Chapter 10
“Rise an’ shine, sleepyhead,” Applejack said as she opened the barn doors.
No response.
She walked over to the improvised bed in the corner of the barn. Suncloak was still in bed, but he wasn’t moving. She poked it for good measure.
“Go ‘way,” the changeling mumbled. “Not feeling well.”
Applejack chuckled. “That party too much for ya? Ya’ll get used to it, promise.” She started tugging on his sheet. “Now come on, there’s stuff to be done.”
Suncloak stuck out his tongue as he rolled out of bed. “Yegh. Took too much love.”
“Ya can do that?” Applejack asked while she scratched the back of her head.
“Of course,” the changeling answered. “A pony eats too much food, they get a stomach ache. A changeling takes too much love, they get a stomach ache.” He wasn’t entirely sure he should call this an ache, though. He had been near starvation the night before, but the ponies had given him some love in the form of friendship. When he got back to the party, however, there were several hundred ponies, all of which interested in a changeling who managed to become friends with the Elements of Harmony.
Several hundred ponies who were all too eager to give little bits of that same love to him. Love which he had taken, since it was meant for him. No sense in letting that go to waste, right?
Well, that was what he thought then. It was an all-you-can-eat buffet, and he took pretty much all of the food. Turns out it was pretty stupid, since he now had the mother of all stomach aches. Or a stomach implosion. He couldn’t really tell the difference.
On the plus side, he finally wasn’t hungry anymore.
“Makes sense,” Applejack said. “Now come on. Ya’ll feel better later.”
Suncloak sure hoped so. He started to put his cloak on, but paused as he looked at the white blanket. Applejack had given him a replacement blanket for the night, since he’d given the things he took when he first entered Ponyville back to their owners. Fluttershy’s rag, Rainbow Dash’s sunglasses and Rarity’s safety pin. He didn’t need those anymore, since all the ponies in Ponyville knew he was a changeling now.
Still, it felt weird to go outside without his cloak. So did talking to ponies without wearing a disguise, and so did having love handed to him. A lot of things felt weird right now.
“Uh, right. No disguise needed anymore,” he said. “What did you need me for?”
“Pinkie Pie just came by,” the orange earth pony answered, “she told me to get you and head for Carousel Boutique, ‘cause there’s a surprise.”
Suncloak shot her a deadpan look. “Is it another party?”
Applejack made a motion, as if zipping her lips. “Can’t tell ya. It’s a surprise.” Right. What a lousy Element of Honesty.
“Whatever, let’s go,” the changeling said as he started moving outside. It would’ve gone a lot faster if the sun wasn’t so bright, though. And the smells in the air weren’t doing him any good, either. The soft, sweet smell of the love of friendship was making him nauseous, but it was slightly muted by a subtle, sour scent in the air. It felt familiar, but he couldn’t really figure out why. “Something smells bad. I thought we cleaned up?”
Applejack sniffed the air. “Ah only smell hay. Ya sure ya aren’t smellin’ some kinda love again?”
“No, this isn’t love. I’ll figure it out,” Suncloak said as they left.
Not much later, they arrived at Carousel Boutique. The other Elements of Harmony were there, waiting for Suncloak and Applejack to arrive. Pinkie Pie seemed to be rather energetic for some reason.
Well, more so than usual.
What Suncloak was more interested in, was the fact that Rarity was there as well. A perfect opportunity to see if he completely understood what friendship was about.
He cleared his throat as he approached her. “Rarity, according to my changeling standards, you are the most revolting and hideous thing I have ever seen, but according to pony standards, I guess you are very pretty.” There, both honest and kind. Friendship is simple!
Rarity gave him a confused look. “Uh... Th-thank you? I think?” She turned to Fluttershy and whispered, “Was that an insult or a compliment?”
Fluttershy simply shrugged. “I don’t know,” she whispered back.
“Regardless,” Rarity said as she turned to Suncloak again, “we have something to show you!”
