After a incident with a wizard, the nostalgia critic, nostalgia chick, linkara, angry Joe, spony, paw, Todd in the shadows, and other members of TGWTG are sent to equestria to learn how to love and tolerate all (yes even ducy mc nitpick). However, when a new evil comes to equestria and unites all the evil forces together, they realize that they were sent there for a much bigger destiny. And now it's up to the critics and the elements of harmony to stop them. Will they get along with a bunch of technicolored donkeys so they can work together to save the world. Well what the *yay* do you think is going to happen.
Chapters (2)
this sounds promising i'll have a read later
I am so gona read this
TGWTG=auto-fave.
The grammar is left to be desired, and im not a grammar nazi, but there's a limit to what people can endure. I say if mistakes impedes reading, theres work to be done.
OMG MY DREAM CAME TRUE!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I have a feeling the TGWTG team wouldn't take too kindly to this - if it wants to live up to their standards it better be friggin' excellent.
Just some minor issues with the punctuation; it's a very good read.
Two things: First off, fix the capitalization, it's pretty bad you need to fix it as some points. Second, it's Phelous, not Phales.
But other than the the story is good, a slight copy of Suburban Knights, but good.
Mother of god.
Counting down to how long this is going to be put on Channel Awesome's fanfiction theater.
Ok this was good but I have 2 complaints.
1 fix your spelling. 2 why isn't CR here? He's a brony and its because of him I am one. He's the one that does familiar faces and cheap damage.
Linkara is the pony expert? He made one joke in one review, I don't think that qualifies him. CR's more the expert.
Story has potential, but you need to capitalize your proper nouns, improve spelling, and the like. I kinda skipped the last half of the chapter though, so... eh.
It felt a little rushed. Felt like you were trying to get to the end too fast. Also, I feel that this might be too many characters, but that can be ironed out later, or more time can make that flow better. I see a great deal of promise in this concept/story, but I would recommend you slow down. Also, some of the proper nouns were not capitalized, as punisher143 pointed out. But again, I see potential, just slow down and focus a bit more, I think.
622835 actually he made two references and the second was much more in depth then his first, which leads me to believe he is also a brony (and also Paw).
MY MIND!
625123 Hows you mind, blown
I am a huge fan of this site. I love fics with these guys, and this is the first one with LInkara in it. (I can forgive you for leaving out CR. He doesn't usually take part in the main group, other than art.)
ok just read it and what the fuck! this has just blown my fucking brain all over my bloody wall guick somepony get a mop
Kind of awkward, and kind of confusing. A few grammar errors, and from what I could ascertain, no movement forward in the plot. I think it would have been nicer to have more description of what magic Linkara and the Critic learned. And sometimes its hard to figure out who is talking. I think it would be nice to prelude the spoken parts with Such-and-Such said or said such and such, more often. But I still see potential hi-jinks happening here, and that is why I follow it.
Yay you brought in CR!
Ok, my email is anthonyyoungdale@yahoo.com. I can preread and fix errors if you'd like me to. Just let me know.
Anyways,
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and I'm going along for the ride!
Once again, Just let me know it you want some one to pre-read this. I can fix most grammatical errors before you publish each chapter.
V-Scratch and Trixie. Man, you're bringing everypony into this.
Yay. a party
695665 that sounds like a good idea. when the next chapter is done I will send it to you.
I would like to see the following changes to this fic
1: fix spelling, and grammatical errors
2: increase the vocabulary
3: go in depth on the character's actions
Poor E. Broke? I didn't expect anyone to remember that gag.
And considering Critic's papa wolfness concerning children, I think he wouldn't get so easily mad at the Crusaders.
Also, I'm still waiting for a Bat Credit Card joke.
Where is Diamanda?
623513 No, Linkara's distinctly mentioned on several occasions that he absolutely is not. Paw I don't know about though, but you could've very easily just used CR or 8-Bit Mickey, who're both avid fans of the show.
Dude's completely right about spelling and punctuation though.
Wow, you need to fix your grammer and spelling, but this had me rolling, I actually felt at times like I was watching one of their episodes, you got them all spot on! (Or at least in my opinion you did.)
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A BAT CREDIT CARD?!! I'LL KILL YOU!!! I'LL KILL YOU ALL!!! Jess Bat Credit Card Jayeesus!
Really good so far cant wait for the next one whenever it will come out
This is a good story so far, but I wish there was more chapters to read. Also, you spelled Noah's Youtube name wrong, its Spoony. I would have to agree with one guy about your grammar, and there are another Internet reviewers that are bronies too, like CR, 8-Bit Mickey, etc.