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Dusk Shine in that picture looks a lot like Scott Pilgrim.
5774826 So he's going to have to defeat all seven of Sonata's evil exes?
Dusk, you need to watch more anime
I love how the personalities level out! Ultra cute, liked and favorited!
Dear Diary:
Today, Senpai noticed me!
5775281 This is why I ship them!
DoubleDusk may just be the greatest ship name ever.
5775501 I know right?
5774892 And almost everybody else.
More please!
5778584 We've got a group for this ship! There's only five stories by me and a friend, but it's better than nothing!
5778625
I meant I specifically want to see more Dusk Shine teaching Sonata about human interaction.
5778641 Oooh. Yeah, maybe!
u know u not only mispelled but misused Sempai? the term refers to someone who has been in a company longer than the one using the honorific, such as an upperclassman in a school being talked to by a freshman, the freshman would call the upperclassman 'sempai' as a show of respect
Celestia damn it if she's not just the cutest thing.
See what I mean?
For realzies?
That's rather complimentary.
5779380 Yeah, I figure the term's meaning has been twisted up. That's the traditional definition, the rest of the internet misspells it.
One word, adorable!
6052338 Thanks! :D
Given the amount of times the Sirens have presumably been around (1000 years plus) in the human world, it doesn't surprise me Sonata's picked up mannerisms from other cultures.
This was best sentence:
Although I did spot an error or two:
Dusk pulled out his IPhone.
I'm pretty sure that it's spelled 'iPhone' unless of course you want Dusk Shine to imagine that he is a phone and using crude grammar: "I Phone!"
(That would be hilarious.)
Oh and then there was this:
The way you wrote this treats the words above more like spoken dialogue, unlike the previous error this one might just be me suggesting a more common way to treat the words in a different writing layout. The result was my brain automatically correcting it to this:
While I thought the story was cute, it might help to make one-shots like this into longer stories with more details. But perhaps I'm just wishing this were longer since I normally do not read cute-short-slice-of-life-happy-fluff-normal-activities and therefore am not quite used to their cheery simplicity. Hopefully, I'll being seeing more Sonata stories from you. I like the way you write her.
6712827 Thanks for the tips! I'll be taking a writing haitus but when I finally feel my creative juices flowing again I'll definitely write another Sonata story!
6716132
Yay
That was adorable