“But we can’t tell what it is yet,” Pinkie Pie said whilst bouncing up and down in front of the changeling, “because it’s a surprise! And it’s a really really really really really really-”
Rainbow Dash cut the hyperactive pony off by jamming a hoof in her mouth. “Sheesh Pinkie, calm down.” She removed her hoof while she said, “But it’s pretty cool, yeah.”
“Well, let’s go and take a look,” Twilight said.
“Hold on,” Suncloak said. He sniffed the air a few times. That sour scent was still hanging in the air, but it was slightly stronger now.
“Ya smellin’ that same stuff again, Suncloak?” Applejack asked.
The ponies all smelled the air. “I don’t smell anything,” Twilight stated. The others nodded in confirmation.
Okay, so it was something only he could smell. It wasn’t love, since love always smelled sweet. He raised one hoof and smelled his own body. No, that wasn’t it either. “It’s...” he started. What was it? Something only a changeling could smell, but it wasn’t love. Then it had to be... “another changeling.”
“Another changeling?” Rainbow Dash asked. “Is it somepony you know?”
“No idea,” Suncloak answered. He sniffed the air a few times. “I think it’s coming from the forest. Or somewhere nearby.”
Pinkie Pie loudly gasped. “You know what this means?! A new changeling means a new friend! Let’s go look for him!” She sped off towards the Everfree Forest before anyone could object.
Twilight gave Suncloak a questioning look. “Let’s go to the forest,” the changeling told her.
A few minutes, a lot of smelling, and some pathfinding later, they had found the other changeling. Currently, they were looking at him while sitting in a bush. To the ponies, he looked identical to Suncloak, but Suncloak himself could tell numerous differences. Slight variation in eye color, amount of holes in the hooves, things like that.
“Right, you six stay here, I’ll go talk to him,” he said, before stepping out of the bush. He cleared his throat rather loudly, causing the other changeling to turn around, and said, “State occupation, rank, and business.” Short and to the point, just like he would’ve done if he was still a royal guard.
“Strike team four, number 21, ranked third, currently on my way to scout the village just ahead,” the other changeling said. “Who’re you?” he asked. “Wait,” he said, getting closer to Suncloak to inspect him. “Aren’t you the one who was banished a few days ago?”
Oh, great, so news was getting around. Which wasn’t exactly surprising, since banishment from the hive doesn’t happen very often. “Yes,” he answered, “so I technically have no name, rank or objective.”
“Whoooaaa,” #21 said, throwing a hoof around Suncloak’s neck. Great, one of the overly touchy changelings. “We didn’t think you’d still be walking around right now.” Apparently, he wasn’t one of the overly subtle changelings. “How’re you doing, buddy?”
Suncloak shrugged him off. “That doesn’t matter. You said you were scouting?” Scouting usually meant two things: either he was heading to Ponyville to keep a few ponies under surveillance, or he was checking to see if it was a good feeding ground.
“Yeah, I got orders and stuff saying I need to check if the village is safe for us changelings and whatnot. There’s a few of us nearby and we could kinda use some dinner,” #21 answered. “But now that you’re here, you can just tell me, and then we can go back to the hive! I’ll just explain everything and then you’ll be accepted back in nice and easy. I’m not ranked third in my team for nothing.”
Back to the hive? So he could leave Ponyville and its annoying ponies and confusing friendship behind? Suncloak shot a look back to the bush where the six ponies were hiding. They were silent, but looked expectantly at him. “Uh, I don’t know,” he mumbled to himself.
“Oh come on, don’t dawdle like that.” #21 took hold of one of Suncloak’s hooves and started pulling him in what was probably the direction of the hive. Suncloak didn’t budge, however. “We go back to the hive, and then you can do... whatever it was you did, and take love from those dumb ponies and junk. You managed to do that without changing your appearance, so we can get everyling together and suck those ponies dry!”
Suncloak pulled his hoof back. “No.”
“What, ‘no’?” #21 asked indignantly. “Did you get a few holes in your brains?”
