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(Second-person fic)
You are a school-age colt who hates Hearts and Hooves Day with a passion and wishes the holiday would leave as soon as it arrives. All that changes when you run into the local bully Diamond Tiara. You say something nice to her and suddenly your world starts to change...
EDIT: Featured on 3/9!
EDIT: Third Place Winner of the Poniverse Hearts and Hooves Day Contest!
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Nice little story.
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Aww, thanks.
5715512 You're welcome.
I'll admit, normally, I LOATH Diamond Tiara, but you actually turned her into a decent character. Impressive.
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That's exactly what I was aiming for. I wanted to show that she could have a heart.
5715531 Well you've succeeded.
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Thank you so much. And thanks fur the watch, too!
5715540 Thank you for the follow as well.
Good job on the story. I felt it really showed Diamond Tiara in a new light i haven't seen before.
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I appreciate it.
it ran just like an episode of the show! I enjoyed reading, great job!
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Thanks! Glad you liked it.
Well we probably already knew something would go wrong. That was a nice story.
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Thanks.
Great story, but there's a minor thing you may want to edit.
That should be "from".
Huh. I actually never thought I'd live to see the day Diamond Tiara would be nice; in my eyes anyway. It was kind of a heartwarming experience.
~ Kappa The Emoticon
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Fixed, thanks.
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Thanks.
At her age, I think Diamond is a redeemable character. I just wish the show would explore why she's so mean to the crusaders.
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Diamond Tiara: filly, bully, mafioso.
This fic is kind of amazing. Not only did you take one of the most loathed POVs in fan fiction, but you also took one of the most loathed characters in MLP as well (not that she doesn't have her fans), put the readers in the shoes of a colt who's supposed to get a crush on her (and this includes readers in their teens, 20s, 30s, or even 40s or older, definitely somewhat uncomfortable if pulled off poorly), and made it not only work, but likable, adorable, and all around, super sweet! Well done, Yoshi, well done indeed, I am impressed to say the least.
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I'm so glad you liked it.
I wrote this with the intention of the reader getting to know a different side of Diamond Tiara. I started with the mood everyone was familiar with and wanted to show that all characters can be reasonable if given a chance. Can't wait for the contest results!
Nice! Batbrony was right about your choice in POV--it's used very well. I love how you used the CMC: being on the receiving end of their antics is something I don't think I've ever seen before, and it was adorably amusing. Also, you did a good job with Tiara's characterization in that she was still recognizable as the filly from the show, but definitely showing "a different side," as you put it. Congrats on third place!!
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Thanks.
I was going for the interactive approach so I made it a scenario as to what would happen if the fandom gave Diamond Tiara a chance. It's also rare for the CMC to be portrayed as meaning actual harm along with Diamond chewing them out when they actually deserve it. This being Hearts and Hooves Day-themed added up for a lot of potential to bring a hated character into a positive light.
Congrats on winning! I enjoyed reading your entry. I'm going to post a detailed review soon.
That felt like the most genuine depiction of the CMC and Diamond Tiara. Such a nice slice of life romance. Probably the sweetiest 2nd person romance story with Diamond I've read in forever. Derp, nice S1 re-imagining (if that was intended) there with the CMC arguing over the singing and playing piano stuff. That was too cute.
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Thank you.
Yeah, I wanted to bring back elements of "The Show Stoppers" with them fighting over music along with whether or not they should help Diamond of all ponies. I also wanted to show that them getting back at Diamond could have consequences which is why I had them feel remorseful.
Holiday Stories ~ ACCEPTED!
This was really good. Well done!
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Thank you.
No, I am not a little colt. I'm a woman. I also don't hate Hearts and Hooves day. You've already decided to forcibly make sure your story is impossible to immerse into.
6172318 yes, expect the author to fit EVERYONE in a 2nd person fic perfectly, perfectly reasonable
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Thank you.
Nice work.
Although: the romance, storyline, and structure do feel little rushed. The dialogue is sometimes clunky, and the overall fic could use a bit of editing.
Still, a decent work: got more than a few chuckles out of me.
When the dad WANTS you to date his daughter