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Noble Thought


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Long ago, the Crystal Empire, led by Sombra, and the changelings clashed. The Empire won, throwing the changelings into disarray, destroying their home and taking their Heart, the source of their love. Now the changelings learn that the Legacy of Hatred is more than a myth, and that Sombra is returning. He remembers a confidence shared, a betrayal done, and a vengeance wrought against him.

The changeling that betrayed him is long gone, but her descendant remains.

Chrysalis rules a fractured people, and she sees only one chance to save them.

Edited by Minds Eye
Preread by ZOMG, Auramane, Meridian Prime

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 12 )

[hype intensifies]

You have my attention, as the premise and the first chapter have made me wonder just how it will all play out. You did a wonderful job at characterizing Chrysalis and the changelings, and I could tell just how dire their situation was just on the atmosphere and the dialogue of the story. The scenes relating to Chrysalis' resentment toward Sombra were also well done, as I could feel the emotions coming from her. Excellent work as usual. :twilightsmile:

This sounds cool as crap! I'll definitely be reading it later, just not in the mood to read right now. :twilightsheepish:

Looking forward to the rest of this!

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To Hyperspace!

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Thine attention is grabbed, then. Good. Yay!

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I hope you enjoy it when you get to it.

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Me, too!

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Nuuuu! Not more puns! Please! Mercy!

5766411 Much of the chapter presented is largely confusing. I understood that Sombra is part of some legacy of hate and that the changelings were hunted by him or some other guy. A maniac old ruler of the changelings tried to face him and failed forcing the changelings to go back. Now Chrysalis tried to pass as refugee but something in the Canterlot Wedding happened and turned it into an invasion I don't know what... Or at least I don't understand. I am quite confused by the names Tally, and Quirk. Seriously don't name changelings words that can be confused within the sentence.

Care to clear my confusion out?

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So, the parts of it that I can tell without spoiling the rest is this:

The Heart is the Crystal Heart. It was stolen from them by Sombra after a losing war with the Crystal Empire, of whom the Changelings had been a part until Discord twisted them and crystallized their love, and their ability to love, into the Heart. The first Queen infiltrated both Equestria and the Crystal Empire and fomented a war between them that the Sisters put an end to when they saw the horrors wrought by Sombra. At the very last, she revealed herself to Sombra so she could bask in her victory over him.

Chrysalis had meant to have her changelings into Canterlot with little fuss, so that they could rise up in full surprise and take the capital without a fight. When her plan spoiled the day after she arrived, because of a contingency plan should all else fail, she had to whip up another on the spot, and got too cocky, letting her arrogance override her caution, and fell back into the trap her ancestor had fallen into. She caused the plan to come to the point where all else failed, but she did leave the warning so the ponies would know to watch for the return of the Empire and Sombra.

Hope that clears things up.

Fascinating start to this, I am really looking forward to more.

Very, very interested in seeing where this goes. Definitely following. Keep up the good work!

Impressive start, Noble. I look forward to more.

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