of seduction. It was part and parcel of what she was to understand this most base of actions; but she had never been comfortable enough with anypony to ever actually participate with them in this kind of union."
Surely is being used a little awkwardly here, this line would have better flow if you used "Of Course" instead, i.e.
"Of course she knew of the act, knew the requisite action, the tricks, ~~~"
aside from that though, everything else is just pure awesome
You messed up a lot of your possesive contractions (her lovers as opposed to her lover's is an example), but that didn't detract too much from what was otherwise a satisfying story indeed.
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I just love how she calls him oaf. Makes me laugh every time, and ponder whether or not I would want a girlfriend like that. Maybe in the bedroom I would, but not in public
soooo... will there be more?
I was iffy about reading a clop about Cee and Evergreen, but the character development in here is great. It's the missing scene where their relationship really starts to bloom. I wish I'd been able to read this before the chapter where Evergreen learned the truth, manly tears would have been shed.
I loved "Transcend", and I don't see how this could be awaiting approval. Seems perfectly fine to me.
cover art...
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Yo Anonymous... Not meaning to be pushy but you DID promise two chapters... Now where is my second dose of Cee and Evergreen?
958148 It's coming, slowly. I've gotta rewrite whole bloody chunks of Transcend to get to chapter 15, and then COMPLETELY rewrite chapter 15 x.x; once that's done, you get your clop. Otherwise, the clop makes no sense. ssoooorry
958151Or you could be a good author and pump out an awesome chapter from nothing like you normally do...
I gotta say, very few clops get my heart pounding just from reading it. Excellent.
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That picture is full of win and awesome. Does it belong to any particular story?
My fine sir, you get 'stache.
Clopfics can be many things, from vile to sublime. This was very much over to the sublime. It was so... emotional. Filled with both love AND raw passion, taking both sides of the scale, the polished and refined romanticism of careful thoughts and constructions as well as the uninhibited animal lust, raw and throbbing and unrelenting. Simply wonderful.
It's been so long. I wish I had seen it when it first came out. But I'm somewhat glad I didn't, because I would have been endlessly pining for a pony/undisguised-Changeling clop story that never came. Good thing I already wrote my own.
Fuck the what?
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Hello again. Fancy meeting you here.
958151
Are you done yet?
2288323 With the rewrite? Yeah. Just need to get around to writing that final lost scene.
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Shouldn't take you that long.
Should it?
2288377 Depends on if I feel like writing it. I haven't written anything for like a week now. Just haven't felt in the mood to write.
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K
That was very well written, I love Transcend too so this was a bonus.
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