“No, I didn’t take love from these ponies,” Suncloak answered. This guy was seriously annoying. “I didn’t steal it either. And they aren’t as dumb as you think, either.” Sure, they weren’t all as smart, but they’d certainly turned out a lot more clever than he thought.
#21 gave him a confused look. “Wait, wait, wait. What’re you talking about? You didn’t take or steal love? Ponies aren’t dumb? Did you hit your head?”
Actually, yes, and repeatedly at that. “They gave me love, even though they know I’m a changeling. They’re friendly and forgiving, but they’re also clever and shrewd, if they want to be.”
“So a pony fell in love with you?” #21 asked. “How’d you do that?”
Suncloak slapped himself in the face with a hoof. “No, not like that. They wanted to be friends with me. Apparently, that comes with its own brand of love.”
#21 looked at him for a moment, then gave a short laugh. “Okay, you had me going there for a while. You just look so serious! Now let’s go,” he said, as he started pulling on one of Suncloak’s hooves again.
“No,” Suncloak said again. “I’m not in a good mood, so go away.” He could hear a grinding sound somewhere. Oh, those were his teeth. This conversation was getting seriously aggravating.
“I thought you were never in a good mood,” #21 quipped.
Suncloak stuck his face forward, making it so he was about an inch away from the other changeling’s face. “I thought you liked having all of your teeth in your mouth,” he said with a growl.
#21 let go of Suncloak’s hoof, and backed away slightly. “But-”
“I’m not that smart, and I’m not always very nice,” Suncloak said, cutting the other changeling off. “But these ponies accepted me anyway, when they could’ve locked me up instead. Give me one good reason to go back to a hive filled with jerks rather than stay in a village filled with ponies who would like to be my friend.”
“Oh come on, a changeling can’t be friends with ponies! I’ve never even heard of that before. It’s silly and stupid. A changeling belongs with other changelings, that’s how it works,” #21 reasoned. It sounded like incredibly dumb reasoning, which was to be expected, honestly.
“If everyling back at the hive is this moronic, I’d rather stay here in Ponyville,” Suncloak said swiftly. He glanced back to the bush where his new friends were still watching. “Here, I’m Suncloak, and not just another royal guard. It feels right being here.”
“So...” #21 took a few steps back. “You sure you don’t want to go back to the hive? You actually want to stay here?”
Suncloak shot him an annoyed look. “I’d rather cut down a really big tree with a herring than go back to the hive.”
#21 tried walking around him, but found his path blocked by Suncloak. “Hey, what gives? I still have a job to do!”
“No, you don’t,” Suncloak said, getting up close to the other changeling again. “You’re going to turn tail and go back to the hive. Tell them that if anyling, and I mean anyling, gets close to this village again,” He prodded the other changeling’s chest with a hoof, pushing him to the ground. “I’ll throw them out myself. Got that?”
#21 meekly nodded. He seemed to be trying to stand up, but Suncloak’s hoof on his chest kept him down. “Yessir,” he swiftly spoke.
“Good,” Suncloak said as he withdrew his hoof. “Now scram, you white grub!” he yelled.
#21 left so fast that he left little dust clouds in his wake.
As Suncloak turned to leave, he saw the six ponies behind him leave their hiding place. “Whoa, ya weren’t a royal guard for nothin’, I guess,” Applejack said.
“You sure showed him who’s boss, Suncloak!” Rainbow Dash jubilantly said.
“Are you sure that was a good idea?” Twilight asked.
A good idea? Eating something sweet after dinner was a good idea. Challenging an entire hive of changelings, on the other hoof, was not. As far as good ideas went, it ranked all the way at the bottom, somewhere between ‘releasing Discord from his stone prison’ and ‘paint yourself white’.
Suncloak shook his head as he walked past them. “It doesn’t matter if it’s a good idea or not. I’m staying here, and that’s that.” Honestly speaking, he was somewhat worried, but also oddly satisfied. “You wanted to show me something, right?”
