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Metool Bard


A weaver of tales who enjoys a good story. What more is there to say, really?

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Poor Daring Do. All she wanted was a nice relaxing vacation. No archenemies; no deathtraps; no ancient treasures. Just her, a few colleagues, and a front-row seat to one of the most incredible sights in Equestrian nature: The breezies.

Unfortunately, adventure has a nasty habit of finding Daring Do even when she doesn't want it to. While preparing for the breezie safari, her bumbling student Tailspin accidentally stumbles upon the evil designs of a retired empress seeking revenge. Seeing Daring as a liability, the ex-empress has her new ally place a curse on her, transforming her into the most fragile creature in Equestria.

This works. For about five minutes.

Now a few inches high and royally ticked off, Daring must get accustomed to her new body with the help of Fluttershy and the great entomologist Professor Windsday if she wants any chance at payback. Meanwhile, a guilt-ridden Tailspin drags a hapless Tree Hugger into the desert in the hopes of finding a cure. These are uncharted waters for everyone involved, but Daring doesn't mind that part. That's what makes an adventure great, after all. No, she's more concerned about being paired up with the two most annoyingly indecisive pixies in the world.

Cover art provided by the amazingly talented DavieRocket.

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This gonna be so awesome :rainbowkiss:
:twilightblush:
so far good, I will be waiting for more :pinkiesmile:

You didn't say it was this kind of vacation, though.

Better not underestimate Daring's vacations. They go to another realm, what can go unawesome?

I like where this is going. Have another favourite and follow. :twilightsmile:

Don't remember the name of the video, but it was one of daring exploring another ancient temple, and a certain tarantula tagged along after running into her outside. No ahouizotl or other bad guys. She solved a puzzle in there and nearly got sealed inside, the only reason she didn't was the tarantula warned her of the closing door before it was too late.

Tracking. Because a Fluttershy adventure with wackiness and Daring Do should be a lot of fun.

Great start! Can't wait for more! :pinkiehappy:

"Ironically enough, I get more attention when I dress up as A.K. Yearling."
"Oh? Why's that?" whispered Fluttershy.
"'Cause most ponies out there know that there's an actual pony named Daring Do," said Daring. "They just don't know that she's the same pony as the one in the books. Outside of that world, all I am is an eccentric archeology professor with a horrendous attendance record."

:rainbowhuh: Okay, that's about as clear as mud. :applejackunsure:

Anyways, this is a very interesting start to this story, and I'll be sure to keep tabs on it.

5755684 Yeah, my headcanon about Daring Do is better explained in my previous story, A Real Legend. And that story was all about retconning The Do Dilemma slightly to make it fit in with the show's canon. Which is another reason I think this should be a sequel. Again, I'm not entirely sure. :unsuresweetie:

As brilliant as ever Metool. As brilliant as ever.

...In fact, this reminds me. There's a few other fics of yours I should really get round to.

5756324 Well, thank you very much for the recommendation. I'm glad you're enjoying the story thus far. :twilightsmile:

*gasp*
BREEZY? MUST READ BECAUSE BREEZIES.

Was anyone else able to pick up on the Winnie the Pooh reference before it became obvious?

"Noted," said Tailspin, wiping a bit of sweat from his brow.

Gender error there.

Fluttershy blushed and his her face with her bangs.

hid

5765789 Whoop! Thanks for catching those, mate! :twilightblush:

And knowing my luck, it's just gonna go downhill from here...

Don't think about it, otherwise it could unexpectedly stay calm

And that is how daring do the breezie was made!

If there's one thing I've learned, it's that the greatest evil in the world is said evil's mother.

How embarrassing to be felled by your arch enemy's mother. :rainbowderp:

Ah, teacher squabbles. Those are always very entertaining. :twilightsmile:

"Tailspin, you do realize that this is exactly what I didn't want to deal with on my vacation, right?"

Has she ever thought that it might be a curse that she has to deal with exactly what she doesn't want to deal with, and she might want to find a way to break that?

The two then flew off together

Seems relatively clear why there are only two of them.

Professor Windbag just needs to shut up and let Fluttershy take charge. And Fluttershy just needs to tell him to stuff it and TAKE charge.

5785646 "Professor Windbag." Love it :ajsmug::derpytongue2::yay:

Uh.....

is this an actual lanaguage?

If so.


What are they saying?

5802267 It's my interpretation of the breezie language. I'm considering having them speak in subtitles now that Fluttershy is around to translate, but I'm worried that it would be jarring to change the breezies' dialogue without warning. I dunno, I could use some advice on that front. :applejackunsure:

Professor Windbag must be the most obtuse idiot in the world if he hasn't picked up by now that the Breezies understand Equish just fine. :facehoof:

So what's it like trying to write in a different language?

Recon shrugged one shoulder.

