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If you could change fate, would you? For Fate, it isn't an option. For many lifetimes she encountered dead end after dead end in this cruel maze. If she wants to see past November of 1987 she must uncover the truth behind her deaths and escape Fate's Labyrinth.

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Sounds like a pretty cool premise to be honest. I like the way its set up, as a kind of trial and error/mystery kind of thing. Sounds like it'll be very interesting!

572301 Well, I'm glad you like what I've come up with so far! Although, I must be honest, I may not finish it unless I get more viewers to motivate me. I'll make a few more chapters and see where it goes from there.


Blank Flanks?

Just got here, gonna read it.

"Jade spotted the cloud. She stared flying as swiftly as she could. She went so fast she actually broke the sound barrier! The sonic boom nearly busted our ear drums."

Mary Sue-ish. Rainbow Dash is supposed to be the fastest.

Other than that, if they keep dying and coming back to life it HAS to be a spell or a potion or some other for it to make sense. This story, however, doesn't even tell you how that happened. This part is poor, so you must edit it or it's going to be confusing and then, BAM. It's going to get a Mary Sue-like problem. But anyways, it's a fantastic story. No, i'm not a story reviewer or some other, i'm a reader with ideas and things you need to improve on and is not really important to writers.


Well, thank you for the input. I will take it into consideration if I decide to write more. At the moment, I don't really have the time to write. :unsuresweetie: Hopefully when my summer classes end though :twilightsheepish:

Umm is it just me or is this a cross over of higurashi no naku koro ni. I mean if it isn't then that wouldn't add up I mean even the old maid scene is identical to it. well reading this I found the first chapter to be a ponyfied version of the first episode. I don't mind a cross over but you should at least note that as what it is. I kind of dislike how you decided to spoil the end right at the begining of the prolouge. I mean you made a clunky explaination at best, and you ruined the whole what is happening why are events repeating factor that empowered higurashi. also it was an arm not the head :) . Oh and for anyone who doesn't belive me here is a clip with an identical scene almost line for line : http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KJBeYhiXRpQ

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