“Oh, of course,” Fluttershy said timidly. “Your surprise. Um, let’s go?”
They all agreed, and went to... whatever that surprise would be. Hopefully, it’d be better than meeting another changeling.
Not much later, they reached a broad street, some distance away from Ponyville’s center. They stopped at about the halfway point of the street, where Twilight pointed to one rather small house. “Tadaah!”
Suncloak arched an eyebrow. “Uh, what am I looking at?” he said after a few seconds.
“It’s a house. Duh,” Rainbow Dash said with a roll of her eyes. Thank you, Rainbow Dash. Next, she’d say something incredibly profound like ‘you’re standing on a road’ or ‘there are clouds in the sky’.
Before Suncloak could give a snarky reply, Rarity said, “I happened to know that this house has been vacant for some time. I thought this would be just perfect!”
Suncloak’s eyebrow arched a bit higher. “Perfect for what? What’re you talking about?”
“Well, ya can’t sleep in the barn forever,” Applejack said. Really? The barn would be fine, honestly. There was a bed and it was pretty roomy. What more does a changeling need? Well, there was the whole being woken up early thing, but he could probably ignore that in the future. Actually, more things would require ignoring in the future. Possibly Pinkie Pie.
“We thought you’d like your own place to live, and, um, it seemed like a nice house,” Fluttershy softly spoke.
Suncloak’s other eyebrow decided to join the other up on his forehead, probably because it felt lonely. “Wait, you did, but, I don’t even... Uh... A house! Sunday!” he said, waving his hooves in the general direction of said house.
“Oh, it doesn’t matter that it’s sunday. The ponies at the town hall were surprisingly lenient when they considered I was the personal student of Princess Celestia,” Twilight said as she levitated a set of keys out of her mane.
“I don’t know what to say,” Suncloak said. He really didn’t, which was pretty aggravating. Did he really deserve this? And if he didn’t, how could he possibly make up for it? He felt indebted now. Ugh. He just decided to hold his hoof out to accept the keys.
“Well, here are the keys. Why don’t you take a look inside?” Twilight said as she dropped the keys into Suncloak’s hoof.
With a clatter, the keys fell on the ground. Suncloak shot an angry look towards his own hoof. The keys had fallen through one of the holes, apparently. “Stupid holes. One day, I’m going to buy a ton of corks, paint them black, and put them in there. Why do I even have these stupid things?!”
Twilight chuckled slightly. “Sorry.” Well, she couldn’t actually be blamed. Not every day that she’d give things to a changeling.
Suncloak picked up the keys and walked to the front door of the house. His house. That felt kind of weird, actually. Changelings lived together in a hive, so a place to call his own was... Odd, to say the least. “What’s next, a housewarming party?” he joked aloud.
As soon as he opened the door, he was assaulted by a combination of noise, confetti, and streamers, knocking him backwards. From his new location on the ground, the changeling grumbled and looked at Pinkie Pie.
Said pink pony was grinning from ear to ear. “Do you like it, Sunny?”
Rarity, on the other hoof, looked wide-eyed at the party pony. “Pinkie? How did you put all of that in the house? You didn’t have anything with you when we came to see the house this morning and now you...” She sighed and looked at the mess on the doorstep. “Never mind. It doesn’t matter.”
Suncloak sighed and agreed. Whatever Pinkie Pie does, don’t question it. That was at least one thing he had learned. He had to laugh when he realized that he had just accepted that someling had done something that made no sense at all.
“I think I put a teensy bit too much force behind it, though,” Pinkie Pie said. No kidding. “Sorry. I don’t want to hurt anypony for a laugh.”
Suncloak stood up, dusted himself off and pulled a streamer out of his ear. Oddly, he felt like just outside of his vision, someling was watching him and laughing at his misfortune.
Someling should really stop doing that.
“It doesn’t matter,” Suncloak said as he stepped into his house, and took a look around on the ground floor.
