Indefinite hiatus. I might still poke my head in from time to time, but I'll be surprised if I add anything new.
Life is very long. Eternity is even longer. Eons in the future, a goddess must contend with entropy and loss.
Now available in Spanish courtesy of Tio Brony
Cover art by me.
Idea came to me whilst reading Jazzteeth's End of the universe stories. They are good.
Page generated in 0.181 seconds
Total duration
987 users online
104,916 hits today, 2,561,572 yesterday
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
Designed and coded by knighty & Xaquseg - © 2011-2024
Support us
SubStar
Chat!
Discord
Follow us
Twitter
MLP: Friendship is Magic® - © 2024 Hasbro Inc.®
Fimfiction is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro Inc.®
So sad, but so good. A simple, but deep story. Bravo, this was very good... and sad... the best pairing
Not bad.
I liked this concept. It was pretty good.
Pretty depressing how Luna died, these 'new ponies' harvested her away until she died.
Let me start off by saying I am not reviewing or judging this. Simply I am pointing out a couple mistakes you might consider fixing.
In the second half, when Celestial was ill , she said she would bot have to deal with it. Bot needs to be translated to not. That confused me for a moment... other than that, and a couple other minor grammical errors, this was well written, well excicuted, and a story I am glad I took the time to read. If I was rating it, I would give it. 8/10
5767911
I could be an ass and say that any grammatical errors were from mistranslation from old Equestrian but that would be dishonest. Could you give me a couple examples? I tried to make Celestia's writing in very strange, convoluted grammar befitting her age, and it might have gotten a bit out of hand.
Should I mark this as tragedy? It's got a lot of the right elements, but it isn't really tragic.
Also, about the title: The Curse of Immortality, though apt, is a generic and kind of boring title.
I like Hier kommt die Sonne (here comes the sun) because it is kind of abstractly poetic, but still relevant. Thing is, most people who see it probably won't know any German.
The other idea I'm playing with is something like Red Giant or something else about stellar evolution. Maybe even just Stellar Evolution. I don't know.
5769694
There are various mispellings. Thats just about it though...