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Sheltie Paws

Hi! I'm editing this later, and remember, I do follows for follows!


An ancient spell that has kept Princess Celestina's and Luna's sister disappear from all memories is on the brink of being broken. The sisters set out to find not only their little sibling, but a chain of fractured memories and forgotten dreams.

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Comments ( 18 )

Ah, quite an interesting take on the stars! I myself have a story about the stars, though it's more of a tale of where the stars came from in the first place. And I'm liking where your story is going so far!

A few grammatical things, though:
"...the sisters normmaly had a quick diner..."
Diner should be dinner.

"As quickly as it , whatever it was, had come it vanished."
I would write this as, "As quickly as it - whatever it was - had come, it vanished."

"This is my sister.Celestia thought."
You'll want to add a space between sister and Celestia, and change the period after sister to a comma.

"...the thump of it's hooves..."
"It's" means "it is" rather than "belonging to it," so it's should be its here.

"there was an edge to it's voice."
The start of the sentence needs to be capitalized, and once again, it's should be changed to its.

All in all though, nice story! I shall be checking back for more. :twilightsmile:

5726263 , thanks for the tips!!!!!:pinkiehappy:

You're very welcome! Can't wait to see more! And thank you for the follow!

You have the potential to go very far

Wow! As your first story, I am very impressed!!


Very nicely done!


I can't believe I got so many favorites!:pinkiegasp:

I will see where this goes.

stop being so short but great chapter:pinkiesmile:

gives me little to read but me want morrrrrre

congrats! love it already, can't wait to read the next chapter!
P.S. wouldn't twilight raise the stars? :duck: no i guess not :twilightblush: sorry,

6526521 , that's a thought....

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