Like it had seemed from the outside, it was a pretty small building. Through the front door was a kitchen, followed by a living room. Fortunately, there was already furniture. A couch and a few chairs surrounded a small table. There was a dining table surrounded by a few chairs as well, but he probably wouldn’t need that very often. Or did he, now that he had friends? There were also plenty of windows, which made it feel a lot different from the dark changeling hive.
The living room was connected to a little hallway, where there was a door to the back yard, which was little more than grass. There was also a trapdoor, leading to an empty basement. A narrow flight of stairs lead to the first floor.
Up on the first floor were a bathroom with the usual equipment, and a bedroom with a bed, a closet and a single window.
“So, what do you think?” Rainbow Dash asked him.
Suncloak tapped his chin with a hoof. “It’s...” Horrid, tacky, cramped, awful. He could think of a ton of words to describe the building. It felt so different from the sleeping rooms in the changeling hive. This was all light, fluffy and inviting, where the hive was all dark, dank and foreboding.
He opened the window and took a look outside. Ponies were walking around, going about their usual sunday routines. Some ponies he didn’t recognize from the party saw him and hurried on to where they were going. Well, he couldn’t blame them. He’d probably have done the exact same thing.
However, some other ponies saw him looking out of the window and smiled at him. The Cutie Mark Crusaders even passed by in their scooter-and-cart combination, waving at him and shouting a greeting he didn’t quite understand. Suncloak merely waved back.
He looked behind him. Six ponies were standing there. Probably six of the most famous and important ponies in Equestria. Six ponies who were willing to become his friend. A changeling’s friend.
The changeling hadn’t been particularly nice to them behind their backs. And then, when he was at his lowest point, they had the perfect chance to get rid of him. But they did not, and instead decided to help him.
A large smile crept across his face as he found the perfect word to describe what he thought.
“It’s home.”
And that's it for Thrown Abroad! But don't worry (unless you didn't like this, then you probably should), I still want to continue writing about Suncloak. It just won't be in this story. Anyway, here are some people who are really, really awesome:
Noble Cause: 'cause he's 'my' pre-reader for Equestria Daily. When I saw that this story was greenlighted, it was probably one of the happiest moments I've had in a long, long time. It takes a special kind of amazing to be this amazing!
Bob from Bottles: Because he helped me out with a few errors in the earlier chapters in the story, making them much more polished now. Any help in writing is always cool!
Everyone in the Dutch Bronies IRC: For putting up with my endless fawning over how well this fic was doing, and for giving me a lot of motivation to write further. And for giving me the idea to submit to Equestria Daily in the first place. Sorry for being so annoying, hehe.
Everyone who favourited, rated and commented: Yes, about all 1000 of you. Ho-ly manure, did I not expect this to take off as it did. Every time I had a notification, it motivated me that much more to write this story, and try and make it better with every chapter. I hope I did well, and I hope you enjoyed this story as much as I enjoyed writing it!
Edit: You can now find the sequel, My Little Changeling: Friendship is Weird, right here! If you enjoyed this story, chances are you'll enjoy that as well!
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And that's it! Now, I am finally free from this torment! Nah, just kidding, it was a lot of fun to write this. I was running out of material for this story, so I decided to end it here. But it's not the end of Suncloak's misadventures! I'm working on planning out some stories, episode-style, but with different characters. There's only so much you can do with the Mane Six, so I'm thinking of mixing it up a little.
Also, this story has almost 1000 favourites and I've got over 100 watchers now. I didn't even prepare myself for something like this
Wat do
Daaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaawwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww
"It's home, *tear shed*, it's really home."
Can't wait for Suncloak's shananigans to continue.
Yay !
it's... over? huh...
This was a most excellent ending to the story, so good call on your choice of finishing it here even though I personally would have loved to see it go on. You're planning a sequel though so I'm content all around. Wonderful closure combines with the delicious promise of more Suncloak misadventures with clever, scheming, ponies.
That last line was really touching and fit the over all tone and flow of the story. You deserve every star and follower you got for this story. Bravo Niaeruzu, bravo I say!
