Lyra has long been pursuing the old tales of humans. Nopony else believes they are or were real, but she knows better. She WILL prove to the world they were real... and maybe learn more about them in the process.
Theresa has long been getting visions of the endtimes coming. No one else believes they are real, but she knows better. She WILL prove to the world they are real... and hopeful save it in the process.
Rated T for minor swearing and crazy people foreshadowing the armageddon.
Chapters (3)
Seems like a good start to me, I'd like to see where this goes. Keep at it!
5757430 Thanks! I can't tell you how great that is to hear. This is my first MLP fanfiction, and I was afraid that my first comment would be someone pointing out flaws. And while that's certainly fine, I love starting my story on a high note.
I hope you enjoy!
I'm finding the chapters infuriatingly short. This is a good thing mind you as it means I want more. I look forward to future updates. Keep going!
your chapters are very short. you need to lengthen them a bit. i like the premise and haven't found any major flaws to be picky about. Overall the writing is prety good. I'm just not getting enough of it XD
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Thank you guys for the feedback.
This is a recurring problem in every story I've written (this is the first FimFiction, but not the first fan fiction). They are infuriatingly short in chapters and in chapter lengths. I usually spend up to an hour total revising my chapters just to get them to the length they are now (They are about 600-800 words before I begin my rigorous editing). I am glad you guys see the upside, but this IS a problem. I'd like to get chapters to 2,000 words, but as I said in my first chapter, my writing style is wing it. As such, I don't often know what to say, and my chapters are short.
I will keep at it, and I hope to only improve from here!
It seems to have a good begining, i think I'll keep reading and see what happens
5829302 That's all I can ask for. Thank you.
Oh my goodness you did not sneak a Red VS. Blue reference in there did you? Dear sweet Luna you did! I had just barely noticed it! Well played my friend, well played.
6105378 *winks*
I absolutely love that series
6105397 *snicker* So did I, until I kinda fell out of youtube. The winds of change are ever flowing after all
6105403 How far did you get? Season 13 is shaping up to be pretty good.
I don't think I got past... The last episode I remember was when O'Rielly had Doc's body and Donut was this "Doom-Bringer" And what-not. Oh, and a jack-flank talking bomb.
6105486 Oh, only into "Blood-Gulch Chronicles?" It grew a lot since then. It created a bunch of lore and crap. Cool stuff.