Derpy's Grand Adventure

Derpy's adventure into a not so familiar land and her journey in it. She meets new friends as her old ones try to get her back.

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Muffin Dispenser · 5th Dec 2011 · 1,596 words
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Striking Steel · 11th Jul 2012 · 1,481 words
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War Of The Gods · 20th Jan 2012 · 1,528 words
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Banksyt

Banksyt #1 · Nov 9th, 2011 · · · Muffin Dispenser ·

"clopping" down the stairs... you realize what that entails right? (clop,clop,clop... catch my drift?) also i kinda went a little too quickly... try to lengthen it with a bit of description. Also, i don't really like the stereotyping that ditsy is dumb because of her lopsided eyes... try and edge that out please.... but other than that its rather interesting... and plus you can now carry two story lines...

KingofBronies

KingofBronies #2 · Nov 9th, 2011 · · · Muffin Dispenser ·

28169 I was trying to make her a bit more silly and confused then dumb. I Imagine cause of her eyes she'd crash into a lot of things too. I'll try editing it to help its length. Two story lines is the plan :D

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