801675 I look forward to more.
Really great story you have here, I'll be looking forward to any sequals, sidestories or spin-offs you might have planned
This story definatly deserves it's 1000 or more fans! I can't wait to see what the future has in store for Suncloak.
one word: Epic
great job.
okay, ponyville is much bigger than a village, consider it a town.
801675 wow just wow you've Done a great job think you could shoot me a message when you come up with more gold I'd love to read more about sun cloak
also any thoughts on him finding a way to make him self different from any other channeling for the pony's sake?
Celestia: hello my little channeling
Suncloak: think of something to say I LOVE YOUR COLOR
Very awsome! Have a moustache.
Also: Write more!
thanks for providing reading material for my phone. anyway, great fic, can't wait to hear more about suncloak!
Stairs up to the FIRST floor, huh?
Sorry, Americans call the ground floor the first floor. ;) Ah well, just me being a jerk, don't mind me.
An excellent end to a good story, sir. I'm glad you wrote it and shared it with all of us. I'll be sure to keep my eyes open for more from you.
Well wasn't it a bloody good story.
First I was a bit disappointed to see it's completed
but then you wrote that you want to continue.
I sure I'm not the only one who would like to hear about
Suncloak living among ponies, so consider yourself watched.
And thanks for great story.
That was a perfect place to end it. Bravo, man. I better follow you, or whatever it is on here, so I don't miss another story.
This was a fun light hearted read. Awesome job!
801675 "Everyone who favourited, rated and commented: Yes, about all 1000 of you."
Lies! only 530 people rated, and sure as heck less than 1000 comments!
Awww it's over?
Great story, looking forward to whatever you write next!
801675
There is no escape from us now that you've written such a story, your fate is sealed.
Well, this was a pretty good point to close out the story. Suncloak's gotten his welcome party, he's accepted by the town, and more importantly, by the Mane Six as a friend, and he's had the necessary encounter with another changeling now, so that he's had a chance to make his choice as to which group he's going to run with for now. (Nice encounter with the scout, by the way. That particular conversation flowed quite naturally.) I found it a little amusing that in the short time he's been in Ponyville, he got to the point where he actually had to work to remember what another changeling "feels" like to his senses. It seems a little on the short side time-wise for that to be the case, but I can run with it.
And so now he's got his own digs in the town proper, it should be interesting to see what happens from this point on. Hopefully, you've got some ideas that will weave well into further stories with him, since you've now got us thoroughly invested in this character. All in all, excellent work!
great story pure awesomeness but I have the feeling that the things that he said to the other changling might come back to bite him is the butt. also something he could have done was share the love he already had since he was overly full, that would have totally thrown the other changlings for a loop and confused them greatly. but then again that could also blow up in his face if the changlings decide that since he was willing to give away love then there must be plenty to go around in that town. hmmm
801675 Do you know what the sequel is going to be called? It'd be nice to not pass over it in the future by not recognizing it.
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I don't know the name yet, but if you want to read it as soon as I post it, you can watch me by going to my user page and clicking the 'watch' button. When I do stuff, you'll instantly be notified!
Anyling that did not like this story should all go back to the Hive and kiss Chrysalis sorry ass and beg for forgiveness.
Great story. I was sad that the story was over, but got happy again when you said it was only the beginning. Peace out Homeling.(
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You want to make more Sunclock we want to read more sunclock!
Such a cute story. I love Suncloak, he's so funny! Can't wait for the sequel!!!
That was actually a pretty good ending. Kinda sad for it to stop but...all good things ya know?
The sequel: A Traitor's Dissonant Fugue, in A minor (unless you're playing an accordion, then it's G-flat)
ULTRAGRIMDARK!!!! The Changelings return with a vengeance! They free Discord and are given POWER to feed on all emotions, turning them into ULTIMATE EMOTIONAL VAMPIRES!!! Thousands of ponies are drained into listless shells, which soon DIE!!