Do tarantula's even have shoulders? Admittedly, I'm not very familiar at all with the anatomy of arachnids--and it's not really a big deal--but I am curious. :twilightsheepish:

5802332 I'd honestly say don't put their dialogue in subtitles since they didn't even do that in the episode (but then they had visual animation to help out). You can probably avoid most of the language bits by just saying things like: Tra-La-La muttered something to Fluttershy, Tiddlywink shouted, etc. Although that might diminish the Breezies' role. :unsuresweetie:

Go for what you feel is best.

5807471 Honestly, it can be a bit tricky to maintain the breezies' Celtic-ish dialect, if only because I know next to nothing about Celtic dialect. But other than that, I just throw together gibberish words based on what little phrases we got from the show.

5807476 Truth be told, I have no idea. I just wanted to indicate that Recon was basically saying "Your guess is as good as mine." :applejackunsure:

You know, there's one rather large gaping hole in the operating logic of this story that's really bugging me.

Okay, so...except for the Mane Six and Tailspin, nobody knows A.K. Yearling's secret. Yet here we have Professor Daring, who looks like Daring Do and has the same name as Daring Do, and yet somehow, nopony is able to put two and two together and come up with "Hey, this pony IS Daring Do!"?

It just doesn't follow. :unsuresweetie:

Still loving the story, but that REALLY bugs me.

5826925 First of all, it's implied that Professor Windsday also knows Daring's secret; Tailspin just doesn't know that he knows. Beyond that, it's very much a Clark Kent/Superman effect. No one thinks to take off Clark's glasses and discover that he's Superman. By the same token, nopony thinks to check up on Daring's attendance record and find out what the heck she's been doing while she was absent.

I understand it's a bit of a cop-out, but it's the best I've got for the moment. :derpytongue2:

5827001 Mufufu, glasses, the ULTIMATE disguise!

This running gag with Tiddlywink and Tra-La-La is going to get very old, very fast at the rate of its repetition...:facehoof:

Windsday scoffed. "Ms. Fluttershy, while you may have a strong connection with animals, there is still much you need to learn about the breezies. As such, I'd greatly appreciate it if you refrained from interrupting my lecture."

"Oops. S-sorry," whimpered Fluttershy, hiding her face behind her bangs. "I'll just, be over here."

"Wow. Way to treat your almighty guest of honor, Bluster," said Daring sardonically while Recon gave Windsday the evil eye.

"I-I'm not trying to be rude to Ms. Fluttershy," Windsday sputtered.

And yet he's doing a remarkable job of precisely that!

I-it's just that, well, she's an amateur in these matters.

And yet she seems to be leaps and bounds more useful in this situation than Windbag.

Be straight with us here: are you using Tenzin and Jenora as your base model here? Because Windbag sure reminds me of Tenzin, and Fluttershy is filling Jenora's role quite neatly.

Fluttershy swallowed. "Um, well, they want to know why you think a pony would know more about breezies than the breezies themselves."

:rainbowlaugh: BREEZIE BURN!!

5861216 That's actually kinda the point. These breezies are actually G4 incarnations of the ones from that notorious G3 special Princess Promenade (you can thank Mr. Enter's review for the inspiration). Except this time, they're actually going to get punished for being annoying. How? Oh, you'll see. :pinkiecrazy:

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Be straight with us here: are you using Tenzin and Jenora as your base model here? Because Windbag sure reminds me of Tenzin, and Fluttershy is filling Jenora's role quite neatly.

I actually have no idea who those two are. :rainbowderp:

5861254 Huh. So it's coincidence. Weird.

(You haven't watched The Legend of Korra?)

5861254 Have you not seen the legend of korra?

5861300 Nope. I've heard of it, but I haven't checked it out. All I know is that it's a spiritual successor to Avatar: The Last Airbender and that's about it. :applejackunsure:

5861332 Sequel/continuation actually.

5861216
Hopefully the breezies take a note from the Tensies and just take turns.

No, she's more concerned about being paired up with the two most annoyingly indecisive pixies in the world.

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Fluttershy's words of wisdom.

5940504 For all Navi is, she's never been indecisive. Anything but, really; she's insistent and repetitive. She is an annoying pixie/fairy, though.

"You forget that I'm not an adventurer like Professor Do," he muttered to himself, following Fluttershy. "I do so hope Professor Cheerilee had some sense and informed the proper authorities. Otherwise, this expedition really is going to be the death of me..."

Oooh! Oooh! Reaaaaaaaally hoping for that last part to happen!

"They're really that scared of him, huh?"

Is he made out of breezies' fears? He is big and his weapon can make opponent smaller.

translation for those who don't speak breezie?

bet that's Recon, even though it says single eye

I don't know if Chakras and Mojo are actually part of the same belief system.

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