And Suncloak can do nothing as he's brought before the Queen and made to watch as she drains the Mane 6 slowly and tortuously one by one! And Discord EATS CELESTIA AND LUNA FOR ULTIMATE REVENGE!
After he turns them into chocolate.
BLOODY CHOCOLATE!!
Like chocolate covered cherries.
EXCEPT THE CHERRIES ARE THEIR HEARTS!!! FILLED WITH BLOOD!!!
But then Doctor Whooves shows up and reveals that if he takes Suncloak back in time he can change everything! But... to do it he must infect himself with a mutagenic virus and return to the hive! The only way to save the ponies is to EXTERMIATE HIS ENTIRE SPECIES AND THEN DIE!!!
SO MUCH GRIMDARKNESS ENSUES IT CANNOT EVEN BE DESCRIBED BECAUSE YOU WOULD DIE FROM IT!!
This is clearly what happens next.
GOD DAMNIT ALL THE STORIES I LIKE ARE ENDING!!!
WHYYY!!!!
but I guess I cant blame people for being epic
so therefore
I must say this line with the help of chuck norris
I APROVE OF THIS ENDING
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Know what I said about 100 followers? Never mind, it's 200 now.
O u gais
*stands up* *starts clapping slowly*
Great story, I really enjoyed it. Wasn't expecting it to end like that but hey, you through me for a loop and that's not easy to do. Congrats on making EqD too! I hope you keep writing about Suncloak and his misadventures around Ponyville! Looking forward to it.
I agree with your reasoning - it felt a good time to end the story.
Thus said, this was a very enjoyable read. How enjoyable? I plan on re-reading it soon, and I do NOT do that for many fanfics. I found Suncloak to be very likeable and look forward to seeing more of him in the future. Maybe a few "slice of life" shots, with him being shanghai'd into some girly activities or a meeting with the Princess?
Any way it goes, I had fun. And so did Celestia.
Thanks for writing.
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That Monty Python reference was spiffy.
I've got nothing witty to say so I shall say:
Awesome story bro.
You should make a bunch more Sun cloak awesomeness.
801844 Tia: Oh, well *blushes* thank you
: Yes, I did.
Sunny: come ON! you couldn't think of something be- wait, did she just say thank you?
Sunny: ... wat...
Excellent story! You did a great job with the characterization of Suncloak and description of his change in character!
If you do intend to write more about Suncloak in another story, be sure to link us from this one to the other. I'd like to see what other shenanigans our black friend gets up to!
You know... I'm okay with it ending here.
I'm supposed to be talking about stories on the internet.
The thing about good stories is... they have a part that can be distinctly called an "end".
Sure, sequels sell more copies than the original but they're never as good as the original...
...oh, whoops
But, yeah. Same idea: if a writer tries to drag on a good story long after a place that could have been acceptable as "the end", it tends to grow stale and overused.
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Sorry, I didn't mean to discourage you. I'm just putting two cents worth of my opinion in.
Rant over.
Long story short: good work, Niaeruzu.
Yes.
That was a good read. I'd really enjoy the continued misadventures of Suncloak, though I think you were right to finish this particular story here.
Its over? But...you just set up the whole "Ponyville vs The Hive" thing.
Fine then. HURRY UP WITH THAT SEQUEL!
Ah! I love this story. You sir, did a great job!
ITS SO BEAUTIFUL
and i love it
Suncloak is simply a dear and I can't wait to hear more about him
Congratulations this story has earned you another watcher 
Fantastic ending (even though it snuck up on me
) I do have a question though, in future stories, do you intend to have a conflict with Suncloak and the rest of the changeling army?
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I have thoroughly enjoyed reading this story. Thanks for writing it!
PERFECT ENDING!!
This is why you're awesome. I would favorite you, but I already did that so yeah!! Loved it from start to end.
“I thought you liked having all of your teeth in your mouth,”
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“I’d rather cut down a really big tree with a herring than go back to the hive.”
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I PETITION TO ADD A CHANGELING EMOTICON TO FIMFICTION, IN ALL CAPS